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10/17/2018 c1 Guest
OOOOO MOTHERFUCKER YOU PUT THE 'REMBER HAPPY DAY' THING RIGHT THE FUCK IN THERE SO SMOOTH LIKE THE ENTIRE STORY WASN'T JUST A BUILDUP TO THAT. YOU CLASSY CHEEKY BASTARD, YOU JUST 2HU RICKROLLED ME in a STORY. MAJOR KUDOS. I'm mad, but much more than that, I'm impressed. Seriously, this is a well written story, the execution and plot progression for everything is just phenominal. Very nice pacing, with believable characters, even if it gives off slight vibes of a medieval(or sengoku, I guess) bedtime story. Very well done.
8/26/2018 c5 Annycc
Touhou PC-98 reference
8/26/2018 c1 Shnail
interesting...
8/25/2018 c5 2Acerman
Is she now in the Dreamworld, where her PC98 mansion was located? Yes I see where you're going for her. I like that she's civilizing, if just the tiniest bit. The previous two chapters, it was really uncomfortable seeing someone I imagine so refined to brutish. Honestly she did and still does remind me of Seija. I don't think you have to worry about japanese politics here either. I am liking this story though, and am curious to see how you make stuff happen.
4/9/2018 c4 Annycc
The best fanfic ever
3/29/2018 c4 Crab2903
Last review was me, Fanfiction automatically logged me out for some reason :/
3/29/2018 c4 Guest
Man, the work you put into this alone would be enough to be considered as industrial-grade writing, seriously I'm not blowing up smoke - this is fantastic. The portrayal and the character development for Yuuka just feels... Right in this. Considering that she shouldn't be able to stomp right away; Having an op character right off the bat would just turn out to be boring sometimes. If this is about Yuuka slowly rising to power through her sheer will or intent, or that she gets stronger through gaining trust or faith, that's ok. But does she have to rely SOLELY on the fear from others as spiritual, steroidal means to make her more powerful?

Another thing, will this Story have any connections to the pc-98 era Yuuka, y'know, at the time where she had a mansion and a servant or stuff like that? I dunno. Is this is only based on the modern Yuuka; Or from the modern Yuuka, to pc-98, then to the present modern Yuuka in Gensokyo? Sorry that I'm pretty much rambling at this point like I was at the last review, but it would be very interesting to see how this would turn out. I know I've said this a lot now, but you're really slaying it man, keep it up! As I said last time - I don't know what you could improve on since it's perfect (Maybe other than ''Even without the man actively keeping 'him' down,'') Thank you so much for the excellent read, can't wait to see what happens next.
2/11/2018 c3 Crab2903
Amazing stuff; I see no sign of deterioration in quality here and the narrative is still spot on for Yuuka. It was epic to see how Yuuka has become this Savage Youkai, to a literal Deus Ex Machina; which hypes the feck out of part II. And thanks for putting my words into consideration, man. Much, much appreciated. I wish that I can help you improve on any error that would arise in your story - But there aren't a lot of negative things to point in this Chapter; It's too good. You've done so amazingly well, keep it up!
1/26/2018 c3 6CobaltForge
Absolutely fantastic.

Yuuka's characterization is wonderful, and so fleshed out. And the way you write about the things she says and does in chapters 1 and 2 is incredibly descriptive. I think I audibly said "oh my god, yes" more than once, with Yusuke's death, and the trio of kids, and the detectives, etc... and then with Yuuka meeting a certain purple-clothed native god this chapter too.

I've got my own story with Yuuka as the main character (taken in a very different direction) and this is like exactly how I want to write. The characterization and style is a bit different of course between our takes, but I just hope to be able to write her in such a cohesive manner.

This is one of those moments where I can't find enough positive things to say about something. Honestly, just keep it up.

The only criticism I guess I'd have is that chapter 2 ended slightly... abruptly? It was a little jarring in my opinion. That, and this chapter was much tamer than the first two. Not boring, but less interesting things happened (maybe just by virtue of this one being shorter). I say that, but there does always have to be a little bit of down time in a story, so it definitely doesn't detract from my assessment.

You've got something really special going here, and I'll be following this very closely. Cheers!
1/18/2018 c2 GuestII
Are you still here with us, Jod?
Did the Lunarians take you as hostage? Those b*stards...
11/1/2017 c2 Hazard 567
Man this is great stuff, so glad there is someone making top notch stories of such a great character and is still going on strong. But what I'd like to say is; is that you don't really have to hold back on the dark atmosphere and the goriness, man. I mean it doesn't really have to be over-the-top but I guess brutality is what makes Yuuka such an iconic character (or maybe not, I dunno' :P) but please don't hold back on making this Fanfic a bloodbath if you choose. But there are some stuff I'd like to talk through before I get to see more written awesomeness. First, I found it pretty weird the way how Yuuka just reappears outta' nowhere after getting shot through the head. It seemed cool of how each body part reappeared when she was holding the phone, but its kinda confusing of how it works. And wouldn't she already be too durable against any firearm? Second, Wouldn't Yukari could have just cast the nuclear warheads with her portals into the ocean or into outer space before they were able to reach Tokyo? (I guess Yukari probably needed to accumulate some of that 'fear-fuel' from the humans to pull off something like that idk ;P). Third, each chapter knocks the ball of the park, they really do, but do each of them have to be pretty long? Its a tiny bit difficult to keep track of where I left off after taking a break from the reading. But it's a small price to pay in order to witness pure awesomeness. Other than these minor issues - It's a good day to live to be reading these. I wish thy the best of luck and god power to ya. I can't wait to see what happens in the next instalment. Please keep it up, dude!
8/21/2017 c2 2Acerman
Wonderful, I was worried it would be a oneshot, seeing as it only got 5 reviews but this makes it much better. I did like Yukari being slightly appalled when "I'm not the police, you can do whatever you want. I'm just saying I'm… surprised. I hadn't imagined you were that kind of person… Not that I haven't killed and terrorized my fair share of people, but we don't really do much of that stuff anymore." It does make a very good question as to why a youkai was born, especially in that day and age. While Yukari saying that she is the manifestation of humanity's fears about global warming, that doesn't seem to be quite right. The chapter was mainly her building fear, but then that plan got blown up to kingdom come. I'm gonna bet Yuuka's gonna use her time wisely in the past, for betterment purposes. Seeing as you're continuing this, I do wonder how she's gonna meet Elly and Kurumi and find Mugenkan. Also, you sure do put in a lot of subtle references. Since this is gonna be a series, I look forward to the next chapter~!
6/3/2017 c1 Guest
Great story, but I was hoping she would be a little more human/humane at the end.
5/6/2017 c1 Acerman
What a fine tragedy. At least it turned out alright in the end, kinda? I read through your author's description and was amazed a the amount of research you put into this. I'm nearly surprised the man didn't divorce his wife. I did love the bond lil' Yuuka had with her father. I do wonder about her birth and why she was born a demon, (fallen angel?). Was her father a youkai; was the real Yuuka taken and replaced by a changeling? It was pretty cute how her dad called her an angel. I liked the interactions between her and her father. I wonder if that helps (or helped) her go after her father died, by always rembering happy day. I do wonder where that cruelty came from, or perhaps lake of care for tothers. Maybe because she didn't have interactions with anyone else aside from her family until she was six? I was surprised that the doctors didn't look into her disappearing bullet hole more. I do wonder how her father came up with the name for "Land of Fantasies" unless he was from such a place. It's unlikely he thought of it up on his own. I do wonder if a fully powered Yuuka could make the ghost lady's tree bloom. I did love that line where she said "I'll give you two truths and a lie: you can eat apple cores; I would never do anything to hurt you; and I can fly." It was then I was rumbling with anticipation. We all knew what was coming. I'm surprised at how creative she got at killing those people, unless she put some though ahead of time on how to kill people with flowers. Will she continue living at her house for a bit before she goes to the Eastern Wonderland? I do look forward to more of this story. Thank you for it~
4/11/2017 c1 12SKOOLATOON
This was fun, I really liked this.

The mystery of Yusuke! Will we ever learn his legacy? Probably not...! Still, the way things were written gave a lot of depth to his existence; his connection to Gensokyo, what he knew that he died with, so forth. Leaves me wanting, in a good way!

I like how easy it is to identify Yukari; to an outsider looking in, her presence in large is kinda like "what is the point of this" although you did have her inform Yuuka of her youkai status which somewhat mitigated that. Although to someone who actually knows Touhou it's like "mysterious woman? *snaps fingers* how ya doin' Yukari" XD That is not to say her presence is unwelcome or unfitting; contrary, it's quite befitting. I do have to wonder when exactly this is, though it seems quite modern if we're speaking of concrete jungles.

Yuuka saying she could make flowers in the concrete was badass. XD

Yeah, if anything I'd say the fact this spans a lot of time does it both justice and a disservice. You can use the long timeframe to justify a lot of drastic character changes, and the reader can reasonably believe that. The only thing I might be like "well that's kinda weird" is when Yuuka snaps at the end when she was- by large- mostly docile before. Until that point she wasn't ever on-camera homicidal. At the same time, she probably went through enough nonsense to just be like "you know what screw it" and just homicide everyone, and considering she's sixteen that's not really unbelievable. XD

If every teen had Yuuka's power, civilization would return to the sands of time.

I caught that one meme with the "alway rember happy day"! When Yusuke was first like, "When days are dark..." I was like, "that's familiar and eerily close to a certain meme" and then when Yuuka repeated the broken English I was just like "aw yeah this guy knows what he's doin'"!

I'm not one to say things of pace when there's nothing glaringly out of place, mostly because I suck with long paragraphs. I'm an impatient frik, yo. That, and I'm finding it harder and harder to have time to sit down and read stuff! Even so, this fic worked for impatient people as well and did coerce me to slow down and pay attention.

...Oh, man, I just returned to this review after being away from it for the entire day. Good schedule, me. Glad I wrote out the other stuff when I did...!

Overall, I really like how this fic carries itself and I like the presentation; the intro was also really clever and really took me along for the ride, so to speak. A lot of people have problems with engaging hooks on here, I feel; not that one is always needed, but for some people it might do justice. Looking forward to more, yo!
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