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11/5/2019 c37 15StellarMage99
I'm rooting for Lavi.
But then I'm rooting for Lenalee.
This is hilarious, the summary was accurate. Allen's harem XD
9/15/2016 c30 Eric Reed
Very well done I may not have an account but I can still book mark this. This my favorite dgm stor thus far.
11/8/2015 c5 64Chronic Guardian
Because I don't have the time for a full on review, I'm gonna be your own personal Lavi and give you a next to useless fluffy review of poor articulation!

That said, away we go!

Isn't it funny how Ivy is really more or less the same as Kanda underneath her facade? On one side, it makes it easy to double up the similar traits and reactions, but on the other, you have to be careful to distinguish them from each other as well as balance them out as a couple. Over all, I look forward to their growth.

I like the back and forth you have between Lavi's scheme and Ivy's deductive reasoning. It's a fun little mental fencing match that Lavi almost throws through sheer enthusiasm.

Overall, the very high-school oriented conflict is well carried by the ludicrousness of the characters and their believably limited perspectives. As time goes on, I can only wonder how some of them will develop. Perhaps eventually they'll start appreciating Lavi and his meddling? I know, fat chance. But if the guy gets sick, then they might eventually miss him.
...Y'know. It's a thought...

Anyway, It's got some nice, bite size development so far. I look forward to seeing where this goes.

Your lamely time-crunched buddy,
-CG
10/20/2015 c1 Chronic Guardian
I know you just touched this up, but seeing as CG is a wise-guy who's literary digestion involves heavy critiquing, prepare to face a running commentary you most definitely didn't ask for. If you want the short version, CG liked the sharp teen-satire flair matched with a subtle plot introduction and build. If you want the long version, the rest of it will probably be sent to your inbox after it's truncated.

That aside, away we go!

Wow... wishing for nothing more is a pretty extreme qualifier. That's essentially saying, "would you rather win the lottery and have a lifetime production pass to every major restraunt and studio or repeatedly murder monday?" and having the Kanda choose the latter. Of course, considering he's a moody teen, such qualifiers actually may not be too far from the truth. Kids can be so closed minded...

"Just try calling him by his first name, I dare you"
This puts and interesting spin on the narrative quality. I'm torn between dismissing it as budding stylistic choice or reading a little more into it as a small insight into a yet unintroduced narrator. I guess I'll just have to read on to find out how significant this will be...
Oh, and I have the awful foreboding someone (probably the perky girl stereotype character) will eventually call this kid "Kanda-Panda"(Look at those dark emo marks around your eyes, Kanda!). Just throwing that out there.

Huh, he hates school, but makes it a point to get there early. Very interesting...

"...the Japanese teen continued heading in her direction".
This statement sort of leads me to the conclusion that Kanda is distinctly Japanese as opposed to whatever nationality his other classmates are. Of course, it could just as soon only mean that Kanda is Japanese without further implications (Ivy's surname seems very Japanese, so that at least makes two of them), this is just where my mind goes.

"Hey, Ivy"
I also note that Kanda doesn't have the same strict "surname only policy" when addressing other people. ...Hypocrite.

The immediately following paragraph is highly theoretical, rhetorically entertaining, and again enforces that narrative lilt that makes me wonder when we'll meet who's telling the story.

"loud enough to rival the bleachers of the winning school at a football game"
In which we find out CG has way too many stylistic hang ups...
1st, something about this feels off, like a run-on sentence. Maybe it's the subject though. Try changing it to "bleacher chorus" instead, see how it strikes you.
2nd, American football? Or soccer? I still haven't tacked down if this highschool AU takes place in a Japanese Highschool or the US of A.
3rd, I almost wonder why nobody else notices... almost. If the tone is consistent at all, then we can just assume Kanda (or the narrator) is exaggerating.

This Lavi guy is a ridiculous slave to fashion(out of season scarves are... well... not a smart idea without the right fabric). Obviously he's going to be the comic relief. I look forward to this...

Kanda's definition of elevating a level... it works both in illustrating the pettiness of his character and setting the tone for the story in general. Well done.

"'You came here with Kanda, I see?{"} If he ever gives you any trouble at all...'"
Avi-chan... quote splicers don't work that way...

"he gain[ed] a sick sort of pleasure from {watching} the redhead['s] {be in} pain,"
Just some suggestions. Y'know, in case you want to do even more work than you already are.

"at least two more paragraphs"
Do I hear a fourth wall shattering? Or is this just the way Kanda talks.

Also, that's a lot of pronouns in that paragraph. Just sayin'...

"At least Ivy could somehow control Lavi to make him [sufferable(CG's so out of touch with teenagers that he thinks this sounds better than "standable)] to some microscopic degree."

"Allen was a short boy, although that was nowhere near the most interesting thing about him."
I hope not. That would be sad...

"Kanda swallowed his mouthful of what was supposed to be eggs..."
Man... I don't think it's legal to serve powdered eggs anymore. Still, poorly prepared scrambled eggs are more than enough to make a teenager skeptical. They haven't worked the industry...

Anyway, I like the way this scene unfolds. Except... I can't quite tell if Lavi's hinting towards Kanda and Ivy, or if its something else and Kanda's just not in the mood because he hates Mondays, Lavi, and doing stuff about other people. Hmm... indeed.

Closing comments: A pretty good first chapter as far as first chapters go. I like the character chemistry you have going on, and there's already a lot of potential for where this could go. While I still have a lot of questions left unanswered, I'm sure those can wait till next time.

Reading again when I have the chance,
-CG
6/23/2014 c19 15Jui-Imouto-Chan
I like Lavi's lucky to have Allen as a boyfriend paragraph very much. I love Allen X Lavi. Though, it is quite funny to hear Lavi say that he regrets being straight. I wish he was gay.
11/17/2013 c18 aaaawhyareallthenamestaken
i can't wait for the next chapter! :)
8/9/2013 c17 5Shirubagure
I hope you update soon! xD Leave it to Allen to have a younger girl fall in love with him. :3 Ari is younger than Allen right?
11/17/2012 c16 2DGMLover12564
God, I will never be soo so so sooo thankful that my sisters are quiet!

Really, but I love Ari. I expected her to be this phthisic spoiled b-I-t-c-h. Sorry, but that how Lavi kinda made it sound in chapter 15.

When's the next chapter coming out? I'm wayyyyy tooooo excited for 5:25 in the morning.

Why am I up anyways?
Eh, I don't know...

Any ways...

I'm waiting ;)
11/14/2012 c8 DGMLover12564
Hahahha

Lavi must be thinking 'Perrrrfect...'

Lolz XD
11/14/2012 c2 DGMLover12564
Love this story!

And oh la la, do I love were its going ;)
4/13/2011 c1 1Applurr
Aw, interesting first chapter, I need to sleep but will be reading some more ^ w ^ later.

Kanda may seem to me off a little but I think it's cute, so thank you for writing such an intriguing fic 6 w 6
1/19/2011 c16 Lathya
So Kanda and Ivy left? I wonder what their going to do now that they're alone, cold and alone. ^_^ I'll just let my mind wander for a bit. Please update soon. (I keep forgetting how much I love this story, until you update a new chapter).

Ja mata
7/8/2010 c15 Lathya
Awww. I love that image of Kanda having Ivy sleeping on his shoulder. It's so sweet. I'm guessing that Lavi doesn't like his sister much. I wonder why. Update soon so I can find out, go on, get to it. ^_^

Ja mata
7/1/2010 c15 Blood-red Moonlight
Hooray for Kanda and Ivy but poor Lavi...
1/11/2010 c14 1Soulless Ghosty
I love this story! It's so sweet, and I love how you tied everyone into it. SSGKIT is hysterical! I was wondering, it's been a few months since you last updated, could you please, please, please update it? Please? You've got 48 (well, 49 now) reviews, I'm sure that I'm not the only one who really wants you to continue it. So please? For your fans? Thanks for your time! Please at least consider!
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