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12/6/2020 c11 28RobertBruceScott
Copied from my review on QuoteV:
Always nice to start a chapter with some good word-painting. So Divr's thoughts apparently altered the function of the holodeck... Star Fleet crews should be trained by now not to take such events lightly - definitely something fishy going on here.

It appears everyone is having odd visions. Nice bit of storytelling to give clues hither and yon. They appear to be related to possible future events, but at very different time scales. This looks fun.

Thanks! rbs
11/15/2020 c10 Lya
Your story is awesome. I love Guinan's and Simon's friendship.
11/8/2020 c10 RobertBruceScott
Kudos on the quality of your dialogue. As I wrote over on Q - very natural and organic.

Thanks! rbs
10/13/2020 c9 26LornaWinters
Ah, now we know how Simon came to be assigned to Adventurer. Good ol' Guinan, always looking out for people. Now our boy has a new method for making friends. I can see Max saying something like, "Don't forget who your friends are, my elf-man! Mighty nice old fashioned you made with that brandy. Would you mix me up another?"

Really nice to get an update. Thanks for the shoutout! XD
10/13/2020 c9 28RobertBruceScott
Good reading on Guinan's voice. Simon does seem the excitable sort.

It's good to see you updating this story again after a very long absence.

Thanks! rbs
6/13/2020 c8 26LornaWinters
Phew! So glad they found Toban - I was worried about the guy!

So many wonderful moments in this chapter. I think it's your best one yet! I loved how Lori hugged Simon and was like, "You heroic fool." And how Dvir was watching it. Is that jealousy I detect? I sure hope so, LOL! Hum hum hum! "Is it like a thousand degrees in here?" HAHAHAHA!

Speaking of Dvir, this pigmentation on his arm has me concerned. (Of course, we might wonder if he just wanted to get hurt so Lori could fix him up again? He sounded like he wanted to experience her attentiveness again. ;-) ) And what's with that tower thing and the trap door? The mystery deepens!

And I liked the line about Simon asking Max to remind him not to challenge him to sports, and Max asked which one. "Any." Hehehee.

I also really enjoyed all the descriptions of the hills and flowers. Sounds like a nice place. It's understandable why Toban is so sad to leave.

Great chapter - it was well worth the wait! :-D
6/12/2020 c8 28RobertBruceScott
It appears we have a mystery on our hands... Primitive people don't build jamming devices...

I will be interested to see if Captain Issacs returns to investigate. That is assuming he hasn't had his pips handed to him for a blatant violation of the Prime Directive.

Nice scenery descriptions. So what could cause red pigmentation on a green blooded vulcan?

Thanks! rbs
6/4/2020 c7 26LornaWinters
Ha ha, that first part about Dr. Brax was funny! XD

Simon is proving himself to be quite the hero! Although, Lori might be angry with him for pulling her out right when things were getting interesting.

"Simon! How could you? I won't let you face the dangers alone!"

"I was just trying to protect you, Lori."

"But I couldn't bear it if anything happened to you!" She sniffs.

"Why do you care so much?" Simon can't help but ask.

"Because I want you to be my boyfriend, silly!"

"Boyfriend?"

"Yes, I always wanted a Romulan boyfriend." She sighs dreamily.

Sorry, got carried away there! ;-) The search continues ... Hope they find Toban in time! Great chapter!
6/3/2020 c7 28RobertBruceScott
I enjoyed the teasing about the bolian doctor. I also like that Amgar relented at the end.

Overall, this story is textbook advertisement for the primacy of the Prime Directive. Makes me wonder why the captain violated it in this case.

Thanks! rbs
5/30/2020 c6 26LornaWinters
Yay! Simon & Co to the rescue! So excited to see Max and Lori joining the mission! This Vulcan, Dvir, sounds interesting, too. I wonder how they'll all play off of each other?

But will Simon make it back in time for his date with his XO on Friday night? Or will he work up the nerve for a date with Lori instead? ;-)

Looking forward to the next update! :-)
5/30/2020 c6 Lyanna
I hope Toban is ok. The prime directive lol.. some rules are just mean to be broken.
I don't understand, Simon doesn't have a Starflleet academy training ? I probably forgot about that.
5/30/2020 c6 28RobertBruceScott
Nice character development on the Captain and his executive staff and a very good scene with Toban. I do find myself wanting to see more of his people and their village - colors, textures, smells, do they have bumpy foreheads like all the other Star Trek aliens?

I appreciate your ability to tell us what people are thinking and feeling through dialogue and with descriptions of their actions and expressions instead of internal dialogue.

Thanks! rbs
5/26/2020 c5 RobertBruceScott
Nice tightly written scene. I like the decisiveness of the captain.

I wasn't able to find the tumblr photos, but you can post them in this venue.

Thanks! rbs
5/26/2020 c5 26LornaWinters
"Hard Justice" eh? Sounds...harsh. I'm worried about Toban. His goodbye felt so final. Hopefully Simon will save him ... and still make his date in the nick of time on Friday night! ;-)
5/24/2020 c4 Jen
I love the meeting between Simon and his commander, it was very funny.
Amgar is a little paranoid but I really like Toban.
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