2/23/2013 c1 2harmonicagranger
Oh my gosh! I played Lucille in TMM! Loved reading your take on my character! :)
Oh my gosh! I played Lucille in TMM! Loved reading your take on my character! :)
7/11/2012 c1 thewhiphand5
That was so so awesome. Thoroughly Modern Millie is one of my favorites and I think you did an amazing job! Keep it up.
That was so so awesome. Thoroughly Modern Millie is one of my favorites and I think you did an amazing job! Keep it up.
8/31/2011 c1 1scarlet luchia
Hi There! I sure am exited to see other Thoroughly Modern Millie lovers! Your story has a good line so far and I will love to read on. I just have a few tips...
Keep it all in the same tense! If you are talking in firt person ( I, Me) keep it that way.
Try to make every sentance opener different. Read the first word in each sentance and if two words reapeat in a paragraph you have to change something.
Lastly, remember you don't have to repeat things so often. If you say "she was exausted." at the end of a paragraph you don't have to say it again in the next we know she still is.
There are a few spelling things but we all have them! We all can learn more everyday, and NO ONES story is perfect (especialy mine. I'm embarresed.)
Keep up the good work!
Hi There! I sure am exited to see other Thoroughly Modern Millie lovers! Your story has a good line so far and I will love to read on. I just have a few tips...
Keep it all in the same tense! If you are talking in firt person ( I, Me) keep it that way.
Try to make every sentance opener different. Read the first word in each sentance and if two words reapeat in a paragraph you have to change something.
Lastly, remember you don't have to repeat things so often. If you say "she was exausted." at the end of a paragraph you don't have to say it again in the next we know she still is.
There are a few spelling things but we all have them! We all can learn more everyday, and NO ONES story is perfect (especialy mine. I'm embarresed.)
Keep up the good work!
9/30/2010 c1 6bryswym
i also played lucille last year in thoroughly modern millie! she was a small character that ive always wanted to learn more about. interesting take on lucille and please write more!
i also played lucille last year in thoroughly modern millie! she was a small character that ive always wanted to learn more about. interesting take on lucille and please write more!
9/17/2010 c1 2Jemidancer2011
Oh my gosh I love this! I played Lucille in my school's musical this past year and found this REALLY ironic! I loved it! you should write more! :)
Oh my gosh I love this! I played Lucille in my school's musical this past year and found this REALLY ironic! I loved it! you should write more! :)
5/15/2010 c1 1Afternoon on a hill
this was adorable. Millie is my favorite musical, especially since iplayed her at my school:) we didnt have a luccilee in ours... but reading this i wish we did
this was adorable. Millie is my favorite musical, especially since iplayed her at my school:) we didnt have a luccilee in ours... but reading this i wish we did
1/2/2010 c1 1aspiringauthor013
That was really good! I love this play and I love the way you gave Lucille a personality. Please make more?
That was really good! I love this play and I love the way you gave Lucille a personality. Please make more?
10/5/2009 c1 4panda lover
Good job! It really captured Lucille which we don't know anything about. Makes up her character.
Good job! It really captured Lucille which we don't know anything about. Makes up her character.