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1/31 c8 Nanuk1
I can't wait to read the next chapter! I love this story so much
1/9 c3 Tzipora Ruehl
I love this story
11/4/2020 c7 Guest
I really like this! I especially like the idea that since Harry is jealous of Wybie, he wouldn't exist in Harry's perfect world since he is seen as an obstacle. Even though Wybie just cares a lot. Can't wait for the next chapter! :)
10/19/2020 c6 Nanuk1
Amazing Story!
I loved the scene where Wybie teased Coraline in Chapter 4. He's a bit more confident than in most stories I've read but that's not a bad thing. I really want to know why they call themselves Trolls. Can't wait for the next chapter.
You're awesome!
~Nanuk
5/22/2019 c3 161KagamiPINKAgreste
I have read all 3 chapters the story is good so far. Huh I'm kinda surprised Wybie's grandma let him sleepover at Coraline's place. Definitely agree with you Mariana, I'm not fond of surprises myself. Their not very fun for me. Harry play nice with Wybie. As for Wybie tolerate his friendship with your blunette. ;)
10/14/2018 c2 Guest
Hello! Please please please do more! I love it so much so far!
9/7/2018 c2 Lotte
Not enough for me to judge just yet, but I tend to enjoy stories like these, in which the Beldam returns for revenge (or whatever), best, so I hope u keep writing. I'm curious to see where this goes.
7/23/2017 c1 19deanine
The summary sounds interesting but you haven't gotten far enough in for me to have a feel for where you're going.

Constructive comment: you're having significant dialogue format and punctuation issues.

Correct, basic dialogue format: "I can't," she said.

As a general rule it's best to keep dialogue tags short and sweet, but you can tie in action from time to time, but if the action is from a character that didn't speak the dialogue, steer clear. It becomes muddled.

Happy writing and peace!
6/28/2017 c1 ghuterpie
yes continue please
5/18/2017 c1 1brooklynnthemajesticdragon
Great story so far. Please continue!

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