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11/9/2017 c7 nolongerhereimgonenowbye
You might want to comb through this chapter for the typos:

/"Hekel . . . (H)ow did you Jonah working for you(?)/
/He pointed a claw towards Amy, who lay still, blood dry on her (throaSinet? What's that?)/
/Amy frowned. "You can't . . . . still smell know, can you?"/ this is written properly, i just dont get it
And in the AN:
/Ahahaha! to the few of you who are still (reading, not riding) this, thank you!/

tbh its been forever since I read something that didn't space out the romance over tens of thousands of words so seeing Ian's sudden confession about his undying love that immediately transitioned to a relationship left me kinda jarred. And well. yeah no that's it, the entire confession to relationship is just really quick. I'm not against it tho, the hugging scene was totally cute even though I got secondhand embarrassment from thinking about the fact that they kissed in front of everyone. (Cracks up thinking about Dan as a horse's reaction to it)

I like the subtle slip of possibly unrequited love on Sinead's part, even though she's still a jerk to Ian. Or maybe that /explains/ her being a jerk to Ian? It was unexpected, but in a nice way.

I'm just slightly (make that majorly but refusing to admit to my confusion) perplexed at the inconsistencies in terms of animal-to-human transitions. Could what triggers the transformations differ depending on the person? Ian turned back because he resisted his animalistic urges on someone he as a human loved but as a wolf viewed as prey. But his wolf body /became/ his human body, however unharmed.

Yet in the case of Amy, her human self and her animal self took on two different bodies, one having to die for the other to suddenly... appear.

Maybe it's the different between herbivores and carnivores? Carnivores have to try to think like a human (in terms of love? or hunting? because humans eat too, as omnivores) to return to normalcy, whereas herbivores (as peaceful animals who don't really have a sense of bloodlust when they search to eat, since their human counterpart must think it akin to eating salad), have to die? Just die? and then they'll find themselves in their human body gazing at their dead animal carcass?

I hope the story doesn't end with most of them still as animals. Speaking of animals, how are the humans even conversing with them? Did they retain their human voiceboxes and speech as they transformed? Were they talking in english (unlikely, their animal noises cant replicate human sounds), or some other uniform communication?

God, I'm being such a pretentious dick with all these questions. Sorry. And sorry again for the kilometer long review.

Also last but not least pls help Jonah and don't make him blind in one eye when he turns back. His leg is beyond broken if they can see the /bone/. Goddamn. And also when you say that the animals were resting on the grassland, I hope you mean all of them (Ted, Reagan, Madison, Ned, where are you.)!
8/14/2017 c2 37prosecutedifcontacted
Will there be a next time? I heard that you were leaving.
8/11/2017 c6 22scrittore18
Jonah! Finally! I can't wait to read what happens next.
8/11/2017 c6 nolongerhereimgonenowbye
Wow Ian, you're so useful as a human *claps sarcastically* amazing. It's almost as if your dialogue filled in your inability to fight.

Haha, jokes aside, I would 100% be alright with you using my theories. (Cuz that'd mean I was RIGHT *pumps fist*) Also I loved the action for this chapter. Just wanted to point that out.

So Hekel/Hakal (idk) just... surrendered... because he saw the dead body of Amy... what an idiot... he should have foreseen this when he fuckin sent the wolves after them for the final battle...

Wait wait! Going back to my earlier theory about having alternate bodies, maybe Amy is still alive? Seeing as her gazelle body is dead, maybe her human body is just floating around aimlessly inside, wanting to get out but being unable to because her animal body is dead. So they'd have to... I don't know...do something to extract her human body?

Also #Jonah Wizard has entered the fray. Welcome. Who knew One Eye was actually Jonah all along. Meaning Ian wasn't even the only wolf. Jokes on you, Ian.

Or maybe not, seeing as Ian is human again. *shrugs* I can't wait for the next chapter, I'm excited to see Hekel's explanation! Though, don't rush yourself, we can wait.
8/6/2017 c5 2339CluesStrangerThingsFan-Star
Seriously! Did it have to be Amy who died?
8/1/2017 c5 nolongerhereimgonenowbye
I don't know what to do... everyone is publishing stories so fast and leaping ahead in writing skills and I'm just,,,, lazin around,,,,, y'all see Addict's amazing fighting scenes,,, my best was once where a character punched someone... a glorious, three word sentence: "She punched him.

Anyway, more to the story. Here's my reply. AAHSHSGJSBALDSJFONEONAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAH

Hnng yes, oh I do declare I am immensely excited by this update.

First off, I've got to say, Hekel is creepy as shit. Like Jesus Christ does he like Amy, or her gazelle body? *whispers*isthislowkeybeastiality*stabs self*. Anyway, whether it's the animal or not, I think we can all agree Hekel is weird.

Next is the description and fight scenes. Mhm YESS that was some good shit right there. Especially the scenes leading up the the battle, like seriously that description of them running is something next level.

Last is my favorite: throwing out crap theories.
1: Either Amy's not really dead, or they're going to bring her back. Addict! We all know you can't kill off a main character!
2: You have to hold back your animal instincts to turn back? But that doesn't explain why they didn't turn back during the first few months while still fighting against being an animal. So maybe it's tuned to your human emotions? Like he felt revulsion at what he was going to do as a wolf, even though as a wolf it'd be natural. So his human side woke up again? Idk.
3: The animal body doesn't seemed to be tuned to what they do as a human, since Ian was wearing exactly what he did on the day of the fire, without any bloodstains from the recent battle. So maybe the animal bodies are like an alternate body inside them that's not really theirs? Meaning wounds and such won't be transferred? Ian's human shoulder seems to be fine.
4: You gotta forgive me for this huge review. I'm like your biggest fan by now.
7/4/2017 c4 39CluesFan-Star
Don't ask why I'm reviewing as a guest!
Great story! It's great to have you back!
7/4/2017 c4 nolongerhereimgonenowbye
YEAH BABYYYYY THE FINAL BATTLE IS COMING.

So like, just like how the herbivores disgusted by the carnivores, they don't mind eating grass and stuff? And also are the small animals able to keep up? or are they just left behind XD Also, how can they recognize each other? Can they talk to other animals? How do they deal with heats? Om god, do they have /mates/.?

IS HAKAL ONE EYE? #Conspiracy theories Or maybe I just skipped something *cough*.

I AM BOTH HYPED AN ANGRY AT THE CLIFFHANGER. UPDATE SOON PLS
6/17/2017 c3 2Rival Argentica
"The wind seemed to scream in anguish, lamenting the loss of the sun." Wow. I LOVE that. It was a pleasant shock of poetry.

Also, I can't wait to find out if or when the Cahills are going to get fully consumed by their animal instincts.
6/17/2017 c2 Rival Argentica
Oooh, MAGIC! My favourite plot twist in the world!
Ahem. So, I thought this story was weird, but then again I salute you for pursuing the idea. I'm looking forward to what happens next!
Who is Hakal? What magic potion? What happened that made the Cahills want to have that potion? What's going to happen to Amy? And what's with the fires? And where's Jonah?! And Sinead...wants to eat Madison?! She's not slowly being overcome by her animal instincts, is she?
6/17/2017 c1 Rival Argentica
Cute! And a bit weird. For some reason, I can see them as Kung Fu Panda characters. I dunno. I'm obssessed with anthropomorphic animals too. I thought it was hilarious for Ian to have his tongue keep lolling out like that... XD You should do a fanart of this so I could imagine them better!
I wonder what's up with the Cahill kids. I have to read the next chappie then..
6/16/2017 c3 nolongerhereimgonenowbye
On no, there's two eagles now. Will Hakal and Ted have to fight?

Why does Ian have such a burning hatred towards towards Sinead? On that point, why does Sinead have to be so shady and hissy at everything?

I hope Amy and the other herbivores don't hate on the carnivores for doing something they need. Just because they can survive on grass doesn't mean others can. They /need/ to hunt to survive, that's all there is to it.

Natalie and Ian didn't have to describe it so diligently though *shudders*.

There are a couple typos, one of them, where the wolves feel into line instead of fell.
6/16/2017 c2 nolongerhereimgonenowbye
Wait wait, do they like in a savannah next to the sahara? Shouldn't they each live in their own habitat?

I loved the description of the storm, and Hakal is shrouded with mystery, which is great. I have some confusion though. They turned into animals, did they immediately separate after then, and then slowly over the years get back in touch?

You're plot is amazing! Can't wait to see what happens next.
6/15/2017 c3 bookfangirl445
The plot is awesome, as usual , and you described all the details of the story well. Not to mention the way u described the characters, it's just like in the story . I can't wait to find out what happens next. Keep writing !
6/13/2017 c2 22scrittore18
This is ... interesting. I've always been impressed by unique ideas/plots. This one definitely unique! And Ian asked the question I was wondering: WHERE is Jonah? (Sinead didn't eat him right? lol)
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