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11h c19 8Lightningscar
Two good chappies. Kit sure has had it rough, huh.

Good call on keeping the past short so we get the idea of what Kit has been through before his stay with the Air Pirates.
And good reactions from both Chris and Matt.

As for ch 19:

Nice reaction from Chris to the recording.

Louie... he is one wearing green if I remember correctly?
Also, am probably missing something, but when did Louie time-travel? Or is that just you making things fit as you go? :)
And if memory serves, Loius and his brothers are their teenage forms from Quack Pack or whatever?

Some very interesting safety traps to protect the Time Tub. Louis really got a sharp eye and good deductive skills.

Quite the dilemma Chris found himself in when he had the chance to put Kit with his dad... also good story from Mickey about the consequences of their actions.
Though, a little curious... if they can travel to the past, and their world still exists there, couldn't they then put the Seal on the Heart, creating a timeline where the world still existed? Then again, it would probably flay the time/space continium apart.

Damn, Matt was not happy (for good reason)... think Chris should be thankful his bear-hind ain't sore... if memory serves, Matt had threatened to spank him before. Oh well.
Nice picture of Kit... blackmail material XD

Nice fight in the end... good descriptions. poor Chris... his encounter with Scar really has a put a fear of thunder/lightning in him.

Interesting character in the end... seems things are moving forward now. :)

Curious to see what happens next.

Yours sincerely,

Lightningscar
1/1 c18 Starbear KL
You're more than welcome for using Jeffery, summer, and Melissa in this chapter. Jeffery played the role of hero very well here,and it was my plesure to have taken part in this episode allowing the fan fiction return of my Baby and creation Jeffery starbear.

This is only the beging for Jeffery In Da Hearts. So please everyone look foward to more apperace of Starbear and family.

As a review this Chapter had its ups and downs when we was writing it, but the Good Lord helped us work trough that.

Bogo was a geart double agent and mr hameil would be a great voice actor for him.

Review score wise 10 over all. had a great time reliving some memories of Kit the Magician while we wrote this chapter.

As stated peviously I'm not that great at writing reviews,But again thank you for useing Jeffery and family. and Thank you Cyclone blaze for your editing I did however notice Jeffery repeated the "oooh he must be really brave to do that" line, Like myself He does tend to repeat himself at times so nothing that wrong.

Over all really enjoyed this chapter
11/22/2020 c17 Lightningscar
Oh boy.

Matthew and Chris ain't going to let Kit out of their sights after his story is done... (a little warning/advice though... remember that a story should move forward. Be careful not to focus too much of yours, and ours, time on the past, even if it explains a lot about a character)

Really loved Kit together with Chester... not sure if Chester is an OC or another Disney character I have forgotten with age, but it was interesting seeing Kit being like the baby brother of sorts... plus, laughed at the actor lessons... especially Kit being the baby XD

Nice write of the 'good-guy-going-about-it-the-wrong-way' trope with Mr Witherspoon trying to get Kit back to the orphanage.

Damn, Kit went from a bad situation to a shitty one. Nice re-invention of Stromboli though and nice rewrite of "I will make a man out of you"

Curious to see what happens next.

Yours sincerely,

Lightningscar
11/11/2020 c17 Starbear KL
Well after much time and other thing's in our lifes We all hope you enjoyed episode 17. I'm now a me,ber of Kc52885's writing team and wanted to thank everyone for your time and any reviews you give. Thanks to Cyclone Blaze for his wonderful job of editing Your deservingly eraned it.

As for a review from my vantage point I'd read most of this chapter as we worked on it though Kit being smacked by the paper was a bit hard on me at first I learned to understand it could have been worse thankfully it wasn't.

Chester is a great new addition and Kit really trusted him.

Nice reference to the comic long flight home as well paying honor and homage to the orginal tale of kits past is a nice touch.

Kit wanting to see planes and fly was always his dream its nice you added that in here that'sone part I never seen in the lead up to the full chapter. Nicely done as always my friend.

Stroboli for thoes not in the know is from pinoco but he's been bear afied here Still the same person though.

Again Dispte what we both been trough Kc5 my friend over the time this chapternwas being writen I comend you for not giving up and keeping your story going.

Eagerly await the Next chapter Cause we both know who is finaly back in that one. :) and was my plesure adding that certian cute happy bear boy to be with Kit again.

The only hint I'm giving is if any reader that is reading da hearts that remembers Kit the magician co wrote by me and Kc52885 years ago you'll remeber our litte suprse in chapter 18.

Till next time fans.

Sincerly Starbear Kit Lee.

Starbear Reminds you all to be safe and keep the faith. God Bless you all.

When you wish uponn a star no matter who you are Wish to all your heats desier cause wishes do come true.

Walt Disney.

P.s to Kc52885 and Cyclone Blaze you guys are the best friends a guy could wish for Love you both my brothers.
11/11/2020 c14 Dino girl 16
Hi again! So so so SORRY for the lack in reviews, but I've been so busy! Plus I have depression and anxiety so it's sometimes hard for me to be present in the moment. I promise I'll read more as soon as I can!
Your ever loyal friend and fan:
D-gal
9/19/2020 c16 Lightningscar
Great kudos and cookies to you and Cyclone Blaze :) This was fun and good chapter :)

Had great fun with the whole Aerokinesis classes thing... can definitely understand Kit's mounting frustration with not being able to do something.
And poor Baloo got a shock.
And probably shouldn't but couldn't help but chuckle at poor Kit and his troubles with his phone. Standing around and waiting to be picked up is no fun.
LOL, cheeky bear cubs teasing old Baloo like that XD Though, if they really wanna be cheeky, they should tell Matt when he eats that he will end up as big as Baloo XD
LOL'ed at the titles for Element Users... luckily you got the water in Water Brewing or I would instantly have thought of beer brewers and the like... to be honest, it was still my first thought XD

Smiled a little at the thought of the three boys being summoned to Headmaster Khan's office. But it was for quite a serious thing.
Applause you both for the Colonel... have to honest, had to google him to remember who he was and from what Disney he was from. Been so long since I have watched 101 Dalmatians.
A little unclear... did Khan leave the room or not during the mission briefing?
Good description of the Heart of the World... though, maybe you should consider rephrasing this slightly: *The Heart of the World takes the form of a giant keyhole, and that keyhole leads to the Heart of the World* Can be a bit confusing: Is the Heart of the World the keyhole or is the keyhole the gateway to the Heart of the World? Hope you get my point.

Very interesting that Kit would be the teamleader based on his streetwise abilities since he (I assume) has considerably less training than the two others.
Nice touch with the tech-savvy Max fixing their phones.

Ah, love Oliver and Co... one of the few songs I can identify from the lyrics alone since I grew up with the Danish versions... you should try listening to them, though you probably won't understand much just by listening XD
Smiled at Kit being so protective and understanding of Oliver... plus, now I have the image of him grabbing Huey's beak in my mind XD
And Kit's friends are starting to understand what life Kit has had.

LOL at the classic: "You didn't ask"... Teenagers XD

Great battle scene where everyone got to show their stuff. Loved Huey's arrows and Kit putting his Windmilling powers to good use.
*"Sphaera tutationis: hoc mundo a malo defendat!"* Sphere something: Protect against all evil?

LOL at the celebration yell from Max... better be careful... Huey got blackmail material XD

So, Kit got his first off-world mission and a victory under his belt. He should, and rightfully, be proud... but I have a feeling that dad and brother bear dearest are going to blow a casket

Excellent chapter with good descriptions, humor, character grow and plot advancement :)

Looking forward to more.

Yours sincerely,

Lightningscar
9/15/2020 c16 Guest
This is not a bad story but there are places it feel weird given the source metrial. I'd like not to be reviling my name but I been aroundwatcing the progression of this story remember when you was writing with another person years ago but i Guess he stoped writing and, dissaperd thats a shame cause I loved Jeffery and Melissa in thoes stories I just was to shy to write a review for you two back then.

I enjoyied most of reading all 16 chapters of this but im not sure i could keep following it. life's just in the way.

Any way best of luck and hope the story goes as you planed it. and if you think this is that person you use to co write with well it's not im just a random passer by and fellow talspin fan.

The staticbear76
7/21/2020 c1 Dino girl 16
Awww,no problem!:D Glad you like the reviews!:) And thanks for the info, I can't wait to finish it,and to read whatever you have planed for it next!:) Both sound(and are) wonderful!:) Glad to know a fellow happy story lover!:) Believe me, I like all kinds of happy,mushy stuff,romance, family,friendship, all that good stuff!:) Thanks for the story, I've read some of it, but not all,and it's an Ann29 story!:I Whoo-hoo!:D Yeah, have to agree with ya there, LOVE happy stories, don't mind dramatic ones, but super scary? No thank you! I'm the family scaredy cat, so if I'll watch,or read it,it can't be that bad! Lol! Thank you so much, I'm glad my reviews are positive, that's one of the reasons I started reviewing was to share as much positivity as I could! Goodbye for now,and thanks! God bless you and stay safe!
Your friend and fan
D-gal:)
7/21/2020 c1 Kit Lee
Thank you for the kind rewiew D-gal on Spred your wings. I'm also a sucker for cute happy storie. Im not sure when the new version of it will be posted, But we're working in it though the orginal is more of a script adapted to a story Id orginaly planed it to be more thought out I know its rather short as of now but im greatful for kind reviews like yours.

Can't remember the name of it but another Ann29 story you may like is her christmas one I won't spoil it though, but its a tuching one. Like kc5 we both are okay with drmatic things but we both apaul anything with dark scary stuff.

well gotta run thanks again for the super positvity. :D
7/20/2020 c1 Dino girl 16
Awww,that's ok!:) And no problem, I'm glad you like my reviews!:) Thanks for the info, I'm going to continue reading spread your wings though, both original and whatever you have in store for it next!:) I read chapter one yesterday,and believe me, whenever you get my review its gonna be one happy review!:) I'll keep my eyes peeled for more information about it! And no problem, I thought every Kit fan should know yesterday was r.J Williams birthday! By the way, Sally Struthers (aka Rebecca) birthday is this Friday! The only reason I knew this is because Ann29 posted a story about it in her fanfic Planes, Parts, and Pieces, chapter three I believe! Thanks again for the info!:)Goodbye for now! God bless you and stay safe!
Your friend and fan,
D-gal:)
7/19/2020 c15 5Bookwriter94
Nice, I really liked how Kit and his friends handled their first day in school, but I could already tell that there next day is going to get a little tougher. Nevertheless, I hope there prepared for it.

Anyway, I liked the backstory for both Don Karnage and the Iron Vulture. Still, I have a funny feeling that we'll be seeing him and his pirate crew somewhere in the story.

Well good luck on the next episode and stay safe out there!
7/19/2020 c14 Bookwriter94
Yo, what's up! Sorry I hadn't read and reviewed your episodes, I was a little...busy working on my stories. Not to mention I had to focus on other things in life.

Anyway, now that's over and done with, time to begin reviewing the first of the two episodes:

At long last, both Kit and Cavin are now at Dedi Academy. I wonder how Kit's first day will start out?

Well onward to the next episode!
7/19/2020 c1 Kit Lee
Hello D-gal sorry for the pasue in replies just you know how life gets in the way. thanks for your sweet kind review on sperd your wings Kc5 and I talked about making it look better and update it some not sure yet wher we might post it eiter on his page or a new co join page but i thought you might wanna know ahead of time I got your list of stories on kit the magician which thank yoj for that review as well i wont spolil what happends to kit in his attempt to learn magic tricks bug im sure you'll get a giggle out of his lil predicament

also thanks for the remider A very happy 44th or round that age birth day R.j we Kit fans wish you a wonderful b-day heres looking at you ace.

Eiter me or kc5 will let you know what we decided on things just give us a little time hes working on da hearts 16 as well as helping reupdate thoes stories i did long ago.

one was kinda a tad much in the scary department but we're clearung that up..

I can hint its like p&l but well i wont ruin it just it might be dramatic in parts but nothing more so then some parts of the orginal da hearts the organisation phenoix unless life keeps me from doing so i'll try to keep you posted.

Kit Lee aka Jeffery Starbear Cunningham oops did i just drop a kit the magician spoiler you'll have to read to find out ;)
7/19/2020 c1 Dino girl 16
Hi! I just thought you might like to know that today is r.J Williams birthday! Yep, today is Kit's voice actor's birthday! Happy birthday! You did a great job voicing Kit, Dink,and so many other characters! Happy birthday to you too,whenever that may be!:)Goodbye for now!:)
Your friend and fan,
D-gal:D
7/18/2020 c14 Dino girl 16
To KC52885
Ok, here's a review of what I read of the fourteenth chapter:D I still have more to go,but here's what I read so far!:D All I can say is... AWESOME! AWESOME! AWESOME! Sweet, enjoyable, and really funny!:D The supper scene was very good! I gotta watch that episode of Talespin where Ballo learns his manners! Where Matthew took that picture, awwww!:D But my favorite scene so far *has't* to be the ogeres!:D It was SO funny! But also a little exciting! I think Cavin and Kit are going to be great friends!:D Kinda makes sense, when you consider they share the same voice actor (well at least in the sixth season of the Gummi Bears!) Great job as always!You never fail to impress! You are a great writer!Keep up the great work!God bless you,and stay safe!
Your friend and fan:D-gal
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