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10/16/2017 c6 2tiny-spock
What an exciting chapter, with the rescue and all! Poor Victoria in the start, rough except for the Lieutenant, and potentially having to witness Gabriel's hanging. Good thing Martin rescued both of them! There is a certain sense of foreboding though, now that Tavington is after her. Hmmm... I dread to hear whatever ulterior motives he has for wanting to capture her more than the dude who just killed a bunch of redcoats! Whatever it is, it can't be good. I liked the bit of alarm you mentioned with Wilkins when Tavington mentioned her. He kinda has a crush on her, doesn't he? That would either be an advantage for her, or a problem for him if she ends up encountering the dragoons again. Great chapter!
9/29/2017 c5 8TheCaffeinatedHummingbird
Whew! Those two chapters were quite a roller coaster when read back-to-back! Your characterizations and interactions between the Martin children in both chapters are darling and just so spot on! I especially loved how you highlighted Susan's observant behavior and mentioned her occasional albeit tiny utterances of words. She always strikes me as such a clever, insightful girl. I also appreciate how you use text from the film sparingly and/or add to/forgo it by inserting Victoria's POV. I don't know why, but I always tune out of a fanfic when it has too many inserts of text from the film. Personal preference, I guess. Lol. Tavington's appearance was great- he is ssoo evil! I love how Victoria challenged him and his response to her doing so was so believable and just so... Tavington. I'm at the edge of my seat and looking forward to more! X
9/28/2017 c3 2tiny-spock
Oh man... I'm really sorry I haven't reviewed before but, here I am! Muahahahahahaaaa! First of all, I love how accurately you have written the characters in the movie. The way that Col. Burwell took care of Victoria after her husband passed, the innocence and curiosity of the Martin kids, and the icy, dangerous butcher! Your original character is very likeable as well, she's a brave, old soul that seems to be very intelligent as well. I felt so bad for her when her husband diedafter only a few days into their marriage! (Her dislike of wearing black sort of reminded me of Scarlett O'Hara from Gone With the Windalthough I could tell Victoria actually cared about her husband unlike said iconic redhead.) I love how you have managed to incorporate all of these characters into the story without it feeling too 'crowded,' if that makes sense; I very bad habit that I'm guilty of on several of my own creations I'm afraid. And I love the angle that you are planning with this story, so few people have done one that focuses on a romance with one of the minor characters or even Benny boy himself. Can't wait to see where this goes!
9/19/2017 c3 8TheCaffeinatedHummingbird
My pleasure! And no need to be nervous at all, I find your story very compelling and your attention to detail is really very lovely. I'm interested in learning more about Victoria's connection to Benjamin Martin. It's nice how you highlighted that they both lost their spouses. Also, her interactions with the other men/women who want her to adhere to a "traditional" approach to mourning was a great addition and they really help the reader understand who Victoria is. As far as Skunk is concerned, I had an idea who he was but looked him up after reading your first chapter to be sure. He's a cutie pie! He also seems like an interesting fellow and I'm sure he'll be fun to write about! Like everyone, I just adore the idea of a love triangle. Looking forward to what happens next! :-D
9/18/2017 c3 Anonymous
I love your story! The idea of going more in-depth into a minor character is so appealing, and the love triangle idea is just so "yes"!
9/18/2017 c3 Colonel Rose
This story is so well-written! I love the idea of a love triangle.
9/13/2017 c2 TheCaffeinatedHummingbird
You have a very intriguing premise going on here! I love stories that open with a "bang" and yours definitely does that! How heartbreaking that your OC lost her husband so quickly after marrying him and her financial struggle only deepens the drama. Your writing is very descriptive and I love the internal dialogue that you have for Victoria as she discovers/copes with her grief. I'm excited to learn about how she ends up getting involved in the war. Oh! And I couldn't agree with you more about those inaccuracies/vacancies making way for creative freedom and wanting to know the stories of supporting characters- go for it! X

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