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8/5/2015 c3 4Kyd Ape
I was thinking of starting a Crystal Chronicles fan fic. This one is a great read and I hope to see more soon.
7/3/2014 c3 JustStoppingBy
I don't know if you're still working on this, but either way I was very impressed. Obviously anyone who wants to write a full FFCC narrative is going to find theirs to be compared with Dark Ampitheatre's, but I don't think that's something to criticize. It's fanfiction! Someone could whine that DA's story is beat-by-beat the story of the original game (which isn't true), so don't worry about that. You're showing a lot of impressive character development and you seem to have a real flair for dialogue. I will agree with the only other review, though, that readers will find it hard to go on yet another double-digit chapter recap of FFCC's story in fanfiction again. So things have to go a bit differently. Stray off the path.
And if you're done with this fanfiction, then I guess I'm talking to myself. But I don't regret that either. Thanks for posting the first three chaptres, and good luck to you.
11/3/2013 c2 extherian
I remember you. Weren't you the person that wrote that Crystal Bearers fanfic? That was actually pretty good.

So is this story, as it happens. Characterisation has always been your strong point, and it shows here. I don't buy your excuse for not including more details, though. Even though the readers know what the game world looks like, it still helps the "illusion of reality" when your characters aren't just soft of floating in space. Take your time in building up plot elements and showing aspects of their daily lives. It'll make the story that much more immersive.

On that note, why write this kind of story at all? It's been done before, countless times, Dark Amphithere's story being the prime example. Be a little imaginative and don't just go for the straight forward pairings. Have Raku show more of an interest in Illiana, for example. A rivalry between Raku and Kayan for her heart would be much more interesting than just pairing up each tribe with their opposite gender.

Nice hints about a major tragedy having affected Tipa before. It's a little cliched, but it should add some colour to this story.

I'm interested to see how you'll handle combat scenes. Also, less dialogue snipped from the game. I know there's not much, but none at all is preferable.

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