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5/9/2017 c1 79SunRise19
Very interesting! Though, Smithy (back then) was most likely more lowly born than Jester. So Jane's parent's possibly the King would argue the match. If it were made public.
Anyhow wow, you got my mind spinning! Well done brilliant!
P.S. I know about life. Mine just had the rug pulled out from it and I'm in the process of relocating, trying to find a job and such. Being an adult (I have no idea how old you are) but being that I'm 32, I miss the days when I was young.
I do not miss school though.
4/30/2017 c1 15Lalaofthealpacas
this is really interesting! i know smithy/jane pops up only once in a while, but i thought you had a good explanation of jane's feelings about him so it seems very natural for her to choose him. i think its cool too that you arent afraid of playing with writing styles; this is quite different than some of your other works that i've read, and switching between styles is definitely a good skill for an author to have. it's maybe a little wordy (reminds me a lot of early 1800s writing in britain), which isn't always a bad thing — really makes the reader slow down and think about each sentence — but it can make it harder to get into. I like the line about the smoke clearing. you were so prolific for a while with JatD that I wondered if you were coming back when there wasnt anything for so long, so i'm glad you did! hope to see more from you soon!
4/28/2017 c1 biscuitweevil
I really liked the line "held fast to the reins of my heart". It was evocative of the way Jane still felt the sway of her first two potential loves, even though she never pursued them.

Your descriptions of all three were very accurate, and while it isn't a pairing I normally consider, I did find Jane's rationale unique when it came to choosing Smithy. She wasn't looking for someone who "made her weak in the knees", so much as someone who suited her in a quiet, almost intellectual way.

You definitely subverted both tropes of "Opposites Attract" and "Like Attracts Like", and I think it worked well in this piece. Nicely done. (:
4/28/2017 c1 1exit-pursued-by-the-bear
Lovely short story, I really enjoyed it :) I'm normally not a Jane/Smithy shipper but this was sweet, I can totally see them together comfortable in each other's silence. Love how you pointed out that Gunther and Jane are too alike and that Jester is a wild and spirited bird - very on point! Love it. There were a few grammatical errors but nothing too distracting.

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