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9/28 c3 21shepsgirl72
Well, it was a close shave, but thankfully with Carson being able to see him, John was saved in the nick of time! It’s funny that the mayor did something to him that helped him escape as well. I like Sheppard’s thought that the mayor might not have even known he’d left the planet! Was he possibly still threatening him and waiting for Sheppard to activate devices when he’d already gone? Lol

Thanks for the story. You take care too.
9/27 c3 25sheppardlover928
Well—alls well with John…and Teyla,(yea!). and team. I like how you did Carson-his concern and frustration in not being able to help. Bad experience for John but now he’s had time to see how much everyone appreciates and loves him, how vital he is to Atlantis and the expedition and has learned not to take things for granted. Good story!
9/27 c3 BMick
Good finish to a much-appreciated story. The characters' "voices" were right on target, especially John's; was it hard to keep his telling of the story so completely in-character? I very much enjoyed it, especially his delight in finding his feelings for Teyla were returned, after hearing him remind himself of the reasons he couldn't ever let her see how he really felt. And a good suspense story as well!
9/26 c3 2Var Devonshire
Loved this ending. The story was a wonderful journey of watching John learn how much he appreciates and is appreciated. Well done!
9/25 c2 fan 1
Love it. Keep writing
9/25 c2 Guest
Oh wow! What really has happened to John?! Is he really home in Atlantis-invisible body and all?! Carson faintly seeing him seems to indicate that! But if John doesn’t remember anything— how did he get to the gate to go thru with his team? Is the pain he feels the drug or whatever wearing off?! Was that explosion caused by the Mayor or did they get wiped out?! Hurry with the next chapter! BTW-You are doing a great job showing John’s frustration and everyone else’s remorse…..
9/21 c2 BMick
Wow. Just... wow. If ever a story led the reader in timely fashion right into a socko of a cliffhanger, this was it. All is forgiven, though, if you'll get more of this tale posted. Quickly.
9/19 c2 21shepsgirl72
So Carson can just barely see John, but it seems as if his condition is deteriorating fast. They’d better figure out what happened to him soon or there will be no bringing him back!
9/18 c2 2Var Devonshire
Good thing someone finally 'saw' John. Hopefully Carson will follow thru with this sighting. Great chapter. Looking forward to the next one.
9/16 c1 21shepsgirl72
Hmmm, so is he invisible or has the mayor somehow detached John’s consciousness from his body? He doesn’t seem to be able to interact with anything physically, but he felt the table move when Ronon pushed away from it so I’m not sure at this point. Whatever is happening, being unable to connect their Stargate to the planet means it is going to be tricky to return Sheppard to his previous form, and it seems they only have a limited time to do it. Yikes!
9/14 c1 BMick
This is a challenging story to follow... weirder and weirder. Can't wait for more!
9/13 c1 25sheppardlover928
Hmmm—-very intriguing! But confusing—as how did Sheppard go back with them if the Mayor wanted to keep him-and he doesnt remember anything or even how he got back to Atlantis. Where is his body? Is it just his mind that somehow is being tricked? If Sheppard is really consciously back in Atlantis and the Mayor’s people caused the explosion that disabled the Stargate—what good did all that do for the Mayor’s people?! Cant wait for more to answer these burning questions!

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