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7/20 c2 Dragon Bone Z
You must be a very skilled D&D gamemaster.
7/16 c3 Phantasys
Love how you're humanizing (lol, irony) Haromir here. We all know how he ends up getting REMAAAAN'ed.
7/13 c2 Phantasys
Hopefully our main character doesn't end up a smear on the mace of Pelinal Whitestrake.
6/27 c2 3Aky1y
I like the new outlook from a half-elf in the First Era. Few stories do that.
6/13 c1 14Stormasius
Alrighty, it's nice to see the fruit of our idea bouncing and this story start to come together. There was some really great imagery with that opening scene and just getting the feel for Cyrod in it's more primal days as a jungle. Something I almost forgot along with the fact that Lake Rumare that surrounds the future Imperial City wouldn't be there yet when I remember there are some Ayleid ruins found at the bottom of it, it'll probably be a bit of an adjustment to see Cyrodiil so differently but I think the advantage of this being set so far back is that it can pass quite freely as being this alien concept to what we're used to seeing. So with the initial characterisation of Atkynd, seems he's not got the best sense of direction and is quite laid back, though it seems getting lost is less of a him thing in this case and perhaps more the wheel of fate turning on him here and putting him in for an interesting encounter with a young human I can only really assume at the moment is Alessia. The slave catcher was quite brutish and reminds me a lot of the demeanour of the Thalmor, though Atkynd seems to be one for words and trickery which worked to his advantage here but I suspect it could be something that'll come back to bite him later on. I vaguely remember Vindasel being one of the ruined kingdoms I explored in Oblivion and there was some significance to it I think but can't remember what. Her reaction to finding out he was an elf was pretty well done for someone who's been conditioned to fear them but it was a nice contrast with how kind he is by comparison to her Ayleid masters. It was a nice touch to get his background as an ancient Breton since the modern ones are fairly removed from elves now. Seems he holds a lot of pride for his clan too, given how he's willing to wear that cloak even in such a climate as Cyrod. I liked the touch of Atkynd musing over the nuances of her translation of High Rock. I think little details like that add some subtle depth and world building without it sounding forced. An interesting philosophy in Malabal compared to other places. I'm not sure if you're familiar witht the Fallout franchise but it reminds me of the order of things in the Pitt under Ashur's rule where basically out of necessity only those that prove themselves to be skilled above the masses may rise to the upper echelons of society. But it was interesting to hear that the slaves don't even keep names and her bitterness about his compliment of her mistress' trust in her seems like one of the resentful seeds sown that'll bring about what's to come, an early sign I suppose. Considering how every Ayleid kingdom seemed to war with each other in this era, I think it isn't surpiring how on edge the guards would be. I like your interpretation of the city itself though and how much larger and spanning it is in the height of its power compared to the lacklustre ruin it will no doubt be in the future. you did really well with the bleak imagery of the slave houses and the fear one their faces and then the sudden shift to the clean and advanced dwellings of the Ayleids was a stark contrast. To think that living in such a shoddy house is what you get if you're one of the lucky ones is concerning and I gues it does well to paint that divide that the elves don't consider the humans on the same level of sentience as them, like pets, livestock or hunting game depending on the person and I bet even the kindest among elves still see humans differently. I liked a lot of the silent moments between Akynd and the girl though since it seemed to say a lot about the situation and the culture without them actually saying anything, so nice work on those parts. The palace is a lot more vivid here than the ruins we see but I do like it, gives the place more character I think. So Arcanalata is an interesting one, quite ruthless when it comes to failure or lateness/disobediance in her slaves. I think generally the Ayleids are going to be unpleasent but she seems to be a lot more tolerable by comparison to the King. I'm starting to see what skill he has with words, Akynd's tongue is sharper than his sword in a sense, which is lucky for him all things considered. I was a little surprised to see that Arcanalata is a priestess of Magnus, one of the first gods to leave Mundus after Lorkhan's spark was shot into Nirn but considering what's buried in Saarthal, perhaps worship of him isn't so surprising for this era. At least she seems quite pragmatic about matters, unlike King Hadhuul who is very extra if you don't mind me saying and his personality definitely reflects the attire he wears. That said his personality seems pretty typical of what I'd expect to find from these people. I might understand such necessity for human stock for the Ayleid empire but Hadhuul seems ignorant of the lucrative offer of a tin caravan to his kingdom. I think he'll come to regret not considering it in the future, especially when tin is essential for copper in an age where its all they've got to fight with. I'm not surprised Atkynd would rush out like that, the king seems like an unhinged sociopath that might still torture or hunt Atkynd if the mood strikes him. Anyway this was a strong start and that's a bit of an ominous welcome at the end there from Arcanalata , here's hoping he won't get himself in too much trouble. Looking forward to more, until then!
6/12 c1 Dragon Bone Z
So this is the Elder Scroll series you've been meaning to do? Interesting.

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