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4/26/2019 c1 7TheMadnessofDoctorStrangelove
You underestimate your skill. This is a marvelous hook for a story!
10/23/2017 c30 61saye0036
There is so much to this story that I feel I need to start again. So much detail and thought that you've put into this...well done. :)
9/21/2017 c6 20Hitomi Zotz
The plot thickens. I like how you should your OC's fear here and once again how you write Janus. He comes across as quite an intimidating and imposing character. Interesting how he pits Silvereye against Goldeneye almost immediately, it makes me more intrigued about Goldeneye.
9/2/2017 c5 Hitomi Zotz
I like Jessi, she bring some humour to this fic. My gosh Nick-Nack! Just a cameo but I loved it! I was thinking when you mentioned the red lettering on the train 'could it be' and then Scaramanga confirmed it. I love Scaramanga, I think I'm one of the few fans of The Man With the Golden Gun (film, I still haven't read the book) but I am bias with my unending love for Christopher Lee (and Roger Moore is my favourite Bond). I like how you wrote him here, calm and cool.
I like the hints of Janus' villainous side, how he dealt with the Russian who left him, and I'm so eager to find out why your OC hates him so much. I like what you write about Goldeneye/Jonathan too, he's a villain but since he's no reason to attack your OC yet he's a pretty decent guy in the meantime.
9/2/2017 c4 Hitomi Zotz
Ah so it was Goldeneye on the bike then. I like how you write him, I also like how you described the agony of Kaiko getting the eye inserted.
8/29/2017 c3 Hitomi Zotz
Quite an action packed chapter, I am intrigued. I'm curious about Jonathan Hunter and the person on the Daytona rider. I liked the inclusion of the blade and their foe spinning between them, terrified.
8/28/2017 c2 Hitomi Zotz
A villain stuck under a worse villain, I like it! I'm guessing the reddish-blonde is Alec, I love how sinister he is in this chapter with his dialogue and mannerisms. I particularly liked the line about defectors always being found. I love your descriptions too and good effort with the Russian (it looks right anyway, I don't speak anyway but seriously full points for using the Russian lettering, very authentic). Kaiko, is that Japanese?
8/26/2017 c1 Hitomi Zotz
I'm finally giving this fic the attention it deserves! So far I'm intrigued. You write fight scenes very well, I was very surprised to read your lead (I assume this is your lead) is an assassin of the Triad, I kept thinking 'they're the bad guys' but honestly it's different and makes me want to read more. Very exciting beginning!
4/26/2017 c28 61saye0036
Excellent chase scene!
10/23/2016 c9 saye0036
A very exciting action sequence! I loved it. Trying to keep it all together and adapt to rapidly changing situations. Silver and Golden eye would be quite a team.
10/23/2016 c6 saye0036
The poor girl has quite a conundrum to work through. I hope that she manages alright.
Very good, you suck the reader right into her apprehension.
10/19/2016 c4 saye0036
This chapter is intense, your attention to detail is very good. You describe the automobiles with more depth than the characters but it still works well.

The story is intriguing and I look forward to the rest. You've done a fantastic job with your research and all the languages and it is a fantastically well thought out plot.
10/19/2016 c3 saye0036
I like your attention to detail, that being said the detail of what characters is doing what, to whom is confusing. I understand that this may be part of your plot device but if you only use personal pronouns the dialogue, internal and external becomes muddled.

That could just be me, and if this were a visual medium, a film, it would make perfect sense. It plays like a film in ones head but the characterization is blurred in the midst of many references to -she.
10/3/2016 c23 5KaijuDirector
A suspense-filled chapter not too long after finishing beta work. Good job!
5/16/2016 c20 KaijuDirector
What a wonderful return. Best part was defintely Golden's account of how he got the eye, in which he has his best line yet.
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