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4/1 c1 jjlyn
more please
2/18 c25 Blazingfury
This story never disappoints ans always leaves me wanting more
1/1 c25 Ruenan
I should of reviewed this story by its chapters and my thoughts but I decided to mainly write this large one here to really look at the pros and cons of this story.

Firstly you have a GREAT plot, the description of this story peaked my interests way up and I'm a SpyCy fan so that's A on that. This story has been on my radar for quite some time. I normally keep to two stories so its easy to keep track of things but I ended up reading this whole thing and it kept my interests up but also questioning it the whole time.

One my main problems that I had with this was the first 3 or 4 chapters? I honestly couldn't tell you the exact ones without going back and looking that's my fault for laziness on my part.

I feel like from the time of the end of DoTD to where Cynder left and 10 years went by and her appearing before Spryro again I really think you should of went all out on that and went into detail a lot more and showing us instead of telling us. Now that doesn't mean every single month, year, etc etc but I feel like you missed a huge opportunity on that and really would of been good for some character development and story telling.

Another thing is this plot hole with Ignitus who helped Cynder for 10 years but not once mentioned it to her that Spyro got married, had a kid, moved on and never let her read his book BUT, you mentioned she knew about the "Day of Heroes" from reading his book.

I also felt like Cynder just leaving how she did felt really bad as in I personally felt she should of at least told Spyro where she was going instead of leaving all of a sudden. The argument her though you can say well that would mess up the plot and Spyro would of ended up waiting possibly but that's my 2 cents on that topic.

Now on to Solaria... Possessive, Insecure, I could go on and on. She's a head scratcher man. I blame her 80% for how Spyro is and the rest on his "job" the reviewer below me pretty much hit the nail on the head for my thoughts on her but when there in the council and she's having a mental breakdown about Spyro fighting... This when I broke the pencil in the half because I can't stand her.

If you would of had it where she went looking for Spyro in desperation after he left and she somehow found out where Cynder lived and she walked in on Spyro splitting her in two. I would of given you a f*cking medal right there and then because her character is just something else.

On a positive note on her I'm really glad the interactions you put with her and Cyril I really like what you did with him not many stories have him as the "Main Guardian" and him telling Solaria that maybe they should of gotten a divorce was a huge A for me on Cyrils part because he literally spoke what was on my mind, I also was really glad you had Solaria coming to terms with that and actually "maturing" a bit.

For about what seems to be 8-10 chapters somewhere in the middle you have this really great thing going around before they go on vacation and right as its over. The story telling was FANTASTIC and I loved every bit of it because you were showing us instead of telling us.

Spyro was spending time with his family but also spending time with his Best Friend the balance to me felt great and it looked like Cyrils advice of saving they're marriage was great but then you hit this hitch on a small time skip and everything went in the dumpster pretty much when they got off vacation and I wanted Spyro to just grab his son and leave with Cynder because of Solaria being so insecure and possessive.

Another small note this "War Scenario" feels like it could be a possible sequel potential to be honest. I hope it's not part of this story because it feels like we have enough plot as it is. I also really like what you did with Cynder being a bounty hunter and her wanting Spyro to be her partner with it I really enjoyed that.

I want to end this review on middle ground once again you have a fantastic plot and I will say really good chapter names they are very fitting! When you go in detail you have great work the quality is some of the best I've read when you go in depth but the inconsistency of not showing us but instead you tell us, the small plot holes here and there, Solaria's character which to me seems mostly negative and not very positive is what makes me not want to stop reading it.

This story could be really great and one of the best if not for some holes you've dug but your so far into this story I wouldn't even consider editing or rewriting due to how far we are in it. You make great strides mid way threw the story despite a rocky start but take a few steps back towards the end. I'm following and favoriting this story because I want to see it end, it perked my interest and I want to see the best of what you can bring to the table because when you do its fantastic and is a great read all around with hardly any complaints.

Looking forward to future chapters to this and a GREAT 2021.

Cheers,
Ruenan
12/25/2020 c25 17Rurikredwolf
So, I caught up, and I have things to say.

First, I want to say that your prose has certainly improved. Its a lot more fluid. I can get stuff more, and you're showing rather than telling for the most part.

Secondly, I am happy that yet another has decided to make Cyril the designated Guardian. Its so rare to see. Everyone treats him as the one note asshole or ignores him entirely. His shades of character are honestly the highlight of the story for me.

However, I cannot say the same for Solina. Maybe its my own personal bias because of experience, but she is reminding me of an abusive lover. I've experienecd the same situation Spyro has here. And you have given her very little redeeming factors. And if that was intentional, then you can count this as a positive. If it is not, then I'm sorry, but I don't find myself WANTING her to succeed. She is very possessive, jealous, and honestly wore down Spyro's love for Cynder from sheer weathering rather than affection. And she would know better than this if she was an adult. It kind of feels like there will be a reveal that she got pregnant to make him stay. And I WANT to like her! I'm very much against the norm of Spyro x Cynder and the few redeeming moments she gets are not strong enough to fix this.

Additionally, to go back to waht I said in my last review, this entire story feels...unneeded for the way you have the plot. It could've been solved by Ignitus looking into the book, seeing Spyro married, and telling Cynder. I'm not sure why he didn't. And if he led her own despite knowing the truth then thats even worse!

The failure to communicate aspect is another theme I adore. But it kind of feels like you're painting Cynder as the golden girl in this situation rather than addressing the problems with the other characters. And it's seemingly pointing to them having an affair, which if that's t e case then...eeeh.

I think my biggest problem is that you never showed us the good between Solina and Spyro. You told us. And that doesn't work. So it feels like the story is running on drama that we (or at least I) don't have. I know there's naught to be done, but if you do another story (and please don't take this as me saying give up or stop or whatever) then keep those in mind.
12/23/2020 c6 Rurikredwolf
So uh, I just discovered this story and uh...well, the concept is interesting. It's what attracted me to it. I am a fan for throwing a spanner into the gears of Spyro x Cynder fanfiction.

However, I have major problems - and I do not know if they are fixed but I want to review as is as a first time viewer - with the execution.

The first three chapters were a MASSIVE wasted potential. You told us what happened rather than showed us. Easily could have been a story in itself. I really want to know what happened in that time. You have such an interesting set up, as I said, and it felt completely squandered. Cynder's gone, and Spyro has a lot of time letting go. Bam.

But Cynder's reasoning felt...completely off to me. There's no way she could've left a note? It feels really strange that she never considered that. But it was incredibly bitchy and, honestly, her reaction made me almost close out the story. Like no kidding Spyro moved on. Very rarely do people still talk to the people they did ten years ago, let alone hold onto love.

However, this could have been fixed with one minor plot change. Say, for example, Cynder fell into a coma while out in another country or land and never returned. Like it was a midnight flight so she didnt tell Spyro. EASILY would've justified her reactions and solved a lot of the problems.

I know what's done is done, but for the future, I highly encourage you to think of things like that. It'll make your story and world feel much more natural and believable.

The story, however, does pick up after chapter 5. I'm hoping it completes the upward trend.
12/20/2020 c25 6SilverFury23
This is one of the best and well-written fanfiction story I've read in awhile. There are many great Spyro and Cynder stories out there, but I'd have to say this one is definitely my favorite. You took such a different approach from the stereotypical Spyro and Cynder stories in such a good way. Every character is written very well and the story is well crafted. Keep up the great work with this story and please finish it. I loved your other stories too and I'm sad to see that they haven't been updated, however, if your focus is on this one, keep it here my friend. Happy holidays!
12/15/2020 c25 UltraNova1225
The end of chapter, who are these two mysterious figures and what they following Spyro and Cynder? I really love how story is going through this drama moments.
12/15/2020 c25 5IllusionMaster17
I still don't get the title, but wow they are facing things onward together.
That start tho, sounded serious but it was about STEAK! But I agree that cooking is quite complicated.
Seeing Spyro more relaxed snd resting is really nice, after all the hell he was put in.
With Solaria, she's finally thinking about the best solution, even if the outcome won't be that good, but wow you really made her act for her actions and behavior, even apologizing with Cyril for her attitude from before, she us really showing maturity as dragon and guardian, it almost makes me feel sorry and sympathy for her, well almost...
And Cyril with the war topic, I fear that may happen soon and all of the sudden.
And with Cynder's thoughts, while admiring the landscape, about her life then and now, and mostly about Spyro and his condition, all his torment and pain, but also his resistance and bravery to stand up even after all that.
And wow she took the chance to nuzzle him, that's cute.
In the pub, seeing Spyro doubtful about coming in is quite curious and funny too, he is way more powerful but he like prefers to stay away from that kind of people, for fear or whatever.
And wow Tundra really was worried about Cynder, and Spyro too, very worried, his reaction really said a lot.
But now, they are up for the task!
But... who was that shadow and blue dragon? And why are they following them?
Good chapter!
Well I am very impressed with the progress of the story.
Solaria is starting to reasonate with her options and the solution for the best.
Cynder and Spyro are reconnecting with themselves and deeper, maybe even more.
And with the war and that mysterious figure, I feel things will turn intense...
Until we read again!
12/14/2020 c25 5Arcantos the Storyteller
Glad to see Solaria admitting to her faults, and striving to move forwards. It won't be easy for her, that's for sure, but it's an important step forwards. Meanwhile Spyro and Cynder... well, I'm hoping they manage to keep their lusts and desires tightly reined until an appropriate time.

Still, you just had to add this little addition at the end, didn't you? Do we have scouts of the war to come, maybe hoping to take a powerful player out of the game early if the opportunity arrieis?:
12/3/2020 c24 rollisongw22
Can’t wait for another chapter, take your time!
11/30/2020 c1 3ethantrye
please continue with this story and your previous these are so good please dont leave them unfinished
11/25/2020 c1 2themilkshakeman52
Wonder when your gonna release new chapter, we used to get 1 chapter every month
10/8/2020 c24 rollisongw22
Glad to see the book back and running! Can’t wait to see more and found the cynder and spyro moment funny lol
10/7/2020 c24 9Rifty Agon
It's been too long since I've read any Fanfiction but I'm glad I came back to this. It's becoming a very good story, and you should be proud of yourself.
10/7/2020 c24 Shinscorpion
I found this fic a few days ago and I finished it, I want more :). I'm a fan of spyroxcynder but I can't help but feel sorry for Solaria
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