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8/15/2020 c2 3LunarEclipse1000
the term would be in the stars
12/7/2018 c23 10DarthTenebrus
Nice...very interesting. So what's the timetable for posting chapters? Am I gonna have to strap on the seat belt? Is this gonna be a bumpy ride lol?
9/16/2018 c22 7alphalima1980
Well, it was fun to read. You improved your grammar on each chapter plus character development. I'm not a fan of OC's inserted on a canon story but Mils was a likeable character, a kind of guy who don't take bullshit from no one.

Probably I would think the same seeing Ricardo's fate and Amanda and David ended together was fine for me, but I was expecting Mils not making it alive, by getting subdued while trying to rescue Ripley from the cocoon or when Sevastopol fell into the gas giant.
Being nitpicking as I am I noticed some factual errors, when Ripley did make it to the Torrens and Mils got stranded on Sevastopol, how he "maneuvered" to reach the Torrens? The only way is to jump but in space he can't maneuver, it has to be a calculated trajectory no experienced astronaut would improvise.

Anyway, you did a good job and I'll wait for the sequel.
9/16/2018 c22 10DarthTenebrus
So is there a timeframe that you had in mind for penning the sequel? For example, is there any more time that you wanted to explore prior to the LV426 mission? Other questions may arise, I'm sure, once you begin the prep phase of this story.
9/15/2018 c21 DarthTenebrus
Ok, I half expected Mils to be a facehugger victim, and then I expected him to be ambushed at the last second by a nasty-ass Xeno and killed, and then I expected one or the other to never make it back on board the Torrens, and then I expected Mils to have a chestburster erupt from his chest at the dinner table like Kane from the first movie, but it was a beautiful ending, to a well-written chapter.

So, have you a sequel in mind? Would love to see it.
9/6/2018 c20 Guest
I wonder what Mils will do when he see what happened to Ricardo. Update?
8/28/2018 c20 DarthTenebrus
Well, this has been a fun read so far, waiting to see if Ricardo will survive along with Mils and Amanda Ripley...every time I come across the name Ricardo I think of that dude Robert Picardo (the Doctor on Star Trek Voyager and Richard Woolsey on Stargate)...hope he made it and the bugs didn't get him...
7/20/2018 c17 7alphalima1980
Good, looking forward into seeing the next chapter and the Anesidora's see what's on the flight recorder. Also if you want to read about the Special order 939 please check my story: Sevastopol Closed city, chapter 8: Deal with the devil.
7/20/2018 c1 8The Necroposter
The premise is promising, and I really like your style of dialogue.
6/22/2018 c15 4TehAngryXeno
I see that their relationship is tuning in quite nicely.

No spelling or grammatical errors that I encountered, good job on that. And I appreciate you taking more time to delve into character build-up, rather than the storyline itself so much. I look forward to the next chapter

P.S.: If you want more views/favorites/follows/comments, you should have the alien(s) come and try and rape Ripley or one (by a small chance) is a friendly and helps them escape. And this friendly xeno tries to put itself in between Mils and Ripley, for it wants Ripley as its own, or even Mils. (since all xenos are female/genderless until the Queen dies or if the Queen needs fertilization.)
6/19/2018 c14 7alphalima1980
I can see you had improved your narrative but it still have some grammatical mistakes. You keep using present time in a third person narrative, usually, present time are used in first person narrative, because the story is treated as a diary or log. A story narrated by a character or an omnipresent narrator some time after the story must be on past time.

Keep it on the scifi/horror vibe, lemon/fantasy aren't needed here. (This is my humble opinion, please don't be offended by it)
6/17/2018 c1 4TehAngryXeno
I don’t mean to diss your plot, but you should delve off into your own story whilst they are still aboard the station. Them Following the missions makes this story quite dull
6/17/2018 c1 TehAngryXeno
Aside from typos and grammatical errors that I’ve been encountering, this story is going along quite well. Although, it would be in your best interest to add in a xenomorph or more who get to Ripley and have their way with her. *wink wink, nudge nudge* Or even befriending one of them
6/6/2018 c13 7alphalima1980
It's a nice narrative but I feel it takes off some of the titular isolation feeling of the game, it's different when you're not alone.
Also what about the sentry guns? the UA 571-C sentry guns fire high explosive armor piercing rounds, that thing was not for use in spaceships or stations, that's the reason the guns in the game did not give too much damage to the alien. If the player had a pulse rifle could kill the alien easily.
As I said before, narrative is good but as an advice: a novelization tends to extends more into the character's background and thoughts, not going from A to B as the videogame. I'd like to know more about Mils and who was his biological father, or why Waits decided to kill both. Something like that.
I want to read the rest of the story, keep updating it.
5/25/2018 c13 4TehAngryXeno
I found some errors throughout each chapter concerning the dialogue, and parts where I feel like Amanda wouldn’t say or do something in a particular phrase, but this is fanfiction ig. Overall, I am liking this story so far. At the end, I thought the two were going to spare the xeno or even help it. I’m glad you chose the non-cliché approach; it was merciful anyways. I probably would have done the same thing
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