12/27/2020 c1 10JohnStang
I am sorry but this started as one very jarring read. There are so many grammatical mistakes. Usually I tend to look over those mistakes as mine own writing is far from perfect. However, this time they were so many I could not finish reading this story. In fact, I could not continue after about midway into the fourth paragraph. Now I know why editors are needed. They read over your work and let you know of these mistakes so the reader do not get jarred as badly.
Again I am sorry,
John
I am sorry but this started as one very jarring read. There are so many grammatical mistakes. Usually I tend to look over those mistakes as mine own writing is far from perfect. However, this time they were so many I could not finish reading this story. In fact, I could not continue after about midway into the fourth paragraph. Now I know why editors are needed. They read over your work and let you know of these mistakes so the reader do not get jarred as badly.
Again I am sorry,
John
12/2/2017 c13 Guest
OROCHIMARU I WILL FUCKING KILL YOU YOU FUCKING BASTARD YOU TOOK NARUTO'S VIRGENITY I WILL FUCKING WHIP YOUR EVIL ASS TO HELL AND BACK AGAIN
OROCHIMARU I WILL FUCKING KILL YOU YOU FUCKING BASTARD YOU TOOK NARUTO'S VIRGENITY I WILL FUCKING WHIP YOUR EVIL ASS TO HELL AND BACK AGAIN
12/2/2017 c6 Guest
sounds exactly like me
my uncle just died
broke down
reads to much
step mom justy had little Finn
i lived in a house thAT WAS 98 DEGREES AND THE ROOF WAS OFF ON MY 12TH B-DAY
AND I WILL BE GOING TO wYOMING FOR CRISMAS AND SUMMER
sounds exactly like me
my uncle just died
broke down
reads to much
step mom justy had little Finn
i lived in a house thAT WAS 98 DEGREES AND THE ROOF WAS OFF ON MY 12TH B-DAY
AND I WILL BE GOING TO wYOMING FOR CRISMAS AND SUMMER
12/2/2017 c1 Guest
awwww
awwww
2/7/2017 c2 willa
wow love it sasuke is a pervert lol and wow just wow I no words for this
wow love it sasuke is a pervert lol and wow just wow I no words for this
9/22/2016 c21 thelastunicorn
i love this story it is a really good story and i hope you will continue this story doe i would like to know what happens init but take your time in making more chapters for this story.
i love this story it is a really good story and i hope you will continue this story doe i would like to know what happens init but take your time in making more chapters for this story.
8/27/2016 c4 Redb4Black
"He looked like an angle..." I laughed a bit there... I know you meant angel but I just can't hahahahahXD
"He looked like an angle..." I laughed a bit there... I know you meant angel but I just can't hahahahahXD
8/24/2016 c7 31SapphireKageKyuura
Awwwweeee though it's sad that they had to spell it out for Sasuke to finally figure it out that Naruto loved him. Hahah and I think Naruto looks better as a girl anyway :)
Awwwweeee though it's sad that they had to spell it out for Sasuke to finally figure it out that Naruto loved him. Hahah and I think Naruto looks better as a girl anyway :)
8/24/2016 c1 SapphireKageKyuura
So that jutsu that hit Naruto just then, was a jutsu that would keep him as a female forever right? Hahahah great!
So that jutsu that hit Naruto just then, was a jutsu that would keep him as a female forever right? Hahahah great!