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10/20/2020 c21 chanceoutof20
Awesome as always! Mindy is such a sweetheart I hope she gets her own little ship
8/24/2020 c20 10presea221
I was starting to wonder where you were. XD This was one awesome chapter! Those Kirigami Makai were like a sort of twisted version of the Paradox Bros. in a way. XD Blair's initial fantasy of how her and Jaden's duel would play out got smoldered by the reality of dueling, it seems like. I couldn't help laughing, though.

Man, were those monster stealing effects from the Graydles annoying! "But I'm the one who uses Elemental Heroes!" Jaden, Aster Phoenix would like to have a word with you.

I was worried when Blair lost the will to duel. But Jaden gave one heck of a speech and reminded her of how important her friends have become to her. That was so touching, and even better when she thought of Brier! I loved Blair's Counter Fairy type deck with the Parshaths!

The ending was great, because it really solidified a turning point for Blair with some character growth and how she actually seems to be moving on from Jaden. And that thought of Jasmine's: "She wanted to swap spit with Zenn, anyway." Yeah, I'm all for that. XD Great chapter!
8/16/2020 c1 17Virgosapphire1799
This story is really cool and Jasmine needs more love as well.
8/16/2020 c20 chanceoutof20
Nice chapter! Can't wait for the next one!
5/6/2020 c19 Luiz4200
Uglier than Crowler? I find it hard to believe.
4/30/2020 c2 182Luiz4200
Mindy is such a jerk.
4/24/2020 c19 10presea221
Wow. That was unexpected. You would think the Makai had discovered Valentine's Day, but I guess they got the idea from the boy and girl in the beginning. Poor Mindy being left to get crushed like that... XD

It looks like Blair is finally starting to see the light about Jaden. About time! It is kind of sad that she has to go through it the hard way, but that might be what it takes here. Jaden is so dense that of course he would pull out that comment about not knowing anything about Blair. But it is true. The duel is going to be something else with them tag teaming! Can't wait to see some ehero action against the Makai!
4/16/2020 c2 1Terran117
The battles take me back to watching Yugioh as a kid. Good job on that front and the whole "You kind of act like a dork" thing was a nice roast. They look like they'll be cute together.
4/5/2020 c7 16Time Thief
In the first sentence and the dialogue after I have nooo idea who is talking. Only able to figure out after Mindy is mentioned by name.

HAHAH blair is a LEECH

Lol i like how you gave her the regular Sector Security cards (and also how her personality is not like the other securities you write)

Wonder balloons. Cute card. It being in her deck, tho... maybe she should be expelled xD

Aha performapals and dueltainment. The girl is ahead of her time c; enjoying the cute drama and movement added as though she really is an actress on a stage

lul at the gruesome description of the attack into wooo confetti! xD I think somethin happened to Terminal Countdown’s description that made only the last line show

THE WINK SOLD ME
Nice duel! I really enjoyed the Chairman’s character also. Good usage to see how Mindy can break stoicism
4/2/2020 c18 Kias
Normally I stay clear of male oc/ cannon characters because it’s rarely ever done well, mostly it’s either A Jaden copy, or b over powered Gary stue who doesn’t fit into the world at all. But this,is an absolutely fantastic breath of fresh air. Zenn is believable with the setting, has genuine flaws, and is a joy to read about.

While the story it’s not without its flaws, the effort and creativity you’ve put into the character really shines through.
4/1/2020 c18 13James95
Sucks for Brier but, honestly, this was sweet. At least there's some closure with a potential opening.

I kind of like how you're using newer decks in this with some extra deck cards as fusion monsters.
Surprised nothing's used Ritual or Gladiator Beasts yet considering their contact fusion vibe. However, I reckon Dragonmaids, Witchcrafter, Rikka and Shaddoll won't make this anytime soon lol.

Your story seems good so far and it's nice that you're giving some dimension to Jasmine and Mindy. Considering how much of the academy revolved around Jaden and his friends in GX, it's nice to see other side stories.
4/1/2020 c18 10presea221
It was so nice to see the whole gang being so supportive of Brier by visiting him in the hospital. And Zenn was adorable with making his preference for trying anything Jasmine cooks so obvious. XD

I'm disappointed in Blair, though. She says she loves Jaden and mentions a bond, but how can she when she really doesn't even know him or has spent barely any time with him? I never saw Blair's thing for Jaden as more than a shalliw crush. I wish she would forget about him and give Brier a chance. Jaden isn't even interested in this kind of stuff as it is.
3/31/2020 c6 16Time Thief
Today, a chic basket backpack filled to the brim. You too can Buy His Look at—

Bastion is indeed a bit of a freak. Who’s stranger, I wonder, between Zenn and Bastion? Bastion at least keeps with a regular uniform. But Oh God once he opens his mouth

There’s so much cattiness in the room Zenn’s allergies are acting up

WHAAAAT

Dang. Hating Yu-Gi-Oh. As a YGO player, I relate. (I kid) TIL I’m a dueltainer. It makes way too much sense that Zenn knows about pro wrestling.

She seems... proud?! Of expelling students?! Oh no no no. Let’s gooo Mindy
3/31/2020 c5 Time Thief
-it’s not how you start. It’s how you finish!-
Zenn throwing out the hottest pick up lines of 2020.

LUL oh jasmine. Never gonna catch a break, are you. I didn’t take Mindy to be horny on main but yknow you’ve convinced me.

Wait. All girls are automatically blue? I did not know this

What a horrible accomplice spilling the deets immediately. BLAIR WILL CONTINUE THE BEATINGS UNTIL HE IMPROVES-

Despite Zenn looking nothing like him I can’t stop imagining him as Hanzo because of all these one-liners xD

Seeing maggot said like that gives me Archer vibes, so I am now excited

Outhouse? To be fair, he’s not far off -insert thinking emoji here-

Haha he’s so over the top dramatic. That’s why he and Jazz have a great dynamic going what with her just rolling her eyes at the dork

Lava n Swamp, the power of bromance! BE THAT VOLCANO ZENN! KRAKATOAAA

SHE’S JUST GONNA NONCHALANTLY BE LIKE “yea theyre getting that guy expelled whatevs”

I like the blair-is-baby-jasmine you got going on

Wait a sec i thought there’d be rocks in that case! Not jelly donuts! xD Another nice chapter! I do hope we get to see Blair VS Zenn sometime tho
3/31/2020 c4 Time Thief
lolll Jasmine is popping OFF. Group jog? Wonder if she’ll be able to keep up! Or maybe he’ll be nice and keep a slower pace for her

My new favorite meme is “what will be strapped to Zenn today?”
(That sounds... wrong...)

HOW DOES JASMINE ALWAYS MANAGE TO EMBARRASS HERSELF PFFTHAA

What a way to describe a calf massage. WHAT A WAY... i’ll stop now. His five paths are interesting. Tho he kinda gave into anger when it came to Jaden eh

It is crazy how these characters are such polar opposites in every way yet you make it work
You should be a salesman my friend

LUL SHE CHEATED. fun chapter!
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