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2/25/2013 c4 9ManyNerdThings
This story is really interesting! Looking forward to more, but don't feel like you have to rush: I'm horrible at updating too.
1/8/2013 c4 Glacier-Paws
It's good to see you came back to continue what you started. :D
1/7/2013 c4 4Jedelas
At least you were able to continue it. xD

Me on the other hand is still working on the next chapter of 'Last Wish' for almost three weeks! Anyway, I shouldn't voice out my own problems here, off for the review!

Again you were able to get a smile on me. You're good at that! Love how Rob acted in this chapter. You gave off the feeling as if he had emotions yet he's the same blank robot he always was. (If that even made sense. xD) Then the scene when the two disguised antagonists got in, makes me wonder what's gonna happen next!

Lastly, it seemed like the real Falco and Slippy would die out of boredom. xD This was nice, I'll definitely wait for your next update whenever you update this.
11/16/2012 c3 Guest
Can't wait for the next chapter!
11/16/2012 c3 15RainbowKandiKorn22
Still looking good! Keep it up!
11/16/2012 c3 4Jedelas
Well! This chapter got me to snicker at the first part with the argument at the start. So Max and Dexter wants to disguise as Slippy and Falco eh? Well, since their transformation, I keep wondering what would the real pair meets them.

Anyways, the dogfight was great! And a bit funny. You're doing great with comedy right now! Keep it up!
11/11/2012 c2 15RainbowKandiKorn22
I like this! You were able to have the humour in there while keeping everyone in character, which I've noticed not many people do. Keep up the good work!
11/7/2012 c2 4Jedelas
Hm. This one still gave me the laughs at some parts. Sooo it's alright!

I like how you depict most of the Venomian guards. The use of real life quotes and languages are somewhat stange to me, but I'm pretty sure I'll get used to that. xD
About the last part. It has me wondering and I just can't guess what will happen next, makes me wanna read the next chapter ASAP!

So far so good! Will be waiting for the next chapter.

Keep on improving and writting!
11/7/2012 c1 Jedelas
Well that's a first timer. You got a laugh from me at the very start of the story. Me gusta. xD

Anyways, I like this a lot. Slippy's his usual self like it was in SF64 and getting to see another side of Falco! Great story so far. Hope to see you keep it up!

Keep on improving and writting!
11/2/2012 c2 12Tripoli
Aww, a nice rare Falco and Slippy fic. Love them, but they're so hard to find. Great characterization of all of them, and your idea is great. I hope you don't end up bashing on them, since they really are such great characters ) Good job so far, and I can't wait for an update!
10/22/2012 c2 Glacier-Paws
I might be in no position to talk, but somehow I felt like it lacks scenery...you know something that gives a fixed direction as to how the different places are to be imagined.

Things that help answering stuff like "How big is the base they're entering, and how big does it look like from outside", "Is this first place Falco and Slippy get to after entering one room with corridors around it, or a large hall, or something inbetween or similar?" Stuff like that.

I know it's not necessary to describe what's going on, but it helps with the scenery.

Maybe it helps
Glacier
10/22/2012 c1 10RainbowNoms
It doesn't matter if this story has more twists than all of M. Night Shamalan's movies combined, I'm still gonna see this story as a place to get comic relief.

I'm not saying you should stop adding twists and turns, it's just that putting Falco and Slippy in the same sentence is like putting Glenn Beck and Keith Olbermann in the same sentence. There will never be a lack of humor in all of time.

That being said, portraying the Venomian army as a bunch of dumbasses was a stroke of genius. It really kind of explains why you could kill several thousand of them in the span of 7 stages in Star Fox 64.

Moving on, I like your writing style. It's very clean and crisp. I've seen many stories where the idea and plot line is amazing, but the way they write just leaves my brain focusing on all the corrections rather than the story. Your story does not fall prey to this, and all I can say is keep it up.

And Kansas? That was unexpected. And just...wow.

Anyway, you've made a dedicated follower out of me. Chapter 3 will be fun, I can smell it through my furry nose.

-Brandon
10/7/2012 c1 Guest
Seems pretty good. Definitely wouldn't mind seeing more.
10/8/2012 c1 15ShadowMan90
"Stop screaming and I'll help," Falco snapped. "…Maybe,"

He say that with a troll face? X3

Lookin good, so far, bro. Better update soon.

ME GUSTA! 8}

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