9/3 c1 2Vallalkozo
You altered this story I see. I wasn't able to review before ,but last time it ended with a rather questionable action from Hilda. This new version is better, though you accidentally deleted the line where David leaves his room, so now he suddenly joins the conversation.
There is also a small error in the summary; it's Frida and Hilda who see David, not David himself.
You altered this story I see. I wasn't able to review before ,but last time it ended with a rather questionable action from Hilda. This new version is better, though you accidentally deleted the line where David leaves his room, so now he suddenly joins the conversation.
There is also a small error in the summary; it's Frida and Hilda who see David, not David himself.