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9/2/2019 c1 Darkzexal
Guauu...fue increible, maravilloso, fantastico
11/12/2018 c4 DMCAnAngelsKing8
Hi ! I have a requested crossover story that I want you to write :

Crossover between Devil May Cry ( Classic Version / DMC1 Timeline / Post Game / just to let you know that Vergil is alive in this fanfic AU and has Yamato and has gotten out of hell but instead of ending up in the human world he ends up in another world / specifically the dragon ball super universe ) and Dragon ball Super .

Note : In this alternative universe Vergil is alive ( Not corrupted ) and has made his way out of hell after crafting a dimensional portal with Yamato , but instead of ending up in the human world, he arrives in the dbs universe , in which one of the female angel attendants has a vision about him becoming an all powerful and unchallenged demon king . supposedly the sinister foresight for her was supposed to show him ending up in the far past itself where the super dragon balls were first created and weren't so heavily guarded and being watched over . but Instead a minor mistake had occurred , and it wasn't completely accurate as her foresight had shown it to be and somehow he had ended up on lord Champas planet but he was quickly subdued by her ( Aka knocking him unconscious with a light chop to the neck ) before he could get into a fight with the god of destruction himself , resulting in him being deleted from existence due to Lord Champa's Hakai ability .

Main Pairing : Vergil x Vados ( In Character )

Genre : Supernatural / Romance / Action

Rated M for Smut Language and Violence .

The Demon And His Angel

Summary : When Vados receives a dreadful vision of the future , in the form of a mysterious cloaked figure who carries a large katana by his side in its own hilt . wishing upon the dragon god known as Zarama for ultimate power as an all powerful demon king , one who could create and destroy anything he so well pleased without second thought . the subsequent foresight of what came next was absolutely daunting to her and the death count that followed afterwards was immeasurable at that , but yet , the terrifying fantasy quickly becomes a reality when the monster arrives in her world seeking out the dragon balls . Nevertheless as time slowly progresses onwards with the cold hearted demon living on the planet of Lord Champa as their own slave . the beautiful angel starts to gradually show signs of sympathy and compassion for the half devil named Vergil even though her Hakaishin insists that he isn't worth their time and would destroy him if he ever double crosses them . nonetheless sooner or later she comes to realization that maybe there is more to the white haired son of Sparda than meets the eye .

To the author please do my requested crossover story that's all I am kindly asking
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Thank You ..
11/12/2018 c1 4Angel Wolf
Damn, not often I see an old school story come back, super cool!

This brings back a lot of nostalgia for the old school, I think thats why it appeals to me. The story as a whole isn't anything technically complex or hyper-literary, so it's just left to stand on dialogue alone. And the dialogue's (mostly) strong, the characters are all there like you remember. You could see this happening circa 2009 as a deleted scene from the games. On the other hand, it's not without flaws.

I do feel you'd do well to tighten up the format and the grammar. Multiple sentences suffer from poor structure, which gets rather annoying if not entertaining. There's also phonetic misspellings, hole isn't the right word despite sounding like it, that one means a hole in the ground, you're looking for whole like a whole piece. Everything's pretty much just like a fanfic from 2009, for better or worse. That being said, the characterization is a little juvenile. . . Okay, it's very juvenile, but for harmless fun I feel that's not an issue. Dante is basically caught back between the beginning and ending of his third game persona, which is rather annoying but it works given what the story's aiming for.

The format is rather off-putting to look at, try organizing your notes with different alignment compared to the rest of the story, also consider using a line to break up scenes and/or author notes. It's a personal style choice, but you could also make indents to ensure each sentence ends on the same line it begins on, which I find to be more pleasant to look at. Again though that's just personal style, so do what works for you, I'm sure plenty of people just don't care.

Overall, the thing's no piece of artwork but I think that's the point, it's just for fun. There's no need to rip it apart over it's faults, the story is gleefully meant to incite laughter as much as it is a 'golden age' feel, if that makes sense. I'm just a beta reader by trade, so take these comments as friendly constructive criticism, I can't help it sometimes. Anyway, it's overly-basic and that's just fine, I like a bit of basic every once in a while. Keep it up :)
6/29/2015 c20 8Fanfiction108
DantexLady fic. Maybe a light hearted one of them having a family.
2/20/2014 c18 kid23jk7
it was type cute :)
1/14/2013 c18 3Dark Creed
Please continue its literally killing me! Please tell me that Vergil will get to love Anne! Oh the torture!
*yeah I know...dramatic right?*
4/19/2012 c7 7ChaosxPaladin
Alright, I wasn't planning on making a review till the last chapter, since this is basically already way ahead, but I felt that this needs to be said.

WHAT THE HELL DID YOU DO TO CREDO'S PERSONALITY? He is ABSOLUTELY NOTHING like you depicted. I understand that this is fanfiction, its non canon and its your work, but seriously. You destroyed everything that made Credo a good character. Loyal, obedient, caring and trustworthy, followed with a strong sense of Justice. DMC4 Credo would have never kicked Kyrie out the way you depicted. DMC4 Credo would not have sent an army to get rid of Nero, he would have done it himself despite the fact that he respects as well as loves Nero like a brother. Now he's just a detestable, over protective prick who thinks his word is Law.

Anyway, I'm done ranting. So far, the fanfic is well depicted and has a good flow. Although, a little more description would be nice during dialogue. Instead of just making text all caps, add some actions. Its been alright since you put in description before the dialogue, but there could still be more added. Hope this helps, and yes, I am a Credo fan.
12/23/2011 c18 Hakanii-chan
omg i thought this story was so cute! and i hope u continue :] wish vergil will accept his child hehe
5/11/2010 c19 HEY its Sylvia
Hey!, um read the story LOVED IT!

I hope Vergil accepts his son and learns to love Anne, I really really hope he does!

Sequel ahhhhhhhhhhhh! oh my gosh I'm so excited!

I'm sorry I don't have any ideas for you but I'll be sure to think of some for you!

Keep up the amazng work!
12/27/2009 c18 5Shoryaku no neko
Hey there, I just wanted to say I like your fic a lot and that I think you should really continue it =)! DON T STOP IN THAT KIND OF MOMENTS !

So, please continue and sorry i don't really have suggestions but I guess this is going to be a mess...

Good Night, and sorry if there are mistakes (english isn't my first language)
12/25/2009 c19 1Angelforever06
Hey,a sequel~~erm yeah,that would be great.Well i just hope Vergil wouldn't be a evil dad~~ and husband on the sequel~~haha anyway,erm if you do continue the story...well maybe you can inform me?You know,just wanted to know what happen aftger this~~
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