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7/19/2017 c1 1TwisterLea
definitely intriguing, I must say! As I play the game now, I kept seeing name droppers and imagined them as Samantha and such, lol
5/4/2017 c3 A tree
I read your story and I have to say, I'm really liking it so far. You got a solid foundation for a story that I can't wait to where Bubbles ends up in the later chapters through working with the cogs. She's got a lot to deal with for sure, hiding the secret from her parents and other toons. One feedback I can give is that the first two chapters's paragraphs are too condensed and hard to read. Consider spacing them out like you did with the third chapter. There's also some typos and grammar errors you might've missed as well. A major one being with how some dialogue lacks quotations marks or overlaps with non-dialogue sentences. Other than that, keep up with the good writing!

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