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8/5 c3 M2R
so this doesn't follow the movie yes? because i can't find any relation with makoto yuki's personality here to from the movie. anyway... continuing reading
4/23/2018 c37 4edwardscichands
Underrated Story. I think this deserves more favs in my opinion. The way you write is a bit confusing, but I'm not going to nitpick because I'm pretty sure you have your own style. But keep writing, because even if the favs and follows may be low, there still are fans waiting for your updates.
10/9/2017 c1 ToastedStrudel
Although your grammar, capitalization, and text structure needs improvement, that aside I'll give credit where it's due. I really like Kei and Fuuka's relationship because most fanfictions and even professional works make it so that the main character and the love interest spend around 1-10 episodes/chapters for the relationship to progress. What I also like is that Kei's feelings for Fuuka feel believable. For example, Kei legitimately shows affection towards Fuuka like an average teenage boy who sees a cute girl and not like a mature adult who knows how romantic relationships work. It's nice to see the protagonist be the one who gets a crush on a cute girl in his class instead of acting like he doesn't care. So yeah, you're doing good with that so keep it up.
9/27/2017 c17 14RedBurningDragon
Well time to data drain Minako
9/18/2017 c9 RedBurningDragon
So when I saw Skeith I thought of Haseo "IM RIGHT HERE SKKKEEIITTHH" now I wonder if your going to include the other phases somehow or if Kei will become a twin blade lol
9/12/2017 c12 RosyMiranto18
Minak-WHAT?! PLOT TWIST! Now it will be much everything with she appeared when she met Minato again. Keep Update!
9/8/2017 c10 skullwolfsteam
hey dude this series is hellla good keep up the good word i hope ya update it soon take yo time :)
9/8/2017 c10 SkullWolfSteam
keep up the goodwork bro i know it dont mean much but i hope ya keep up the good work and update soon
9/2/2017 c7 Grimraven.V
Your on fire with your chapters one after another and there not bad good work
9/1/2017 c6 Grimraven.V
Makoto I say should go with Chihiro If not yukari is my second pick but either way I want a Double date chapter at some point and please make mitsuru and akihiko get together there ment to be together
8/14/2017 c4 Grimraven.V
I am liking it so keep it up
8/5/2017 c1 4Kuranoir
Yeeesss, a fic with Fuuka as a love interest. I love her so much and I am so glad that she is finally getting some spotlight.

But I have a lot to criticize. You might want to do some proof-reading next time. There were some grammar errors, capitalization errors, and spelling errors. Here's some friendly pointers too (I'll even number them because...):

1) When another character is speaking, you space it into another line. Like so:

"Wha-! He's not my boyfriend!" Miss Takeba replied back in an embarrassed way.

I had only one thing to say, "Ok."

It's so we don't get confused who is speaking. Or at least, we know that the previous character (in this case Yukari) isn't speaking and is Kei instead.

2) After using a comma, you space before your next word. It's to make it look nicer and not as... jumbled to read. Not as intimidating.

3) Names of places and people are capitalized.

4) I'm assuming *sign* is *sigh*, but I recommend writing it out instead of doing it this way. (Ex. He sighed as he gazed out the window). It makes the work not look as professional if you use the asterisk approach. First impressions are everything~

5) This is more of a nitpick, but instead of writing age:16 at the beginning you could have wrote, 'I'm sixteen years old' or 'sixteen years old'. No need for age:16.

There's some more stuff I could write about, but uh... The main stuff that is bothering me is out of the way and there's already a lot. This isn't meant to be a negative review by the way, I'm just trying to help out. I wish you the best and I look forward to seeing you improve.

~Noir
8/5/2017 c1 9KatoriAeku
Your OC with Fuuka caught my attention but your writing leaves a lot to be desired.( though I'm sure I shouldn't be talking) Anyway as you improve I'm looking forward to this

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