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12/7/2017 c5 8TheCaffeinatedHummingbird
The tug and pull between their growing friendship and the super-intense scene at the beginning was fabulous. I only hope that she will find a way to spare him of that fate! Seeing William show humility for more than a brief, fleeting second really helped him grow on me since he's just as brutal as ever in this interpretation. I wonder if Bordon will be successful, he certainly has a lot resting on his shoulders! Good luck with your new job, commuting via public transportation is always exhausting, but it definitely builds character and patience! Lol! No worries on the scarcity of updates, it will just make it that much more of a treat to see new chapters from you as your story is getting REALLY exciting! :-)
11/20/2017 c4 TheCaffeinatedHummingbird
Suspenseful and well-crafted chapter with- wow- a bit of a surprise ending. Seeing your protagonist in "hot water" and learning how her mind solves problems made me like her even more. I liked the liberties that you took like Maximus and the little nod to Banastre. That's always been William's middle name in my mind, too. ;-D Your description of him sleeping was borderline adorable and again, great usage of his shifting "moods". As for your professor, don't let the muggles get you down. You have a very strong "voice" as a writer, I can tell by your descriptors and how thought out your chapters are.
11/15/2017 c4 2tiny-spock
Man, this one isn't a review, but I want to get ahold of you. The mobile app on my phone is wierd about PMs. While I can read all of yours, my phone won't let me respond to them!Do you have a Tumblr or Wattpad?
11/15/2017 c1 tiny-spock
Wow, such a well thought out and executed escape plan... only to have her right back where she started! She's kind of better off, with the way that those continental guys treated her. The guard seduction scene was funny (was that other guy Wilkins?) And the pair being tied together, I couldn't help imagining the reactions of those two when they woke up like that. Tavington is becoming strangely attached to her, which might be her saving grace in this. (Great easter egg with his middle name too, by the way!) And he's smart enough to connect the dots so I wonder what he's going to do when he finds out she's from the future.
11/15/2017 c4 Guest
She was successful in all the stages of her escape, to be caught and beaten by Continentals and rescued by William, a protective, concerned William. Fate plays good games!
11/13/2017 c3 Guest
I like William showing two sides of his character. she has thought a daring escape. Will the second part of it go as well as the first?
11/12/2017 c3 8TheCaffeinatedHummingbird
I've been meaning to dive into this little gem for a while and am so happy to have finally found the time to do so. The quality of your writing is fantastic- so readable and easy to follow. The premise that you are working with is equally great and I can tell that you put a great deal of thought and care into creating a well-rounded OC. How interesting that Jayne is a modern medic thrown into the 1770's! I'm excited to see (or continue to see) how she is received by everyone from this era. As for Tavington, you are just nailing his personality. Those brief, minuscule glimmers of decency, like when he is assisting Jayne in the latest chapter, are what made me love him while watching the film and are SO challenging to capture in writing. But you're doing brilliantly and I am really looking forward to seeing how his character arcs in the coming chapters. Also, total aside, but you had me from the opening when you said that this story was in part inspired by "Kate and Leopold". Lol. That's probably my favorite movie in the galaxy and I can already see small overlapping themes. Anyway, I am eagerly awaiting Chapter Four! Happy writing! :-D
10/25/2017 c2 2tiny-spock
And a wild Tavington appears! I love your characterization of him; no-nonsense, absolutely brutal, but with some hints of humanity hidden deep within. And Bordon... I've always liked him, and I don't know why. He just has such a small part in the movie, but I'm thrilled that doesn't seem to be the case here! The transition period in the middle of the chapter was great. The intense battle and angst and thenGIVE IT BACK IT'S MINE! I probably would have been taken back if I witnessed that too, but at least the dragoons appeared amused by Jaynes' spunky nature. I have a feeling she will have a bit of a popular following with them... if she can convince Tavvie and Cornwallis that she's not a rebel. It's very interesting to see the the complexity of William's character. Even though he's hardened to everything, and he and Jayne were at each other's throats, he couldn't help but feel concern for the lady. (Oh and Short drop and sudden stop... I understood that reference!)
10/22/2017 c1 tiny-spock
Oh my... I love the concept and introduction of this story, it's absolutely intriguing! Especially how you've incorporated the 'laws' of time travel. (Back to the future is one of my all-time favorite films, by the way!) I enjoy the irony as well; Jayne appears to hate who Tavington was but has to save him anyway. She seems to have quite the adventure waiting for her. Great beginning, I am looking forward to reading more!
10/22/2017 c1 Guest
It is interesting plot. do write more!

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