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8/22 c4 Matheus Bezerra de Lima
When I wrote "all of those sailors" in my review, I meant "all people whose names Sokka noted in his research"
8/22 c4 Matheus Bezerra de Lima
Slow chapter, but necessary. Looking forward to the continuation of Sokka's investigation, specially of all those sailors. Also, nice to see Sokka continuing to do experiments with grenades.

I felt the level of the grammar and writing was atypically clunky for you though.

Some suggestions I make.

I recommend you to change this overly long and clunky phrase:

"Sokka had no other leads to go on and so on this early morning, one he wished he could spend sleeping, Sokka was instead walking through the icy piers of the Water Tribe docks."

To this:

"Sokka had no other leads to go on. So, early in this morning, one he wished he could spend sleeping, Sokka was instead walking through the icy piers of the Water Tribe docks."

I recommend adding a comma after the word "desk" in the phrase "A bell set above the door chimed as he pushed his way inside and strode to the front desk where an older man with thinning hair glanced up at him with a perplexed expression". I would add a comma after the word "musty" in the phrase "The storeroom was dark and musty so Sokka lit an oil lamp lying on a small desk". I would add the word "it" after the word "covering" in the phrase "He carefully lifted it off the shelf and unwrapped the seal skin covering".

I'm not sure what you mean in the phrase "It was a challenge to stay away, but Sokka persisted, forcing himself to note down every meticulous detail", even when I read the context around it. Maybe it's my fault for not understanding. Did you mean "awake" rather than "away"? I don't know, and I'm not sure if "awake" would make more sense either.

In the phrase "There was a stirring inside and a few moments later the furs were pushed aside", I recommend you adding a comma after the word "inside", and another comma after the word "later". I wonder if the phrase "You're got me here" should instead be "You've got me here". I recommend you adding a comma after the word "him" in the phrase "Pitkurak or not, if Suluk was going to kill him then Sokka would go down fighting".

I recommend you adding a comma after the word "that" in the phrase "Look, regardless of why you wanted those ship logs, if you go snooping around like that you'll attract unwanted attention". I would add a comma after the word "safety" in the phrase "But for his own safety Sokka prayed it wasn't him". I would add a comma after the word "him" in the phrase "Katara had already left him and Sokka was too focused on tinkering with another grenade". And I would add a comma after the word "now" in the phrase "Now I didn't make these grenades, but didn't you say these things were sensitive to impacts?".

I also wonder if the phrase "Where the leather-wrapped bundle he'd propped up against a snowpile had been, there was now only a shallow crater covered in a light coating of soot" is overlong and clunky.

Looking forward to how you will write Sokka and Yue's relationship next chapter! And your reply to another user, to which you said that Kimi will appear in Conspiracy Of The North, was very interesting and a pleasant surprise! I'm curious to see how you will fit her.

Cheers!
8/6 c3 Guest
Thanks for the chapter!
7/23 c3 Shahryar
Great work as always! I know Sokka has his own list of suspects, but I personally feel like Chief Tapak is the most likely suspect, or at least is working with Amak, or there's multiples. And yeah I do believe that Air Nomads would, despite believing in pacifism, know how to kill as a last resort. Yue being an ally does sound cool. I wonder where Arnook fits into this, if he's a figurehead who knows nothing in all this or if he's anti-South. And seeing what Sokka does when Aang saves Zuko, ooh man this is wild. I hope Yue survives but...not holding my breath. Either way, great work. Hope we see Kimi again. Like...in this universe lol
7/22 c3 Matheus Bezerra de Lima
Amazing to finally see a new chapter!

What Sokka learned from Bato has made him, and the greater tension he experienced since Gaipan, has made him far more critical. In canon, Sokka was already the pragmatic and cautious guy of Team Avatar. Here, those traits get turned up to eleven for all the hard things he has went through since Gaipan, and what he learned about the North Pole.

And considering how Sokka knows the Northern Water Tribe truly abandoned the South, and might even have helped to kill his mother, he is now rightly critical and wary of the Northern Water Tribe in a way he wasn't in canon. The North really abandoned the South, and some people even see the South as a bunch of primitive, uncivilized "peasants". Amak showcases that. I hope the spy, though, is not a person openly hostile like Amak. Or someone who seems to be perfect and supremely respectful, like Tapak. Maybe the best is that there is no single spy, but a network of people, many in the government (even some of the chiefs), who are prejudiced and supremacist against the South. All of this is surely gonna be very complicated. It's not a issue of just some individuals, it's a systemic issue in Northern Water Tribe society and culture. I'm interested in seeing all of these elements I talked about in this paragraph, and being developed like you did in Hero Of Gaipan.

Sokka is so tense that he didn't even fall in love with Yue at first sight, like in canon. I still think they'll fall in love though. In that case, they relationship can be far more fleshed out than in canon, in which their romance was rushed.

Interested to see how Sokka will react to Pakku refusing to teach Katara because she is a girl.

Last, but not least, I think the North Pole is the point in the series in which the seriousness of war fully clicks for Aang. The revelation of Sozin's Comet arrival in the middle of Season 1 had already changed things, the show wasn't as much anymore "happy, goofy and hyper-active kid saves the world while stopping to have fun in many places with his friends!". But when Aang sees the gigantic Fire Nation fleet invading the North Pole at the end of the season, that's when things fully change for him, it's when the seriousness really sinks in for Aang. Aang changes, and the show changes definitively.

Cheers! Great chapter! Hope you loved my review of it!
6/29 c2 Shahryar
This and Hero of Gaipan were both really good. I'm hoping Sokka and Aang's relationship can be healed though. I'm really looking forward to how Sokka handles being around Yue and Chief Arnook, especially in light of the betrayal. This is really cool. Keep it up!
6/29 c2 8HighQueenChickenhead
Great chapter! Thank you for addressing the fact that the Mechanist and his people can't stay at the Northern Air Temple :). The Fire Nation not only suffered a humiliating defeat, but they know that the greatest mechanical mastermind they know of is now working against them. That's not something that the Fire Nation can ignore. That point seems to be glossed over and ignored in the show, but I appreciate when other people notice things like that :D.

The new dynamic between Aang and Sokka is really interesting. In this story, the consequence of Aang's actions is that Sokka doesn't trust him as much and doesn't have as good of a relationship with him, and I like that the repercussions of what Aang did is really starting to affect them and the story.

I look forward to the North Pole arc! Sneaky plotters and spies and traitors, oh my!
6/29 c2 Matheus Bezerra de Lima
Another great chapter! I get that Sokka is very stressed, and that's why he snaps at Aang, though Sokka knows it's wrong. Also why Sokka misunderstands why Aang stole the map to begin with. Sokka thinks that it's because Aang thought that Sokka and Katara might choose seeing their father instead of saving the world (Aang doesn't actually think this). He blames Aang as forgetting what it's like to lose a family. But all of that couldn't be further from the truth. Aang stole the map because he was afraid of losing Sokka and Katara, an act of despair due to his trauma for losing the Air Nomads, everyone who he knew and loved, his family (though it's kinda weird that also in the show, Aang is so cheery to go to the Southern Air Temple in the third episode, despite the fact that everyone he knew and loved, like Gyatso, would still have died by that point, even if the Air Nomad genocide hadn't happened).

I really hope that Sokka and Aang can clear everything up about their conflicts with each other, sort up their problems during this story. And in the North Pole, Sokka will also find Aang's more responsible side when the Fire Nation invades it. I really see the Siege Of The North as, alongside the Sozin Comet reveal earlier in the series, the biggest turning point of Aang in Season 1, to make him fully realize the scale of the war, the seriousness of it, and that he shouldn't try to avoid responsibility and waste time goofing around as he did before. Poor Aang.

Loved the scenes of Sokka studying the chemistry book.

Also loved the added bit of lore to the Air Nomads, which I hope to see more explored in the future. It seems to be clear that while they were pacifists and hated violence, the threat of Fire Nation imperialism was making the oldest monks (who seem to be the highest authorities of the Air Nomad society) consider the possibility of violating their principles, despite obviously hating doing so.

There is only one problem in aging the characters up as you did. Aang being a 12-year old kid who suddenly discovers being the Avatar (something that in normal conditions should be revealed only when the person is 16 years old), and just can't bear the weight of it and has the monks wanting to rob him of his childhood, is perhaps the most important part of his drama as we got shown in the episode The Storm. And also why he still desperately wants to cling so much to goofing around and taking detours in the way to the North Pole, specially in the first half of Season 1. If Aang is 16 years old to begin with, this arc seems to make less sense, at least in my first glance. What do you think?

Cheers!
6/27 c1 Icy Dragon Flame
POLITICAL INTRIGUE! I'm here for it and can't wait to see where this story goes.
6/20 c1 Matheus Bezerra de Lima
You plan to post one chapter in every 7 days, right? I'm curious.
6/19 c1 Matheus Bezerra de Lima
Great first chapter! A few missing commas, but still very good writing! And it's great to see this story finally here! Looking forward to what dark secrets the North Pole has in store.

I also love how you write the serious and responsible side of Sokka. With the huge delay in Gaipan, which wasn't anywhere near the same degree in canon, it makes sense that Sokka would be in full-on obsessed mode to reach the North Pole as fast as possible.

Also, considering that Kya was the one to be killed, I guess that whoever informed the Fire Nation of a waterbender in the south didn't know that such waterbender was just a little girl. So, I don't think that any of those north chiefs (at least the ones that Hakoda talked with about Katara) betrayed the south, they only refused to teach Katara for sexist reasons.

Cheers!

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