5/15/2020 c5 6karameiwaku
I real!y enjoyed this. I'm glad I found it and I'm looking forward to seeing more.
I real!y enjoyed this. I'm glad I found it and I'm looking forward to seeing more.
5/12/2020 c5 2notsofrilly
OMG Thom is the Squire of Roger. Is he in on the plot? Hope Thom doesn't turn out like Alex
OMG Thom is the Squire of Roger. Is he in on the plot? Hope Thom doesn't turn out like Alex
12/30/2019 c1 Flareid
I love this soo much, it's amazing how you let Alanna still be a badass even in convent school and how you quickly introduced her friends we all know and love so that we can see this Alanna's interactions with them. I hope you continue I really want to read the next one
I love this soo much, it's amazing how you let Alanna still be a badass even in convent school and how you quickly introduced her friends we all know and love so that we can see this Alanna's interactions with them. I hope you continue I really want to read the next one
5/17/2017 c3 2An Impatient Pierce Fan
This is incredibly well written. I love that you have kept true to Alanna by letting her find ways to better herself in both the social and physical arenas.
However... I am afraid you are stumbling into the common pitfalls from which Alanna convent fics suffer. First, Thom is not his sister. Even beyond not understanding people, he doesn't really like them and has no desire to make friends. And second, Jon has somehow survived into adulthood despite Roger having tried to kill him—without Alanna there to save him—twice now. That's assuming you are bringing her in around the same time as Delia, otherwise he has had more opportunity at the Drell.
Both of these can definitely be fixed by showing the reader what happened during the time period that you skipped over, so I really hope to see more of how we got to present day from Thom's side!
This is incredibly well written. I love that you have kept true to Alanna by letting her find ways to better herself in both the social and physical arenas.
However... I am afraid you are stumbling into the common pitfalls from which Alanna convent fics suffer. First, Thom is not his sister. Even beyond not understanding people, he doesn't really like them and has no desire to make friends. And second, Jon has somehow survived into adulthood despite Roger having tried to kill him—without Alanna there to save him—twice now. That's assuming you are bringing her in around the same time as Delia, otherwise he has had more opportunity at the Drell.
Both of these can definitely be fixed by showing the reader what happened during the time period that you skipped over, so I really hope to see more of how we got to present day from Thom's side!
4/9/2017 c3 Guest
Please continue. I like it and I can't wait to find out what Alanna is going to do.
From Lillip. Kge. Denmark.
Please continue. I like it and I can't wait to find out what Alanna is going to do.
From Lillip. Kge. Denmark.
3/22/2017 c3 SilverRyu
Oh please tell me there maybe more to come? I love how you are writing the story with making her to OOC.
Oh please tell me there maybe more to come? I love how you are writing the story with making her to OOC.
11/28/2016 c3 SunnyCloud
I really linke your different take in a before used idea. I hope you continue the story and keep updating as often :)
I really linke your different take in a before used idea. I hope you continue the story and keep updating as often :)
11/27/2016 c3 Bobateafiend
You know I like how even though Alanna's fiery nature might have been somewhat tempered by the repressive nature of the convent, she can still slip in her own bit of charm (which others miiiiight just call her being a smart ass) when she can. I hope we get a lot more short tempered, fly-off-the-handle Alanna though. And yessss, it's time to meet the crew! Time to meet JON. Time to get Alanna to jump Jon...wait. Nevermind, drowning self in holy water to clean out impure thoughts. But keep up the good work!
You know I like how even though Alanna's fiery nature might have been somewhat tempered by the repressive nature of the convent, she can still slip in her own bit of charm (which others miiiiight just call her being a smart ass) when she can. I hope we get a lot more short tempered, fly-off-the-handle Alanna though. And yessss, it's time to meet the crew! Time to meet JON. Time to get Alanna to jump Jon...wait. Nevermind, drowning self in holy water to clean out impure thoughts. But keep up the good work!
11/24/2016 c2 Guest
Great story, please continue. By the way; you wrote " he couldn't remenber speaking of HIM "
shouldn't it be " he couldn't remenber speaking of HER " ?
Great story, please continue. By the way; you wrote " he couldn't remenber speaking of HIM "
shouldn't it be " he couldn't remenber speaking of HER " ?
11/24/2016 c2 Guest
great story, please continue. by the way; you wrote " he couldn't remenber speaking of HIM "
shouldn't it be " he couldn't remenber speaking of HER" ?
great story, please continue. by the way; you wrote " he couldn't remenber speaking of HIM "
shouldn't it be " he couldn't remenber speaking of HER" ?
11/16/2016 c2 Bobateafiend
Well I'm liking the start of this already! Guess I've found my new SOTL fic! Yay!
Well I'm liking the start of this already! Guess I've found my new SOTL fic! Yay!