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4/23/2019 c1 Jon Mark Roman
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1/18/2018 c2 banzi
Enjoyed your update.
4/8/2016 c1 15Ellethiriel
I really enjoyed this! It's nice to get some idea of what Luke knew about his parents. And this bit stuck with me: "That tied the boy down when he wanted to walk in the sky." I LOVE that line, connected as it is with the earlier reference to Luke's last name and his wondering if he could walk in the sky too. Brilliant.

Really well-written!
3/14/2016 c1 aastacia
This is really lovely! I appreciate the acknowledgment of the women in Luke's life-Padme, Shmi and most especially Beru.
1/13/2016 c1 11Obiwanlivesforever
Nice to see a tribute to the Lars family. Like you, I have a lot of appreciation for minor characters and platonic/family relationships in fiction, and Owen and Beru are sadly underrated favorites of mine. I like how you tied the prequels and characters like Shmi, Cliegg, and Padme into this as well; too many people ignore them, even though they bring such life to the Skywalker family.

Thank you for highlighting the importance of Shmi in the family. Often people seem to think that Luke would have no knowledge of his family other than his aunt, uncle, and father, but as Shmi was Owen's stepmother, surely he would have told Luke about her. I think she would be very proud of her grandson, as he is a kind, gentle, and giving person like herself.

Some of my favorite things were the description of Luke's resentment and restlessness "periodically falling and rising like Tatooine's twin suns" and the third-to-last paragraph talking about how Owen and Beru did not deserve to die. They truly were innocent victims, and their murder is a key moment in the series as it shows for the first time the extent of the Empire's indiscriminate evil. I especially liked how you noted that they were peaceful, and had never sought out violence, yet it was meted out to them in a great amount.

My only criticisms would be that it is a little short - although sometimes, less is more - that Tatooine is spelt wrong, and that there's something a little off about the last line. I think it's because it's 'telling' more than 'showing,' and because the phrase "the Lars family" kind of makes them feel unconnected to Luke, as opposed to saying something like "his aunt and uncle" or "his guardians." But other than that, great story, and nice to see love for the Larses!
1/8/2016 c1 10scarl3twitch
I enjoyed this little snippet of Luke's life on Tattooine (it also looks to be very much canon-compliant). Your style of writing fits Luke very well: simple (and I mean that in the best way possible), yet earnest and meangingful. :)

I imagine Luke would definitely ask again and again for details regarding his parents. I also liked how, in Owen and Beru's answers to his questions, you gave the Lars family more dimension.

I did have one small nitpick with this sentence: "Luke wondered if he could do that too." I felt that here, it would be been more effective to rely on showing rather than telling, perhaps describing Luke's wistful glances at the sky, etc. instead of just stating his desire to visit other planets.

I look forward to continued reading if you decide to post any more! :)
1/8/2016 c1 2Totally Spazz-tastic
Oooooh me gusta mucho! I love your fics Jackie-you're like my internet sister from another mister...with more motivation to post fics than I do. :)
1/8/2016 c1 94lunarchroniclesandcockatiels
nice!

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