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9/2 c2 5cesarjunior233
One thing that I noticed in these 2 chapter is a lack of ponctuation in every single line, you don't put a final dot on the lines. If you could, please do it. The story is being chad so far, thank you.
7/29 c14 Chrisguine
Hello again! I really enjoyed reading this series cover to cover as it came out, you really do have a talent for writing. I look forward to the next book of this story you said you would write. I really liked the epilogue at the end, it was kind of like a blooper wheel which I thought was funny. It was cool of you to recognize the need for some lightheartedness after all the heavy stuff that went down in the chapters previous. There is one thing that I think you should work on, however. Most of the characters in this story kind of sound the same when they talk. What I mean to say is that they all have similar speech patterns and sound very similar to each other, it is kind of weird when Lark and Repton speak quite similarly. But that is my only criticism, everything else was done exquisitely. I eagerly look forward to the next series installment! Have a good one, Stormhawk fan SHhype!
7/19 c14 PineappleLad
hey, just poppin to say i love your work. i miss this show so much and its a really nice breath of fresh air to find someone writing fanficion for the storm hawks 2020. thank you so much for your work! i really hope you conitinue writting, youve got talant!
7/11 c14 Guest
This is actually really good. I hope you make a sequel
7/9 c14 Guest
10/10. I would love a sequel.
6/30 c13 Chrisguine
Oh man, I really loved the chapter! I loved the way you wrapped up the story without it feeling rushed and forced. I cant wait for the epilogue!

P.S. You forgot the obligatory beach episode ;)
4/27 c9 Chrisguine
Hi again! I'm really enjoyed the new chapter. I must say you have quite the talent for world building (universe building in this case). I really liked how you explained part of Lark's past, I would love to see that subject expanded upon in the future. I am really looking forward to how the rescue operation is going to go. Will it be quite and sneaky, or loud and full of action? I'm sure that you will be able to make it entertaining either way. And also Piper actually being a biotic, nice plot twist. I look forward to how you will expand upon that and the rest of the story as well. 11/10 chapter.
4/9 c9 Guest
Wow, I really like this!
11/12/2019 c8 Guest
RIP stormhawks fandom. But more related to the story, I think that in future chapters lark’s tragic bacstory TM should be unlocked. What I’m saying is that we don’t know a lot about park besides she’s really smart and clever and has an amazing grandmother. I just think that it would humanize lark more if you elaborated on her personal story.
8/5/2019 c8 Chrisguine
YES NEW CHAPTER! Okay I like how you went into more detail about the relationship that starling and dove had before starling was taken, I think that will give you numerous opportunities to further that micro-plot. Also I wonder what piper’s reaction to learning that the Commonwealth of Man exists or all of the Telani people for that matter, given that it’s the antithesis to everything the UNE stands for. And I really like the counsel of atmosia or telani congress or whatever their called’s reaction to the situation. I think that their reaction is very appropriate to the situation, many times authors don’t know how to portray emotions so their characters come off emotionaly shallow and dry, I’m glad that wasn’t the case here, you portrayed your characters emotions really well. I also like all the characters on the Normandy and how you described their appearances, species, and backstory/personality. I also like how lark has personal connection to Atmos and it’s people via her Grandmother, this story could have worked without her but it’s a nice touch. That’s all for my indeapth literary review. See you next chapter, I’m looking forward to it!
5/27/2019 c7 Guest
Are you gonna have Reapers or Collectors in this? I think it would be interesting to see if you incorporate them (particularly the Reapers) in Stellaris.
5/16/2019 c7 Chrisguine
Wow, I’m speachless. You are a very talented writer. I would love it if you were to continue this story. It’s really very good. One thing I would do though is maybe do a mini chapter on starling on her fledgling and part of her indoctrination. I think that would help us get to know starling more. Great work my dude.
5/13/2019 c7 Guest
Wow. It’s really cool how you combined all these games into something that flows well. I know your not getting many views for your work. But the stellaris fandom is a quiet bunch. Just know that I’ll be watching and I think what you’re writing here is really cool.
1/23/2019 c1 VeraWinterRose
Just wanted to say, I think this fanfic is amazing and its really cool to see it updating. Especially since its this fandom which seems to have died off a few years ago. (That might just be me but ya'know)
6/4/2018 c5 7Rookk
I am loving this a lot! As a fan of both Storm Hawks and Mass Effect, I'm having a blast reading this haha. I can't wait to see where you go with it :)
Oh, I came here to ask about Miranda too. Is she going to be in this? Maybe she was the person Shep got that call from?

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