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8/6 c1 157Qoheleth
Dear Sunset:

Okay, here's the thing. If you're going to write a story in which Fiver and Silverweed are friends, I think it's incumbent upon you to properly set the stage - to really show us the alteration of events that's brought us to this point. I don't just mean how and why Silverweed decided to go with Strawberry in this variation (or whatever it is that happened), but the whole story of how he escaped the "mist of folly" that so horrified Fiver when he sang. Without that, it just feels as though you've dismissed one of the most richly complex character dynamics in the book (complete on two pages in my copy) and replaced it with something far tamer and more commonplace.

Sincerely,
Qoheleth

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