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6/2/2011 c1 35Gothic-Romantic99
This is a pretty good story. You did well with your portrayal of Berger here. He would use any excuse possible to have a party. The interactions between him and Claude come off as authentic and playful. Berger's line about the rapture not coming to pass and having to go to work on Monday is hilarious and very true to his character.

The party, however, could use some improvement. You could have used a little more detail and had some more interactions between the characters. You mentioned they hadn't seen each other in a while, so that allows for a lot of room to explore. You could have also dove deeper into Shelia and Mike's relationship. The bit about Mike supposedly being afraid of the tribe could add some good drama to the party scene were you to expand on his past meetings with Claude and company and how he acts around them now. That party itself comes off as flat where some good descriptions and interesting conversations between the friends could fix it up.

The last part with the neighbor was the perfect way to end the story. In all it's a good story.
5/22/2011 c1 114eirenical
Aw! Berger using the Rapture as an excuse for a party. Adorable. ^_^ Just adorable. And totally Berger.

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