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5/10/2020 c19 1SleepyToucans
The idea of a spell having to tell a story with the command at the end is an interesting idea.
The stakes are certainly on the rise with this chapter, makes me wonder how the characters will overcome their situation. I get the feeling that it will take more than a magic spell to solve the problem.
8/23/2018 c13 9ArtificialRangerLiuria
Haha, scratch that "queen's handmaiden" comment. If Nan's gonna call a noble lady by her firstname out of spite, she'll have her fingers cut off in no time. But she's young, she has plenty of time to learn.

Bringing hundreds of minions back from the brink of death is certainly a way to strengthen the loyalty of the masses. Vaati can be a good little overlord when he tries!
8/23/2018 c12 ArtificialRangerLiuria
I love that Nan is a much more competent paige than anyone would have guessed. For a chatterbox, she has the perception and resourcefulness of someone who has survived decades of court skirmishes. I definitely see her going places, she could easily be a queen's handmaiden.

Okay I know the ending line was mainly supposed to be humorous, but it's true that Nan's disrespect is more important than anything else, because it's proof that Vaati is already losing his sway. Better hurry, you sour grape.
8/23/2018 c10 ArtificialRangerLiuria
Eugh, how can any of these crazies eat pastries for breakfast? My stomach is churning just thinking about it. Has Vaati ever heard of rice? Oatmeal?

When Vaati learned about Alysse, I expexted him to say something like, "Hm, maybe it'll be the end of her." But, um, pregnant at fifty six? I wouldn't count on it lasting, in fact I'd be scared if it did.

"If they're loyal," Vaati says. Hah. Can't wait for Ruuya to be Vaati's loyal partner-in-crime, following him across the lands on their quest to offer snide remarks to every person in Hyrule.

I don't think Ruuya laying all of Alysse's cards flat without the woman's permission is a very good idea. If I knew an evil sorcerer who wanted to kill my friend/adoptive mom, I wouldn't go running to him with info that could make him see her as an even bigger threat.
8/23/2018 c8 ArtificialRangerLiuria
I wonder if Vaati felt any guilt once he realized that Flow was actually hot
8/23/2018 c7 ArtificialRangerLiuria
Oh man, Nan is absolutely destroying Vaati. Poor guy probably hasn't even had breakfast yet. But alas, I live for his pain. And the plentiful doubts that accompany it. I'm very much looking forward to Vaati being ever more disappointed in his memory as the days pass.
8/23/2018 c6 ArtificialRangerLiuria
Props to you for not making Vaati ambiguously 14 to 24 years old, lol. I also like that Ruu isn't afraid to give him sh*t, not because she's a sassy Sue (ugh all the Sue stories omg) but because she knows how to evaluate a situation and exactly what boundaries she can push.
8/23/2018 c5 ArtificialRangerLiuria
"Perhaps Vaati had imprisoned a giant cucco instead."
Ah yes, an old fear left over from childhood, lol.

Hah, when Ruu says she's really a Gerudo, I'm sure Vaati's thinking, "I think I'd know a beautiful woman if I saw one." Little does Ruu know, Vaati is one of those men her sisters warned her about, in more ways than one.
8/22/2018 c4 ArtificialRangerLiuria
I like your bit about Gerudo culture being not only female-focused but highly sexually separate. There's something quaint about being uncomfortable with clothes and things reserved for a different sex. (I watch too many historical dramas lol)

That's Vaati's book, calling it now. There's some old fashioned version of modern Hylian (which is the same as saying "Shakespeare wrote in modern English" aka probably still indecipherable lol), Calatian, and Picori.

And another coincidence, Seline is very close to the name of a certain OC.

“Maybe a woman did not need to be a warrior or thief to be strong, after all.”
Yes. Ruuya with the life lessons. Wholesome content.
8/20/2018 c3 ArtificialRangerLiuria
I knew it, Flow was some powerful maiden who got charmed by Vaati. By sheer coincidence, I also have a Vaati-obsessed OC who is a cloud sorceress, AND her sigil is a crescent (kinda similar to a sickle, right?) Great minds must think alike, lol.

I really like how you combined the two Dark Worlds from ALttP and FSA. I'm assuming that normal people are transformed, while sorcerers get to maintain their original body?

Oh wow, instead of just the same old Palace of Winds (well it's not really the same considering he remodeled it twice) you've made an entirely new palace for him! This is so exciting, I can't wait for Ruuya to visit so I can envision it. I've seen homes and temples built into rock faces, I can hardly imagine the opulence of an entire palace hanging off a cliff, omg.

I actually noticed in FSA that after Vaati "explodes", he disappears in the ssme kind of ripple that appears when you or Shadow enter the Dark World. So I like to headcanon that he used the last ounce of his strength to flee to the Dark World, rather than him having been killed outright.
8/20/2018 c2 ArtificialRangerLiuria
fleets has definitely spoiled me on wizzrobes, so I'm very happy to see them get some more love in this fic. I'm also interested in your inclusion of the dark world. I feel like it's often overlooked in fics, probably in part due to it being purified at the end of ALttP. (It kind of just exists for no reason in FSA lol)

"a two legged white goat wearing a blue dress"
Oh. It's Lucifer.

Omg you meshed both Dark Worlds! So do mages get to keep their original forms or not?
8/20/2018 c1 ArtificialRangerLiuria
It's not a very good idea to introduce so many characters at once when all we know of them is "gerudo of various ages". It's needlessly confusing. You should probably have restructured things so that what you wanted us to learn in the first fee scenes could have been communicated by fewer characters.
5/16/2018 c13 Guest
Know what would be hilarious?
If Alysse's kid turned out to be this era's Link.
Lol. Imagine little Link sitting on Uncle Vaati's lap as he reads a story! Pfff! XD
5/15/2018 c13 lordvaatithewindmage
Will vaati be getting his magic back anytime soon? I've kind of forgotten why he lost it in the first place...also i loved the addition of vaatis little fangs, for some reason it was a little detail that added loads of imsight to vaatis emotions. Im glad that they saved ruuya, but will she be able to walk properly without her toes?
4/26/2017 c1 2darahdeschain2
well you pretty much grabbed my attention from the get go. what a way to begin. I mean I'm always going to relate to a character whose first action is to steal a forbidden book cause she feels entitled to information so that helped a lot. but yeah, there was tension, there was were stakes, high emotions, satisfying ending to the first chapter. I should have checked this out sooner!
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