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11/1 c1 MrSchimpf again
In your PM responding to my review, you wrote;

"That's where the story is going. She's not even close to being a society robot in this.
I actually was not intending to go that route, but maybe I will just to anger you."

The review system is to tell you what works in your story and what you should improve...obviously you don't find it useful in that regard, and instead utilize it to make things in your story much worse. And you should never write in order to just 'get revenge on a reviewer'.

I wish you luck in your future endeavors, but like another reviewer said, you should actually finish a story for once rather than writing the same first chapter over and over again then abandoning it when someone criticizes it. I find writers like that much worse than writers that poorly write, but at least write chapter after chapter of their idea because eventually they'll develop better writing skills. Also, your stories don't truly anger me; I mostly leave with disappointment.
10/29 c1 Guest
I think this is an interesting concept. I always thought that Rory should at some point have a relationship with her other grandparents. But maybe instead of Rory being so unsure of herself she could come over and tell off Straub. Building some small level of respect between them.
10/29 c1 Guest
Good start! I like your style of writing, keep it up!
10/31 c1 Sharon Cuevas
Rory does need to know her fathers side. Straub is arrogant and narcissistic. Rory is in high school not a lawyer. But I bet she will try. It’s nice to see that there is a nice compassionate side to Francine
10/29 c1 In4aPennyn4alb
please finish a story.
10/29 c1 28MrSchimpf
If I could send you a GIF, it would be the 'how many times do we have to teach you this lesson old man?' Spongebob GIF.

Because you keep posting this story over and over again, and we all keep telling you this is cruel and heartless; especially this time because from the beginning, it's clear that Straub hates Rory's very existence unless he can get something craven out of it.

He's insulting her work that has been given high marks. Demanding she be 'proper and social' and never show them love. In the real world, Rory would have told them to 'fuck off and die' and hardly be proper about it.

Why would she want to be with these two people again?! They're horrible. And yet you keep insisting on writing this shit like someone who wants to troll the fandom but does a horrible job every single time. Somehow THIS version is even crueler than the last few 'Rory is a society robot' fics you've written.

Please, find another fandom that loves this stuff, because this isn't the one for you. The "Succession" fandom would eat this up if it was Shiv trying to gain young favor with Logan.
10/29 c1 Festis7
So they are just spending time with Rory to steal her away from the Gilmores? That’s cruel.

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