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1/27/2020 c29 6Scarlet 'n Blossom
Blossom: Without further ado, let's begin the review. Oh wow, the narration is getting better!
Scarlet: But I want to confirm something. Hana said "How is that related to our kids coming here?". Where is 'here' she referring to? Osaka? Or maybe Kyuushuu?
Blossom: I think it's Kyuushuu? Wait, no? Uhh, whichever it is, sending your childrens as hostage was pretty common in Sengoku Jidai.
Scarlet: Yup. Next! Lol, how long you've been standing there, Izumi-san. Peeking over the couples, well she's lucky didn't get caught by them XD
Blossom: Haha, I can imagine how Takatora's expression look like. Welp, leave it to our dear Suzu to lighten his mood. XD
Scarlet: Next. Ohh poor Chie. But thank goodness Yuu was coming to see her.
Blossom: Gaahh just confess already!
Scarlet: Oh calm down, will you *facepalm* Whenever it comes to romance, Blossom is always like this.
Blossom: Fine, fine. We also having trouble to find motivation to write. I hope we can update soon too. *sigh*
Scarlet: We should, Som. Alright that's it. See you soon too and good luck!
1/27/2020 c29 RosyMiranto18
Okay… so many stuffs to do today, Hayashinkage, so let’s just start from the reply first.
-Questions? I don’t know specifically what did you referred to? The reply in last chapter’s review or the actual questions I cannot remember? *pause* Oh wait, it’s on PM *facepalm*
-Hm… okay. But yeah, unless if something specific, Smile indeed more preferable than Egao in this case.
-Okay… I still got confused why Hana go to Hamamatsu of all places if not for visiting her mother. Even if it’s out of her own choice, there’s still no reason why did she go there either, maybe not even negotiating with Ieyasu or something. So… we’ll leave it at that for now.
-I guess so. Being around a mute will surely make you a lot more sensitive to pick up hints.
-Hahaha. Indeed, good luck, Yuu-kun. And good for you for being a gentleman and not going to the Onsen.
-Well, good to know that I can correct you on the old stuff, it’s usually the opposite for me. But if you use that expression after this, then good for you.

Anyway, enough about that. Let’s move on to the chapter:
1a. Thank you for telling me Eccedentesiasts, though I usually use Stepford Smile for this definition... actually, I have an idea somewhere else now. Thank you for telling me this.
b. Hm… if Shimazu never attacks Otomo, will Hideyoshi still wage conquest upon Kyuushuu regardless?
c. So… Tadayasu and Natsuka are in battle now? I’m surprised that they are going now though. But Takakage have a point, his grandchildren have to be prepared for how atrocious real battles if because facing Hayakawa’s family is pretty much an inevitability at this point.
d. Well, glad to know that Hana is pretty accepting that life is simply renewed with vigor.
e. And good to know that both of you know that you two are eccedentiasts.
f. Izumi, are you implying that Nagachika’s going to have a Harem?
2a. So… you’re in Kitakyushu now?
b. So… what’s the matter, Takatora-kun?
c. Well, Loyalty, that’s one thing certainly to worry about, but I must say that, Aki… has an interesting yet complicated perception of loyalty. I’ll tell you on PM. But yeah, everyone knows that this Seal holding Ieyasu is only a matter until either him or Hideyoshi kicks the bucket. It can’t be denied.
d. What, Aki? He’s in his thirties and you can’t expect Nagachika to not have children if you have married already :D
3a. Wait, just to ask, how old Natsuka and Tadayasu now?
b. I honestly still unsure if Chie is on Kyuushuu or not, but then again, she’s already recuperating in Shikoku, so…
c. So… I guess the problem here is not Hiroie meeting with Chie, but rather telling the bad news of Motoharu, damnit.
4a. Yeah, if that moment is not devastating, then what is it, Devel Sixteen?
b. Tadayasu as Strategist confirmed.
c. Don’t Yuu, if you want to calm Chie down, WAIT!
d. Actually, I start to get worried if the kids are not just being invited to watch the battle, but rather actually participating in it. It’s not correct, right… Takakage?
e. Also, technically, Hiroie is Chie’s adopted brother. Half-Brother refers to if they shared one biological father or mother.
f. Well, at least they don’t call you Big Bro, but… even the kids already knew you and Chie are sitting on the tree K-I-S-S-I-N-G, Yuu.
g. Oh yeah, Natsuko also joining this battle here, but are you sure you’re not fighting as well, Izumi? I guess you’re too old to be on the front lines now unfortunately.

Really? You forgot your own plots? Damn, I guess I advise to always take notes of any ideas yu came up it to make sure you don’t forget anything. It’s a very important advice, I mean it. As for Bonus Chapter and Companion One-shot, sure… though I know the chance of it being a Smut is like the chance of a Lootbox. And 10-14 chapters more, I see. I think you’re going to finish it in Osaka with an Epilogue covering Osaka after Hana’s death, but who knows? But damn, January and there’s still no break. Hang on, man. And yeah, don’t force yourself. Okay, I think that’s all for this chapter. I’ll tell you about Aki after this, so… see you later and Keep Update!
10/4/2019 c28 Scarlet 'n Blossom
Scarlet: Haha. Actually Takatora was being sarcastic toward Aki, he meant no offense. XD
Blossom: Yeah he did too in SW4 cutscenes, imo. Honestly I love that side of him hehehe.
Scarlet: Yup, remember that he said he's willing to dig a grave to Yoshitsugu in last Azai(Kinki) cutscene? wwww
Blossom: Oh oh! And the first cutscene where Yoshitsugu didn't get out of the way when arrows shot toward him? He said "You're lucky you didn't die." That one made me laugh wwww
Takatora: ...Enough about me.
Scarlet: Oh right. Sorry. We should properly begin our review. Ehem!
Blossom: I should've write Nagachika involved in their conversation, just like what in Rosy-san's review I missed the opportunity. But thank goodness Kage-senpai has already cover it hehe. Thank you and sorry. *phew* :"3
Scarlet: Next. Hoho? "Admirer", eh? *stare at Yuu*
Blossom: Hoho~ don't forget to send the wedding invitation to us, Chie!
Suzu: Uhh, sorry if i said this but... isn't a bit too early for that? *whispering*
Scarlet: Naah, better safe than sorry. Right? Mweheheh.
Suzu: O-Okay then. ._.
Takatora: Their snicker sounds like a pervert...
Suzu: ... *sweatdrops* '
Scarlet: I heard that, Mr. Duckbutt hair! And yes, we're both are perverts! Thank you very much! Happy now!? *tsukkomi*
Takatora: Meh. Like I care. *walks away*
Blossom: Welp, good luck for both us, Kage-senpai. I also trying to push my motivation to write. It's 2k words more to go hiks.
Scarlet: Yup, that's it. Keep writing, as always!
10/4/2019 c28 RosyMiranto18
Okay, I’m back for at least two fanfics to review today, so… *sighs* Tired. Anyway, yay finally for seeing Izumi appearing more prominently from now. Time for the replies:

-Considering how long you didn’t update this fic, it all makes sense how did you forget it. Reply soon, please
-I see. Yeah, Chie’s definitely stubborn. Although, what did Yuu had to with this decision again? Maybe she’s stubborn to see Y(o)uu
-No, I mean Executing her… like Persona 3 style, not a literal execution. I mean this: youtu . be/dpToYN1FpeI
-Of course.
-I honestly cannot understand which part that shook you, to be honest. How little you got from Shikoku and also Mouri’s role there? So, I honestly cannot respond correctly. Can you explain more to me about this one, please?
-Ah… yes, Fanservice and the Cups, got it. And don’t worry, I’m sure a lot of people are uncomfortable at the sight of these scenes, much less writing it.
-And so we have 3 chapters with a separate chapter for Kagoshima, and probably the fourth one is the Aftermath. Looking forward to see those.

And now for the chapter itself:
1a. *checking* Uh… if Egao is Smile, when why didn’t you just say Smile. I mean it’s not exactly a Japanese item that Hana gave to Suzu.
b. So… What kind of encounter that causes her to stay in Osaka? Is it Hayakawa? But if that’s the case, then I thought Hana is on Hamamatsu and not Osaka.
c. Wait, did Yuu know or someone told Yuu (both are pun intended) the real lineage of Hana, or is it just you sensitive enough to know it’s Personal, Yuu?
d. Also, just refer Chie by her given name, Yuu, don’t be embarrassed.
e. And yes, Yuu, believe in Chie-chan, have some goddamn FAITH! *cue crashing into a horse like this: youtu . be/kHGnGSkr07s *
f. Okay, time to tease Yuu mercilessly now. :P
g. As I said, don’t worry, Natsuko is more mature in another universe :D
h. But… ahahaha… now I’m imagining Yuu to stalk Chie into the Onsen… and then getting executed by everyone inside.
2a. Yeah, things change a LOT in just three years, right?
b. Well… Nagachika didn’t actually fight Izumi back in Takamatsu. She shows up in the camp, but she duels Munekatsu, almost finished off Nagachika, then dueling Hana. But hey, at least Nagachika is willing to forgive her so easily.
c. *Brake SFX* Since when you and Hayakawa becoming friends, Izumi? I never seen you interact with Hayakawa, much less on that much of friendly terms. Especially when you also know Takakage personally since kids, surely way before you two met as enemies in Oda’s Mouri Campaigns.
d. So while Izumi knows Hayakawa personally, she doesn’t know her true connection to Hana until now. Wait… I thought Hana’s weapons are twin spears, not twin pikes. Pikes are larger than a regular spear, you know?
e. Yeah, had you killed Nagachika, much less Hana. I think Hayakawa would certainly despises you for the rest of her life.
f. Let me guess, even Kanbei is too busy or unfriendly to bother hanging out with you, right? But yeah, it’s surprising to see her befriend Mori Nagayoshi and Ikeda Tsuneoki as well.
3a. And here is Hana and Nagachika’s children coming in… but are you sure none of you goes back to escort them?
b. But yeah, Nagachika asked you because you’re neutral in this tension between Hana and Hayakawa Izumi.
c. Although, I need to ask something. Is Izumi hates being called old or too old to fight here?
4a. Nice to see Nagachika got involved in this scene now to hear it. Honestly, now BotWH’s version felt like it had a missed opportunity.
b. Just so you know, Battle of Asan is between Chousokabe and Miyoshi. I feel that you need to include this information to not people getting confused on what it is.
c. Actually, I just realized that I never put WHERE Aki told Natsuko the real truth on her Coma. Hm… considering how… stale Kyuushuu is. I think the late parts or the aftermath of this campaign will be the best spot. In fact, Asuka can be there to hear it too. Hey, SnB, did you see this cue? I have something to say for the next chapters in BotWH.
d. I honestly thought the allusion between Aki and Nagachika is related to forgiving Jou’un Takahashi later in Kyuushu regarding Hana’s scars of war, but I guess the correct one is about keeping an important information of their past a secret for a long time.
e. Wait, did Takakage and Hayakawa meet/meeting again after Komaki-Nagakute? I forgot.
5a. Actually, while I think Aki might react harshly to Takatora’s dismissal, I don’t think it goes as far as actually punching him for ignoring him. Also, you still didn’t refer to Aki by his given name yet, Nagachika?
b. Considering what happened, I think Nagachika would only tell Aki about Hana and Hayakawa at best, after Odawara… or at worst, if they fought each other in Osaka, which is not good O_o
c. Hm… maybe Aki have faith in Takatora as a friend, but Aki’s too loyal to abandon Toyotomi… That’s how Aki’s uniquely weird mentality works.

Hey, glad for you to have the idea to connect Aki and Nagachika this way. Congratulations! Though really? A day to a week? That gap really is much shorter than I thought. I expected it to be a week to a month.
So the next Filler chapter will be the Reunion of the Kobayakawas… I wonder if Lady Toida, Hidekane or even Hideaki showing up there. That might lead to an interesting scenario.
I honestly think that you couldn’t reach Sekigahara especially with this Snail Pace. But damn, why did you fail on that subject? I feel bad to actually ask about this, but… Still, I hope you can at least load in a chapter before November kicks in.
Okay, I guess that’s all for now. See you again and Keep Update!
P.S.: I actually made Aki and Natsuko’s profile complete with fixed and perfected personality after three years. You’ll notice that there are some changes in their Personality, which can also be applied here. If you are interested, tell me via Facebook and/or Messenger, and I’ll send you right away.
6/21/2019 c27 RosyMiranto18
Well… RIP my schedule for the day. Oh well, I guess I can only finish my businesses by the time of Sunday. Anyway, here’s the reply first.

-Haha, Good to know! And Pentecost? *checking* It’s the White Sunday and it’s on the 16th, good for you then.
-Haha, and this message here confirms it. I’m fine with either PM or Reply in the Next Chapter though.
-At this point, I might as well call it a coma then, but glad that she recovers enough for Shikoku, somehow.
-Thank you. If you need any helping hand, you can try Aini’s take on that story as a basis. And based on the sequence here, I’m guessing that the story will be told in the next chapter.
-Me neither XD
-Somehow, you made it look really confusing as it should be Hana who is there and Asuka stays in Osaka *dizzy*
-Oh… that massive Island between Honshuu and Shikoku? I get it… but that Island is called Awaji, not Akashi. Akashi is the name of the strait between Honshuu and Awaji.
-I see. Thanks for the clarification.
-Good… good…
-I see. Although, why don’t you… if Chie’s not recovered enough for Shikoku, Yuu decided to stay in Aki for a while to take care of her?
-Hm… *checking Kouno’s Japanese Wikipedia History* I guess they just decided to retire after surrendering their territory to Takakage during the Conquest of Shikoku. They tried to revive Ichijou around Sekigahara, but there’s barely anything else. *shrugs*
-Haha, you got a point. Well, use the plot as you see fit. XD
-Yes, I know. You just told me that in my birthday.

I’m quite busy recently. So in accordance to that, no problem with being in a rush, as I guess if you can’t finished it today, it will take more months for you to finish the chapter. And now let’s move on to the real review.
-Well, glad that the Old Man Munekatsu still got it. He even saved Suzu now. So is what happened on that ship no different than Suzu’s POV?
-Yeah… that’s one bad thing the War brings. Worries, worries everywhere.
-So… let me guess, are you going to Execute Koshoushou like what happened to poor Weiss in her Death Battle with Mitsuru? (Link: youtu . be/G-2ISN5u4Pg )
-“Youngn’s These Days”, yeah, that sounds like a good summation, Munekatsu-sama.
-Actually, where did Tadakatsu slashed Chie again? Is it her back?
-Well, being raised by a family of Strategist will do that for you, Yuu, I thought Kenshin could be a good example on that.
-*whispering* Did I smell some Tsundere-ness from Chie here? :Kappa:
-Why are you surprised, Aki? I thought everyone whose position is high enough should know that the previous negotiation failed.
-Is the dark blonde Hana? If so, then yeah, she’s not too young anymore XD
-Now that they mention Hosokawa, I wonder if Gracia already married or at least meet Tadaoki at this point.
-So… I guess how did Koshoushou suddenly appeared there is still a mystery, right?
-Uh… is this missing person Takakage? *pause* I knew it.
-Well… is this your debut in this story, Hiroie?
-So, Hideyoshi, would you rather to be beaten by Koshoushou or your wife?
-Don’t worry, Aki, in another universe, your sister’s becoming more mature than you think. But yeah, Hana’s right.
-Wait, since when you built that dam, Hachisuka? And does that mean Motochika’s garrison’s wet now?

Haha, Welcome to Berlin, man, and enjoy the Wall. Yeah, I got to admit that Shikoku’s not covered much compared to Kyuushuu and Mouri doesn’t have many notable role there. Nah, it’s fine if it’s not a Hot Springs Episode, but it’s pleasant to see a Filler Chapter in the next one regardless. Although, when you said “Too Dirty”, you mean you can only imagine Lemons if it’s a scene in the Hot Springs?
As for how long, I think I’m betting around 4 for Kyuushuu. Don’t ask, but hey, it means Hana and Nagachika have some scores to settle with some Kyuushuu people, especially Ootomo, Tachibana, and Takahashi. Well, I guess that’s all for now. See you later and Keep Update!
6/21/2019 c27 Scarlet 'n Blossom
Scarlet: Youngsters these days... *shaking head*
Blossom: Youngsterns these days.. *also shaking head*
Suzu: *sweatdrop* Are you mocking Takatora-sama? Please don't blame him, you two. Takatora-sama was just-umm...
Blossom: There you again. Anyway, when Kage-senpai said Shikoku chapter isn't his priority... Should we write Kyushu rushed just like this, Let?
Scarlet: It's not completely rushed, though, Som. Aplogize to Kage-senpai!
Blossom: Domo sumimasen deshitaa! *dogeza* Alright next! Koshosho was to blame, hm. That is right. But not just her. It's also Kuwana Yoshinari! *objection pose*
Scarlet: GAH DON'T SPOILED IT, SOM! Maa ii ka, based on history. Kuwana Yoshinari joined Todo after Kyushu. Actually it's a little complicated for me to arrange the plot about how he can join after what he had done to Suzu. I also forgot to mention him in fic too lol.
Blossom: Next! Oooh, smirking Kanbei... I can't imagine it, but I was curious what's he planning aaand they already beat them. I thought we'll have to wait for the next chapter, but it's not thank godness lol XD
Scarlet: It seems Chacha doesn't make her appearance to save Gracia at all. But nah, it doesn't matter.
Blossom: And Suzu, do not ever bite your tongue like before again. If you can't speak anymore, you must study sign languange with Chie-chan!
Suzu: *sweatdrop* Are you... trying to intimidate me? I want to study sign languange too but I won't bite my tongue again. Promise.
Scarlet: You should've said that to your man, Suzu. Okay, that's it! Actually you're not late at all. That was quite fast update in my opinion.
Blossom: Yeah. Not like us, haven't update for months lol.
Suzu: Don't laugh and write! *tsukkomi* Sigh, we're looking forward to the next chapter! And good luck with your exercises! n_n)7
5/31/2019 c26 seereul
Hehe, nice to meet you too

Well, I don't really play Mobile Legends (the weird thing is my dad does and he's pretty good at it) I'm not really interested in mobile games, so I usually only use my phone for browsing or opening social medias and.. RPing : besides, currently Mobile Legends isn't as popular as it used to be here, there are 2 new trending games here and now Mobile Legends is forgotten. (although there are still some of my friends who still play it)

To be honest, your writing style is just adorable! It's pretty rare seeing writing styles like yours in other books.

And I just had to say, the storyline is very, very interesting! I love how you thought about the strategies, it's very clever.

Keep updating! Who cares how long when you're going to update the next chapter, take your time, I'll be waiting :)
5/30/2019 c26 Scarlet 'n Blossom
Bloosom: AAAHHH FINALLY UPDATED AAAAHHH! *screaming internally*
Scarlet: AAAHHH OUR PRECIOUS SUZU GOT KIDNAPPED AAAAHHH! *screaming internally lv.2*
Blossom: That's obvious, idiot! We're the one who put her in that situation in the first place! Don't tell me you forget that already.
Scarlet: Of couse I know. Ahem! Oh no, I forgot the Mori had battle against Koshosho's army at Iyo. At least I should mention it in my fanfic. QwQ
Blossom: Ooh! Way to go, Nagachika! Or should I say... 'Everything is according to my plan!'
Scarlet: What are you? Zhuge Liang? It's not your plan, but it's Nagachika.
Blossom: That's what I'm saying! Aaah, my precious Suzu~ Go rescue her quickly oh Mr. Duckbutt hair~
Scarlet: You're gonna get freeze if he heard that silly nickname lol. Wait aaa- *frozen*
Blossom: Tsk tsk, you shouldn't laugh, Let. Wait what- *frozen*
Takatora: ...Keep writing. You better update it sooner. Otherwise, Suzu's life is going to- urk!
Suzu: *pinch Takatora's arm* Mind your words, Takatora-sama! You should be nice if you want to ask something to Kage-sensei. Umm we're looking forward to the next chapter! But don't push yourself too hard. Just take your time, okay? Ganbatte kudasai ne! n_n)7
5/30/2019 c26 RosyMiranto18
Gutten Morgen… sorry, it’s not in the morning and I’m bad at German, so please excuse me making a fool out of myself and just move on to the review, okay?
But hm… Gratuitous German in this fic, eh? Maybe… if it’s a World War scenario, and then we talk. But eh, that’s okay if you are so busy. I could say the same for me. Too bad you didn’t have any Eid Al-Fitr holiday like in Indonesia, right? Anyway, since I also mostly based this battle on Takakage’s (or is it Yoshitsugu’s) for Aki and Natsuko, maybe I could point one or two things to help you, but no promise.

Anyway, let’s go to the reply first.
-Hm… I can take if you’re going to tell me those via PM, but even until now, I didn’t see anything.
-So Tadayasu moving in Tokugawa at Edo or former Houjou at Odawara. Interesting… I can wait for that one.
-I see. *sighs* Of course it’s Mobile Legends. And I don’t think I’m interested to ask where it is either.
-You’re welcome.
-Hahaha, well, you got a point about that. Although, I could argue that Mouri and Houjou makes a bit of sense considering Nomi Munekatsu here.
-Hahaha, true… let’s see if Yuu could not be shaken by the tremble of the Overprotective Father.
-Yes, it’s Chie’s. Then yeah, I know she will recover… but how long does it takes?
-Thank you. I’ve resaved that chapter in my PC too.
-Thank you. And by the way, Mouri’s are stars if I’m not mistaken.
-Don’t bother with it. Shimantogawa Tragedy is my own invention, but there is the Battle of Shimanto River (or Shimantogawa) between Chousokabe and Ichijou (don’t know if it’s historical or Koei’s own invention in SW4 though). In this case, Natsuko was shot by the Chousokabes in a crossfire but Aki thought it’s the Ichijous who did it until Motochika tells him the truth.
-Ah… yeah… ‘Special Case’, of course.
-That or making ice sculptures before eating it as if it’s shaved ice.

I think that’s all of it. Let’s move on to the actual meat of the review now.
-Asuka: Is Suzu-san talks to Hana-san or did she mistake my silky black hair to be dark-blonde?
-Akashi? I never heard of ships named like that. I know there’s Atakebune, but…
-So Mouri basically attacks from the west/north then. It makes sense geographically, but in all SW4 maps, both in the vanilla, II, Empires, or even Sanadamaru, it’s always the east shore that got invaded.
-But hm… luring Koshoushou sounds like a good idea, even though I know it’s in the game.
-Eh… Nagachika’s heart, Hana? Are you talking about being jealous of Hana or Nagachika being the one baiting or possibly seducing for the ambush, or… don’t tell me you have a heart (jantung, I mean) issues, Nagachika…
-Still surprised Yuu is participating here in Shikoku.
-So the kidnapper must have covered their appearance. But Natsuko, did they wear anything cyan? I mean Chousokabean Cyan?
-Speaking of which, I wonder where the Ouno brothers gone? Are they slayed when Chousokabe defeated them years ago?
-Fuck… of course… he got hit by Marin Karin… *facepalm* Natsuko, can you give Nagachika Charmdi or anything that negates Charm, please… (Natsuko: Wait, Brigid (her Persona. Yes, she has one now) doesn’t have anti-ailment spell. Gisei-senpai has one… Asuka-nee has Amrita… oh, wait. SALVATION! Is it effective?) Uh... I don’t know, Natsuko. As this review didn’t have its fourth wall broken, including from a healing spell… ehehehe… oh, Nagachika only pretended to be charmed. Sorry, Natsuko, you can take off Brigid now. (Natsuko: *thumbs up and returned to battle*)
-*pause* I thought the garrison you locked Koshoushou in has no water right next to it -_-

I wonder you’re coming to Munich from which city? And yeah, I believe Shikoku in SW has equal parts from everyone. Yoshitsugu, Motochika, Mouri and Kanbei, and also Hideyoshi himself. They all have equal portions in this battle for me. There’s no particular limelight, so make it your own. Well, I guess that’s all for now. Keep Update!

P.S.: Here’s the spell I mentioned.
Salvation – Fully restore HP and cure all ailments of party except for special status (this includes Charm like what Koshoushou had).
P.P.S.: Here’s the profile of Natsuko’s Persona. Meanwhile, Aki’s is Kimura Shigenari for Initial, then Fujiwara no Norimichi for Evolved, and finally Kagutsuchi for Ultimate.
Brigit, Brigid or Bríg (/brdd, brid/; meaning 'exalted one') was a goddess of pre-Christian Ireland. She appears in Irish mythology as a member of the Tuatha Dé Danann, the daughter of the Dagda and wife of Bres, with whom she had a son named Ruadán.
It has been suggested that Brigid is a continuation of the Indo-European dawn goddess. She is associated with the spring season, fertility, healing, poetry and smithcraft. Cormac's Glossary, written in the 10th century by Christian monks, says that Brigid was "the goddess whom poets adored" and that she had two sisters: Brigid the healer and Brigid the smith. This suggests she may have been a triple deity.
Saint Brigid shares many of the goddess's attributes and her feast day on 1 February was originally a pagan festival (Imbolc) marking the beginning of spring. It has thus been argued that the saint is a Christianization of the goddess.
P.P.P.S.: If you want more details on Natsuko’s Persona, you can ask it over on PM.
5/27/2019 c25 seereul
I hope you'll update sooner uwu I can't believe that I actually found another Hayakawa x Takakage shipper! Well, I mean, there is this one friend of mine I met online that shipped it too (after I told her about the ship)

Oh wait, and I've realized that you're an Indonesian too, hm? Wowie, what a surprise honestly.

Also, you're in the Mobile Legends fandom currently? Damn, never actually heard about the fandom, but of course, as an Indonesian, I've heard about the game uwu

Anyways, I really like your writing style. It's.. Well, I somehow really like it for some reason? I dunno really.

Keep it up, and once again, hope you'll update sooner!
1/6/2019 c25 Scarlet 'n Blossom
Scarlet : Germany huh? Cool! That's great news! Athough it's a bit worrying for spend your time to keep writing.
Blossom : But it's okay! Good luck there!
Scarlet : Now let's begin for the review.
Blossom : Like Rosy-san said, Senmaru existed in history, so he is canon. Senmaru is his childhood name, and Takayoshi is his name after coming of age ceremony (genpuku).
Scarlet : Childhood name... actually I've found Takatora childhood name. Yokichi, it sounds pfft... doesn't suit him. *laughs* XD
Blossom : Well joking aside, I wonder Nagachika has a childhood name too? Deciding oc name is so difficult, right?
Scarlet : Next! 'Because she knew Takatora is worse than her.' Actually I don't know what it means... since my english isn't that fluent... Q_Q
Blossom : Even so, I'm glad you wrote a little moment of my dear Suzu with Takatora. *squeal* X3
Scarlet : But I feel bad for didn't wrote one for Nagachika/Hana in my fanfic. Sorry... ._.
Blossom : Alright, that's the end of for review. Sorry, it's not really long because I'm worried my english would be pain to read... qwq *slapped*
Scarlet : We actually want to review more but... I think its enough. Well, good luck in Germany and take care! Keep writing! nwn)9
1/6/2019 c25 RosyMiranto18
Hey, welcome back to Forbidden Girl finally... Huh? What do you mean by worrying about this chapter's qual- oh, it's because now it's Shikoku and i might be grilling you on trivial errors like what happened to Aini's fic, isn't it? Oh well... let's start with the reply first.

-Oh, that's too bad. I rechecked the last chapter, and yes, you only mentioned Tsuneoki and Nagayoshi, and not Nobuteru.
-Sighs... yes, it is. Though who do you mean by 'they', the Mouri Clan or those who's locked out of a loop for 33 years?
-Hm... i see. I guess it's Toida's way to make Tadayasu slowly accepting his biological grandmother. Though does this means Hayakawa will move in with the Mouri after Odawara?
-And somehow, when i think about Hirobe Yuukita and Kikkawa Chie, mu mind got drafted into the other Yuu and Chie *cough*Narukami and Satonaka*cough*

Ugh... so you're moving to Germany too. Though when you said "it will be harder for me to update there", i am wondering. If you took 6 months for this chapter, then how long it will take after you moved to Germany? Anyway, enough about that. Let's move on to he chapter now...
Oh, and Senmaru existed in the History, as he later changed his named to Toodou Takayoshi.

-Yeah, seeing an Uesugi in this part of country feels very strange no maater how you would slice it.
-Thought it's nice to see that Yuukita is quite a humorous person.
-Yeah... i bet Yuu volunteered to take the news before everyone else because of Chie, Nagachika... let's see if you gave him your blessing, but we both know we need to hear Motoharu first.
-Is the injury that serious? I hope it's not a coma, Nagachika...
-Technically, it's "Distant Cousin-in-law", Nagachika.
blank* Okay, i already saw a massive error here. Asuka didn't accompany Aki to Shikoku, she met him after the negotiation. Them going to Osaka via boat implies Asuka accompanying him to Shikoku or they're meeting somewhere in Shikoku instead of Kyoto. So maybe it should be a "Horseride back to Osaka from Kyoto" instead of "Boatride to Osaka from Shikoku"... because Kyoto is in Honshuu...
-You know, having a Toyotomi badge seems like a nice touch, but i suggest you to make it small and put on the sleeves or even as buttons. Because Aki has his own family crest, which looks similar to the Rutherford Atom.
-I'm pretty sure at this time, what she meant by 'attracted' is to accompanying him as a travelling companion, not as... 'that'. Though i know that this will come eventually.
-Also, you forgot to mention the real reason why the barely-impossible negotiation with Motochika failed, which is Aki being told the real truth of the Shimantogawa Tragedy.
-Oh, i thought you have introduced yourself to Chie back then, Yuukita. That's too bad... sorry, i can't help myself to stop making that NarukamiXSatonaka joke when it comes to ChieXYuukita ship hete.
-Yeah, he really is that respectful and chivalrous, hahaha... but wait, who and when someone told Yuu that Chie is mute.
-No, left those two now, Nagachika... spoilsport.
facepalm* I thought Aki already told Asuka Natsuko's name during the trip.
glancing at IDBH chapter 261 containing a certain scene of Aki and Asuka before coughing* Maybe you should check that *cough*.
-Oh, so now you're learning under Sen no Rikyuu too. That's nice... though i wish he actually appear in this story someday...
-So... what Takatora does to relax? Studying?! *it's a Cold Steel II reference, you don't need to know*
-So what's the crafting you made, Senmaru, hello?
-I'm surprised no one shove her fork (Asuka) or dagger (Nene) on your ass for that, Hideyoshi... *shakes head* and this is a nice change since in the previous version, Asuka isn't there to accompany Aki reporting.

(Not) sorry, but i don't care about Mobile Legends. So i guess that's all for now. See you in months and Keep Update!
6/10/2018 c24 Scarlet 'n Blossom
Scarlet : Nah it's okay. We're also having trouble gathering the will to write lol... :"3
Blossom : Oh Tadayasu, wise beyond his years~
And... I wonder Irobe is gonna propose Chie in the next chapter? o(〃〃)o
Scarlet : I hope so but isn't it a little too early?
Blossom : Welp who knows. Alright then we're looking forward to the next chapter!
6/9/2018 c24 RosyMiranto18
Sadly, it is. It’s been a month since the last chapter. And I can understand why this chapter is shorter, because it’s more or less a filler here. Anyway, I am going to review alone due to how short it is. But before that, let’s see what Kuroshio and Aoi said to the replys, shall we?

Kuroshio: Sorry for that, it was on chapter 21 and Rosy-san is obviously forgetting that due to how long the updates of this story are. Then again, if I actually appeared then, then I obviously has already known of it. As for Chie, I’m still proud of her despite her recklessness. I just hope that we will meet again hopefully on the same side. Maybe she will try engaging Oji-ue again in a friendlier sparring times later. And please excuse Aoi for that suspicion, she has major distrusting issues (*whispering* Especially later in Sekigahara when Uesugi is taking the Western Side) In case you don’t know, her parents were killed by the Takeda Clan back in Mikatagahara and it made her completely hates Takeda, and later Sanada. Especially when she massacred the Takeda Cavalry at Nagashino with a musket in a psychotic revenge when she’s THIRTEEN. I am her partner (not romantically) and I know her since Mikatagahara, so I know a lot about her.

Okay, before I start, I would say that I have played Sanadamaru, so if you want to ask about Sarutobi Sasuke, I can help you.

So Nobuteru survived… I thought he died like his ‘other self’, Tsuneoki.

Yeah, not exactly young man is already a good idea since Nagachika is already 35 by this point.

Of course, keeping a secret for 33 years is a bad thing. No matter how good the intention is, the longer it is kept being a secret, the more hurt it is when it’s revealed.

Er… wait, forgive me if I’m forgetting something, but is Lady Toida really intentionally gave Tadayasu hints about Hayakawa’s lineage? If it is, why?

Still, I’m glad that this family is able to reconcile peacefully this quickly.

*playing Bag Raiders - Shooting Stars*

And Hi, Yuu-kun. Well. I guess that’s everything for this chapter. Keep Update!
P.S.: Maybe the synopsis for the Conquest of Shikoku has some lines like "Since he encountered him back in Iyo, Nagachika starting to wonder what happened between the Genius of Shikoku and Chousokabe Motochika for all these years."
5/10/2018 c23 Scarlet 'n Blossom
Scarlet : Alright, we're back~
Blossom : And... Tsuneoki met his end. Now I feel a bit guilty from saying that in previous chapter. *sweatdrops* qwq
Scarlet : *plays moment of slience*
Blossom : Stop it, let. You're gonna make me cry even more. *snorts*
Scarlet : Pfft. Okay. Oh, Chie fought bravely. Btw, what kind of sword is Chie using? Is it like katana or maybe ootachi?
Blossom : Hey, don't you think that Yuukita going to propose Chie? They look so cute together. :3
Scarlet : Eh, that's too early to answer that but... maybe? Oh, and one thing before I forget. But if I remember correctly, isn't Sasuke hide his true identity that Hanzo is his shisho? I know that I haven't play Sanadamaru yet but I've watch some certain cutscenes about it... owo
Blossom : Alright, keep writing! Mata ne~
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