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5h c4 34Psyched
OMG, how wonderful was that flashback?! (REALLY wonderful!) It was just heartbreaking watching little Marty fear for his freedom/future but decided to do the right thing anyway. Torn between what he believed would happen (probably because he'd seen it on CHiPs, lol), what he feared would happen as someone who'd been threatened to keep quiet, and what he knew would happen (or more specifically would not happen) because the cops had never helped before...and he still tried to protect his bastard father...sniff. Excellent work with Di Angelo-he's the kind of cop Deeks grows up to become.

Re: the "present" I'm a little confused why Deeks doesn't just admit he's a lawyer and that he was there in relation to a client and then play the "confidentiality" card? Or would that just make what's about to come next impossible? ;-) Whatever, I'm here for the ride!

Looking forward to the next chapter!
9/20 c4 69ejzah
I have a feeling Nikolai isn’t going to like Deeks resigning.

I like the way you portrayed Deeks as being unused to, and slightly overwhelmed, by the danger and gore in the first part. Then quickly showing his intelligence and quick-thinking against when he’s being questioned.

The flashback…you’re making my heart ache for little Marty.
9/18 c4 Debra Gillespie
Wonderful chapter. Numerous writers have taken on the aftermath of Deeks shooting his father, and I agree with Sweet Lu, your flashback is one of the best of these I've ever read.
9/17 c4 67OPS Manager
Great job on this!
9/17 c4 84Sweet Lu
This was just excellent. I was drawn into Deeks’ emotions and the uncomfortable position he was in. That he would risk his career for this witness showed his deep need to protect people, and the flashback of the shooting of his father was the best I’ve read. I am really looking forward to where you take this story. So many possibilities. Looking forward to the ride.
9/15 c3 BobbieJ
Great story. I started with Deciding on Destiny on wikideeks and couldn't put it down. I saw that you were writing a Prologue and I couldn't wait to read what you have so far. I am so Looking forward to updates. You are a gifted writer.
9/11 c3 34Psyched
It's intersting that Marty doesn't trust the LAPD to do right by the witness (at least not in time). Also interesting is that the pressure of holding a person's safety in his hands weighed heavily on him, considering what he chooses to do next (and probably why).

Great take on his response to saving Sarah and his mother/himself: terror, shame, and a sense of accomplishment seem to sum up those situations well. Also, I meant to mention this in the review for ch.2 but just realized I forgot: I love your use of the flashbacks in this story (and the thought that 11-year old Deeks would believe that going to prison would be safer/happier than being at home is just heartbreaking). Yes, what's past IS prologue and if Marty Deeks does nothing else, he tries to learn from his past.

And this experience leads Marty to believe there's more black and white in protecting someone. I'm shaking my head, thinking, "No it's not! And You'll find that out soon enough..." But maybe that's just the way he does things...there's a lot less gray if it's easy for you to look the other way and we all know Marty Deeks just isn't that kind of person, no matter what he does for a living.

Wait, what? I have to wait an entire week for the next chapter?! That sucks. But your story most certainly doesn't!
9/11 c2 Psyched
The one benefit to having to wait a few weeks to start reading this is that I now have 3 chapters to read at once! What a great conversation between Marty and his mentor. I can see why he'd like to confer with Joe too. And you can clearly see the beginning of the war between his (professional) ethics and his morality-a line we see him draw several times in his time with NCIS. But I get the feeling that although Marty manages to stay faithful to both in this case, it's not going to end well, is it?
9/11 c1 Psyched
Yup, no matter what he does about Nikolai it's gonna be a problem! So much for his good morning following a fun night. Is it bad I got a little giggle out of Marty Deeks-pretty confident in his sexual prowess-concerned that his latest conquest didn't find him to be relationship material even though he wasn't all that impressed by her and had no desire to be in a relationship? Loving the little hints you're dropping (including that one) about our favorite future detective/federa agent's inner turmoil. Great start and I'm so looking forward to reading more!
9/10 c2 84Sweet Lu
This review is a continuation of one that I inadvertently posted for chapter three. The site wouldn’t let me do a second review of the same chapter…so to continue…I’m posting it here. Loved Deeks deep need to protect this witness. The flashbacks work well, giving an understanding of his reasons and his dilemma. But then you gave us some physical action…bullets flying and Marty saving the girl, painfully paying for his efforts. I’m hooked.
9/10 c3 Sweet Lu
Loved this chapter. Tough decisions. Memories of childhood terror, and his deep need to protect
9/10 c2 69ejzah
I love how you are exploring the reason behind Deeks’ moral convictions. It really gives depth to his decisions throughout his legal (what little we know of it) and law enforcement careers.

Off to read the next chapter!
9/10 c3 1altarp2408
Very good chapter... I can see a connection with him becoming a cop here.
9/10 c3 Debra Gillespie
Another wonderful chapter. I'm really getting immersed in this fan fic. Also still hoping for Deeks, M. this season. It's a long shot, but could the episode that Daniela is directing and ECO is writing perhaps be it? I can dream, can't I?
9/10 c3 67OPS Manager
Good job!
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