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9/15/2015 c1 5Kanashimi Raven
I like the fanfiction though the sudden change of perspective in the beginning threw me off slightly. Personally I wouldn't recommend using it that way, either than that, well done.
5/16/2014 c1 Lola
Awwww
I'm so... Gaaahh this is so sad I'm crying so badly, the ending got me every time I re read it. :,,,(
6/12/2013 c1 10CoffeeLoverRie
Tears...what are you doing?...tears...stahp ;-; Good job TTwTT
4/29/2013 c1 Ivywalls12
I like the idea of this story but I have spotted a quite a few mistakes:
'It has been long years' doesn't make any sense, i suggest you use 'many years' instead.
Our children who are both now seventy makes more sense than what you wrote. Seventy three doesn't need a hyfen or a dash or whatever you call this -
'Roses in full bloom' is better than 'roses, full in bloom' I think.
There's no need for 'that', you can just have 'remind me of you'.
No need for the comma in 'I remember the first time, I met you.'
'I was glat it was you' need some revision and so does the last line. In short I suggest you proof read your work.
I recently read the manga and I just have to say the ending nearly made me cry. HANA!

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