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10/4 c1 Gr8stLoveStory
Loved this story. Accidentally read the 3rd one first. So glad I discovered the beginning. Now on to the 2nd one. Then I'll read on from there! Hope you'll continue writing! Much Thanks! Lorri W.
9/24 c1 3MsChrisAnn
Good story. Lee’s the best dad.
9/23 c1 4elliekinwa
Thank you for sharing this very sweet story. Well done.
9/22 c1 Leann Nickerson
Fabulous! Thanks so much for your time and effort in writing this!
9/21 c1 Jot70
Wonderful story. Very descriptive and in character. Please write more!
9/20 c1 Germania72
Nice pen name! And I love this take about Philip's adolescence.
9/20 c1 Guest
Most excellent story.
Keep it up and write more.
9/19 c1 2TapTapPauseTap
Great story and love your pen name!
9/19 c1 RR
What a sweet and wonderful story. So good on plot and character. A very good first try at fanfic writing. Loved how you brought Lee and Phillip together and how Lee is there for both Phillip and Amanda as Phillip transitions from a boy into a young man. Since this is your first story, I would suggest you break your larger paragraphs into smaller ones when possible. It can help a reader pause and absorb an idea or description before moving on to the next one.
9/19 c1 10KDCAL
Sweet story. Loved how you had both parents give the same type of advice to their kids for the dance. Also like how you inter wove the phrase “walk with me” in the story. Looking forward to reading more from you!
9/19 c1 SPCLjmm
A total delight! Loved all of this!
9/17 c1 Truckee Gal
Lee gave Phillip thoughtful advice, to build a solid friendship with Annie first. Love how Phillip calls Lee “Pops.”
Later, he offered encouragement and wise suggestions for the Valentine dance. While Amanda took an entire roll of photographs for Phillip and Annie to remember, but also for the two Moms. Bet she ordered quadruple prints and bought photo albums for them, too!
Lee made sure his own Valentine will experience an extra special celebration of their first wedding anniversary. Of course Dotty is eavesdropping as Lee proposes!
Don’t see much of Jamie because he is busy bonding with his birth father.
Fabulous post-season story! Very realistic and hope you have more stories to post.
PS: In future stories, please post the chapters separately. It helps the reader, who may not have time to read it all at once.
9/17 c1 Danielle Lyons1
Lovely story. Great to see Lee and Phillip together. Thank you for sharing
9/16 c1 ucurgypsy
Nice first story! Great interweaving of their lives. I thoroughly enjoyed reading this and look forward to more. Thank you
9/16 c1 Beverly Conner
This was fabulous! So sweet!
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