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1/2 c36 Dramaticmusic23
I rarely comment on stories but I follow this for a while now and I honestly can say this is one of my favorite romance fanfiction. Some people rush them some people dont write it with enough emotion. I am not a writer so I dont know how hard it is to do it, but I know that people who are able to get the emotion right are amazing. You did this correct and I have to say that I can't wait for the ending. You did it wonderful and the confession is going to hit home. But please are we going to have an IF POV of her going thought about everything as she drive to the festival? That would be great. Nothing long like 200 words about what she is thinking and feeling herself. That would be nice.

Happy new year and stay safe
1/2 c36 2Yu Narukaze
This one was sad, but I think we all knew it was gonna happen... I was kinda worried you'd do a last second swerve and reveal that he'd actually given up on IF in favor of Noire, but thankfully that didn't happen.

Also, Noire handled that breakup *incredibly* maturely. I'm honestly impressed.
1/2 c36 1Moonlit Dreamr
Honestly theres nothing i can add that the last guu didn't say so Imma just throw my prized Pudding spoon into the pot and say Blanc does get a bit frisky with her bf.
1/2 c36 Mimamin
"On another time, another place, I'm sure it would have. A clean, happy end to a story."

IF scoffed at that particular choice of words.

Yeah, I know I haven't reviewed the last one yet, or so I believe, but let me get to this one first while it's fresh in my mind.

This is really the kind of beginning I was expecting, and I'm glad we managed to get this last sting out before the climax. There's absolutely nothing else holding Elly back now, and us as readers - unless you're team Nowa - can keep going painlessly until the end!

Damn, still... That really hurt like hell. This is definitely the reason I don't like love triangles when done well; there's technically no right choices, and there's no easy paths either... I guess kinda like real life, huh?

I guess Noire this time around will have to settle with little Neppers, if that's what that scene at the end wanted to convey. It's either that, or my thinking's going south real hard there. Whatever happens, at least it's certain that they'll be able to be friends again sooner or later. Nowa gotta need that healer that has been carrying her, after all.

I dunno what else to comment on, really... The first half was really cozy, but anything with Neptune always is, so that's no surprise. IF being unaware of what was about to happen did hit like a sledgehammer to the knee, though. I can only wonder how she will take the news...

Ah, and I bet my personal lifetime of pudding that Blanc will in fact not kiss her boyfriend... because of Neptune most than likely attempts at capturing the moment. Remember my words!

Really, that was done excellently. Noire definitely deserved that chance, but life often sucks like that; she simply arrived a little too late to the party and missed the cake...

Anyway. I think I said everything I needed. Hope you've had some nice holidays, and a happy new year as well! See you soon!
1/1 c36 1AxelLord20
And the ship sinks and my heart drops. Damn, I saw this coming, but this does hit hard now doesn't it? Thank you for a good chapter, can't wait to see the next
1/1 c36 CakesGames
Well
1/1 c36 VolcanicFlare
Aw shiet, here we go! We’re hitting the climax of our story!
12/21/2020 c21 wwgaming
Alrighty, I rarely comment on stories but you do not know how much I want to strangle something after that sike of a confession. You... welp, I have 14 more chapters to go and I can imagine it's gonna still rise
12/14/2020 c34 Mimamin
Never skim through stuff you find uncomfortable, or your reviews will end up looking really bad, kids. I gotta admit that I didn't realize that there was a lack of an actual confession, and that our boy simply half-assed his way through that fateful moment...

Geez, sometimes I wish a button to delete reviews existed.

Nevertheless, mistakes can be made, but there's nothing I can do but take them in stride and continue moving forward. I won't become a decent reviewer if I didn't do that much, at the very least, will I?

Onto the actual review of the chapter... Yeah, not going through stuff properly is a big no-no. I... must admit that this confession-rejection thing is not something I'm well-versed at (again, I don't like love triangles, like, at all), but you did a good job at leaving it clear for those who missed the misstep that was made last chapter.

I guess it was truly an empty victory. Like winning in your favorite game using guides from beginning to end; it just isn't satisfactory. I almost cried when I realized that, for a second, Elliot literally broke the promise he made to Noire... and it was a second that made way too much of a difference. They were facing each other, and just at the last moment, he looked away... I'm probably reading too into it to overcompensate, but he - for a split second - was about to run away, but went towards a shortcut instead.

I really can't imagine how Noire is taking this. It's one of those moments where I loathe the decision to write this exclusively from Elliot's perspective, because I'd definitely love to see either a chapter or a brief scene from the point of view of Noire. Heck, that last scene last chapter and then the following morning from her point of view would make for a sick chapter opening, but it would also go against the spirit of the story. I'll have to settle with my imagination.

Big sister Blanc coming to offer a mature advice, with big sister Bert coming to give her own shortly after. Nothing much to say, other than I'm glad they're being understanding - Blanc especially so. I really like the characterization on this fic, gotta say. Now, where are those adoption papers-

I-I mean, the letter. That... was something else. I'm pretty sure I said this before, but the whole concept of the letter brings me back to Katawa Shoujo, where a similar letter plays an important role in all of the routes, similar to the one it did here (similar in importance, not the way they impact the plot). I won't lie, it made me tear up a bit.

Last, but not least, I'm mixed about having to leave IF in the dark. This looks like something that's going to bite him back good, but I suppose we'll see what happens when it, well, happens.

... I guess that rather than taking a step, what Elliot did was take half of one. Here's to hoping he can take the rest soon enough, however painful that will certainly be. I really cannot wait for all this to be sorted with, honest!
12/14/2020 c33 Mimamin
"Hmhm, maybe. We'll see how we're feeling at the end of all of this."

I swear this line... this single, freaking line meant something extremely different to Noire, Elliot and us readers. This both was hopeful and foreshadowing at the same time.

Regardless, this was a well done chapter. I honestly braced myself for a more dramatic moment, but it was certainly subdued. That's not to say it wasn't any less heartbreaking, but it could've been worse - I was totally expecting the confession to happen at the fountain, for one.

I really can't say much else. Love triangles aren't really my thing, because drama and pain tug at my heart too easily and makes otherwise enjoyable stuff, extremely uneasy and hard to read through... though I guess that's the point? If so, then you totally did a great job, author.

I gotta admit that the stuff in this chapter truly made a thought settle comfortably on my mind: Elliot and Noire would definitely make a nice couple, of not a perfect one. I think that's why this particular instance of the love triangle hurts even more so; both of the girls feel like perfect matches, with neither one having an edge over the other. The only way to decide is to just trust your gut and that... I really, really feel sorry for Noire.

Not all victories are necessarily worth celebrating. Not this kind, especially.

The date was done excellently, and the little detail of him buying the "friendship" chrysanthemums was just another nail straight into my heart. Fate can be a big bully when it wants to, huh?

At least the first step (the hardest one, in my opinion) was finally given, which should make the ones to come more bearable. As for Noire... She definitely has a long, rough road ahead of her. Here's to hoping she finds her own happiness, and that this won't ruin or strangle her friendship with Elliot, for they're really cute together, even as just that.

... And yeah, it's salty. Very much so, in fact.
12/14/2020 c32 Mimamin
I'm probably way off and confused, but the flower shop sure gives me strong Rune Factory (or Harvest Moon, I guess, since it's more of a mixed IP?) vibes, what with the many off-season growing in separate rooms for each particular season. Again, I'm definitely way off, but I wanted to comment on it regardless.

Moving onto the review, please ignore the fact I'm extremely late for this!

Having Blanc on a chapter is always strangely soothing. She's like that high level NPC that carries you through hard battles, to show you where you can be in a future- loose comparison, but it was the first thing that came to mind. I guess it's that sagely air around her that makes her presence really calming, though I'm a little bit sad that the twins didn't make an appearance alongside her.

The scene with IF was really... heartbreaking, to an extent. It was, at least to me, really obvious that she's struggling with all of this, and the effort she's putting into helping Elliot is most likely her way to cope with the heartaches she must be suffering from. I didn't notice the hidden meanings of her lines, unfortunately (not before your input, anyway), but I did wonder if the flowers she handed away meant something important... Ouch.

I dunno if I have said before, but I believe the running theme of this story is decision making, and I absolutely love it. It's definitely this guy's weakest point, and I relate a lot to him- in fact, I might even be worse at it. I can only hope that this coming "Gala" will help him build all the confidence he needs to start taking important decisions with less worries and second thoughts. After all, the biggest hardships are what often lead to the greatest grow!

To close things off, I must say that the bit where he was left alone at the store, and he started to realize how much IF particularly added to the place was really, really sweet. Can't wait to hopefully see IF around, wearing a cute maid outfit while helping Elliot at the store!

Oh, and it seems I did guess right with the makeup thingy! That's something that also added to the painfulness of that whole scene, I gotta say. She's ready to move on, but her heart is still longing for that chance she believes she won't get anymore... You know what to do from there, Elliot. Go get her, tiger.
11/25/2020 c15 CakesGames
What happened to JJ (JeffreyJeremy)
11/21/2020 c3 CakesGames
On behalf of my boyfriend who adores this story, I decided to give it a try. So far it has been really good.

The true name of the part timer is JeffreyJeremy (JJ)
11/21/2020 c33 AmethystPone
Ouch! Poor Nowa.
11/21/2020 c33 VolcanicFlare
Oh shit. The plot, it thickens. Oh poor Elliot, what have you gotten yourself into?
“We’re all trapped in a maze of relationships” indeed
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