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9/24/2015 c1 Draggy
OMG this was so cute to read. Especially with Draggy being my favorite dragon character of all time I'm glad it ended on a positive nore.
10/11/2013 c1 7DarkHorse26
Guile and Draggy... It is very rare to see these two included at the same time. Maybe I can't leave a long review like usual because I'm a bit...um, not quite in the mood to review stuffs these days, but I'll do my best for Guile fics because I need to maintain my community.

But nevertheless, this fic is adorable! Moody Guile is surprisingly fitting and lovely. Despite his anger, he doesn't curse, which sounds just right. Lol, sleeping until he's satisfied? Guile is really, really sleepy. He makes a good friend for that old fortune teller, but he ends up getting sleepy.

Draggy is a naughty lil dragon, but he's lucky that Guile isn't a type who will use violence for most things. Bahahahaha, leaping repeatedly like a spring? Lol, this remind me of a Hokkien quote 'thiau kau siang ka per' (the meaning is exactly 'jumping like a spring'), which is used to depict someone when he/is upset.

Sweet ending! Sometimes people shouldn't pull conclusions too quickly, eh? XD Good work, friend!
10/10/2013 c1 guilefan
Guile and Draggy? Hell yeah! As long as it contains Guile, I'm willing to give it a shot! But only if it is something Guile-centric, or at least rather close to Guile-centric...

First thing first, I commend the realistic characterization of Guile! Gotta love his mood swings... Mood shifts are pretty common when one's lacking of sleep. It's very often for someone to imagine how nice the bed and pillow will be... It's truly unusual for Guile to bang the door and yell (even you note in the narrative that it's unusual for Guile to get angry, which is true to his character), but mood swing, mood swing, mood swing...

Lol for Draggy's weight! No wonder why Guile gets worried, because he *really* wants to sleep! And he chooses to negotiate, but he is way too tired to continue the arguments. Draggy is just stubborn because he dislikes cold, and even continues to hop on the bed. But in the end...

Draggy was friendlier than Guile thought. - This line sums up the entire story very well! XD Draggy seems to be a mischievous little dragon at first, but the truth is, he is nice!

I see this is your first fic? It's a pretty good start! :)
10/5/2013 c1 68Legendary Biologist
Cranky ol' Guile has a bed, E-I-E-I-O!
And on his bed a dragon jumps, E-I-E-I-O!
(This is what Mustang is trying to write in his review, but seems like things are eaten. In case things are eaten again in this review, check the forum as Mustang has posted there.)

As a review creeper, I think our dear Colonel Mustang has forgotten 'Melting the Heart of Ice', where I have done a grumpy ol' Guile in it (but in a darker way, unlike this lighthearted fic). ;)

Anyway, this fic itself is warm and fuzzy. Love your word choice, because they strengthen the fuzzy atmosphere of the entire story.

Guile's characterization is realistic (and not OOC) which is a win! I myself get easily annoyed if I lack of sleep too! Well, well, mine is worse than Guile's mood swing when sleepy of course...

Draggy is hilarious. He dislikes cold, and just wants to be warm. Marble floor is cold (just take an example when you go to Berastagi, if you happen to step on a marble floor, that is ridiculously cold). Draggy is very stubborn (doesn't want to leave the bed), and Guile has been trying to be nice to him, but lol, this just makes poor Guile even more exhausted!

If Draggy was kind enough to give me only the blanket, I would gladly let him conquer my bed! - I smell snarky Guile here. XD

In the end, it's cute. Things don't end as badly as Guile thinks... Adorable! :) Fav'd because this makes my day (and I appreciate your effort in writing for something that is highly unlikely to be found in the fandom, AKA chicken's tooth/Mustang's favorite term)! Really, at first I want to write a GuileDraggy friendship too, but I'm busy, which is sad. But during semester holidays, maybe I'll write one... But I need to continue 'In Search of the Past' as well.

A little notes:
He was not even in the mood to take off his boots and mask, (change) to pajamas or such. - I'd recommend 'change' instead of 'switch' because 'switch' reads odd.
Looking at Draggy with his (half-closed) eyes, - Because you've mentioned that Guile is walking with his eyes half-closed earlier, I think this one sounds better than 'sore eyes'.

See you next time! :)
10/4/2013 c1 4Guile Mustang
I GOTTA FAV THIS JUST BECAUSE THERE ARE BOTH GUILE AND DRAGGY IN IT LOLOLOLOLOL! SEQUEL PLZ!

*is slapped* Sorry, can't resist! When LB first thinks of writing for Guile and Draggy, I am very happy because I am a huge fan of those two (with Guile on the top, definitely).

Ahem.

Cranky ol' Guile has a bed, O.
And on his bed a dragon jumps, O.

Get serious now, which I think is difficult after reading this cute little fic. ;)

Really cute I have to admit. Guile gets grumpy when he's sleepy... He thinks he can sleep until he is satisfied, but Draggy is playing on his bed lol and unwilling to leave it because the floor is cold. I literally lol when reading the bits about Draggy's weight (over a hundred kilograms for a baby, really WTH but that's the truth!), and Guile knows that his bed will break in any seconds. Draggy is persistent, while Guile is too tired to negotiate/argue with him. He sleeps on the floor and catches a cold, but... Well, such a cute ending there!

Just one note:
Guile refused to open his eyes, but he recognized that voice. Never had I expected this...
He was confident that it was Draggy because there was nobody else in this room. Besides, the living being he knew to possess such slurred accent was only Draggy.
-These two paragraphs read tad awkwardly, so I'd recommend combining them and move the 'Never had I expected this...' on the next paragraph.

And what else? I'll add this to the community because you've managed to keep Guile in-character (with the trait that people rarely use: mood swings). LB had once suggested this as one of Guile's bad traits, and I was a bit skeptical at first. But you've managed everything very nicely and convince me that it is possible to create a moody Guile without making him OOC.

Well done! :)

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