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5/18 c5 CloudedArcTrooper
This isn't over, is it?
Is it?
11/8/2018 c4 Tschno
Gold time of the day
Reading through this story, ive noticed quite a few spelling and grammar mistakes, yet none of real importance. (Not that I could really say anything about it since German is my first language and not English)
It's not a perfect story, yet for a fan fiction, it seems quite good and promising.
The premise of a US Soldier in that world sounds quite nice, and the fact that hes a soldier explains, why he's so skilled with weapons and survival.
Sadly it's lacks some detail and seems quite boring at some point, yet I guess that's because the story has just begun.
The events in the first chapters were quite nicely connected, yet especially later on the lack of detail makes them seems unconnected and kinda random and the fact that the people of this new world accept foreign money seems kinda unrealisti, but I guess it will do.
Carter also doesn't seem to have a lot of personality besides not talking much and a short temper, I hope that this might change as the story progresses.
Whatvi actually liked was the unknown POV in the fourth chapter; it has potential.
I'll guess I'll watch out for new chapters.

Two questions: Are you in the military or why did you make your protagonist a soldier?
Is his company, the 501St a nod to the 501St from star wars? Vader's clone troops?
Cheers!
T?schno

PS: please excuse mistakes in grammar or Orthographie, AS well AS a lack of proper phrases, like i said, english isnt my Main language. But at least its good enough to read this story, which speaks for this fanfic.
7/12/2018 c3 1TheUnwritten365
Awsome! A new chapter is out! I got really excited when I saw that the story got updated. And what a cool chapter too! Little bit of calm and a little bit of action! Also, just so you know you might want to check your spelling in the second paragraph. Instead of the word “gentle” there’s... something else.
7/10/2018 c2 9zabalabueno522
this cool the fic, I hope you follow it, follow!
6/11/2018 c2 BlackOut55
This story is interesting...Keep up the good work!
4/14/2018 c1 1TheUnwritten365
Something’s wrong with the 2nd chapter, just thought you should know. But when you fix it I’ll be sure to read
3/27/2018 c1 TheUnwritten365
Spelling is a little off, but other than that I like it! Also, question: What is the name of the character? I couldn’t seem to find it, unless it was intentionally left out...

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