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7/1/2019 c1 TheBookmn
I wish you could add notes to these stories, similar to what LOEG does in their references.
7/1/2019 c2 TheBookmn
This may be a dumb question but which show are the Slaughters from? I want to say Texas Chainsaw Massacre: The Next Generation, but I'm feeling that's not what the author is referring to?
3/2/2019 c4 TheBookmn
Very good story. I'm surprise that the Adventure League hasn't met up with Ladybug and Cat Noir. They would make good team mates!
2/6/2019 c2 27Whiteling
They discovered Main frame (Reboot) AND the Digiworld (Digimon)?! EPIC! :D

Also as brutal as it sounds, the only reason I'd have agreed with Wednesday in punishing the Slaughters is because the villains are evil poachers themselves that are absolutely horrible to the animals they hunt.
11/14/2018 c4 1Draco Orwell
Combining all these recent animated shows with similar art styles was a really nice idea (although I was surprised not to see Over The Garden Wall), and thus this had some nice charm to it. Due to this being written about a currently active League you slipped between past and present tense a bit, and the description of Uncle Grandpa went a little too casual which contradicted the LOEG-style history book type tone of the rest of the chapter, but it held together otherwise.
11/12/2018 c4 nintendogamemaster
This whole thing is amazing! You have no idea how happy it makes me see a new league after a while.

I like the idea of Mabel and Stevens friendship, makes sense considering they are the more upbeat members.

Dipper has a crush on Star, huh? Wished one of the missions involved Tom, it would have brought some conflict

Im surprised they never traveled to Equestria (or if there was too much world traveling, a mission in which they stop the Dazzlings)

Allegro being the man behind TTG makes sense, but I recall an story of Teen Titans Go involving Control Freak having been the cause of the reboot in-universe...Pheraps it was a villain team up.

Talking about the Teen Titans, I know you are using the cartoon version, but I though you mentioned that the ones from the Leagueverse were the comic versions? (Unless they are some sort of descendants or next gens)

I loved the reference to Craig and Adventure Time by the way, same with Sophia the first and Elena of Avalor.

The wait was definitively worth it buddy Also, Star League? :O I wonder what this means, im hyped, though I guess the next one will be the children fantasy one?
11/11/2018 c4 14Storyteller222
This was a fun read. While I would have liked to see something more of this team, I can't complain.

I loved the bit where they fixed the Titans and was amused over the shout out to the Land of Ooo.

The bookend was pretty good and I got some fun enjoyment over the most recent Animated League.

Thanks for a fun ride with these Youngsters.
5/12/2018 c3 1Draco Orwell
This is a slight step-down from your last few stories. I get that you were trying to go for something simpler, and that would be fine, but the writing still could've stayed as high quality as I know you can do.

You returned to the common problem of this kind of story in just listing things but not adding much of a story. You give us names of locations the characters visited in other worlds for instance but give us no glimpse into what they actually did there. You give us a lot of names of organisations and villains etc. but hardly any character development (I had no idea at all what these team members thought of each other).

Some of your choices were also a bit iffy. Why were the Fairly Odd Parents so evil they had to be exiled? You could've justified that but instead it just ended up fairly randomly dark.

To your credit though you handled the ending a little better here than you originally did with that 80s nostalgia one, since it included elements that were introduced earlier in the story, or that at least made sense in-universe (using Raven's teleportation powers worked as a 'ah, of course!' sort of moment).

Respectfully I can say not your best work, but not terrible.
5/9/2018 c3 9Mazamba
Fun as usual. Hoping to see more heroes in the future. Sari Sumdac, Star Butterfly, Stevonnie, and the Pines Twins would be particularly cool.
5/8/2018 c3 nintendogamemaster
Nice to see this live :D

Poor Timmy, im surprised you didnt mentioned him and Jimmy having met before or a "We used to be friends". I would be worried but Timmy has survived worse "fairy banishments" before.

From where are the distopsian futures? Seems like all of those would be a nightmare to the KND. Also from where is the Yokian Theocracy or the Dark Matter Dimension?

Sad to see Jake Long not join the team after their teamwork, but they already had 6 members.

Poor Ben though...

Cant wait to see the modern children league Im hoping Star, Steven or Dipper are involved.
5/7/2018 c3 14Storyteller222
Ah, this was a fun entry - mainly comprised of toons from the 2000s and packed with fun little notes along the way. I appreciate this run down memory lane and am happy that you not only used Juniper Lee, but also gave her the ability to leave her town's borders.

I'm surprised there wasn't mention of those luchadors in Mexico, or something involving the Shen Gong Wu, but compared to everything else this was a hoot. Shame about Timmy's fairies, but he'll recover eventually. Also, good thing the Test Sisters lab got shut down; their brother has caused a lot of trouble with all those demented devices they've made.
2/11/2018 c2 2Hercules8
Very nice story! I hope you will continue it! :)
8/5/2017 c2 14Storyteller222
By god this was nostalgic!

I am sold, sold, SOLD! To see what you have next.
7/11/2017 c2 1Draco Orwell
Having grown up with golden age Cartoon Network, this story was particularly delightful to me. The sort of youthful enthusiasm you captured here really added to the overall nostalgic feeling for me.
Again, nice work!

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